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Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from PhilH
Review:
This was good for the most part, but I'm a bit confused. Did Xander meet with them and then get away from them right away? Was he the boy who called them Sir? If the scene of them meeting was in there I missed it.

Phil
Comments from author:
Ok, I re-ordered the chapter to make it more clear that Xander and SG-1 just met. Sorry about the confusion.
Review By [PhilH] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from LostDragon
Review:
I like the set up for the meat of the story, however when does the To'Kra start talking to Xander????? Looking forward to more chapters.
Comments from author:
Soon.
Review By [LostDragon] • Date [17 Sep 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from burn
Review:
Keep it coming! I will admit that I wish you didn't mesh the 'verses but it's no biggie. Thanks.

Response: Duh, it's a fricken' crossover, Sherlock. I meant that you had BTVS and Stargate occupy the same planet. You could have used an alternate universe or had Xander stuck as the lone Tok'ra in the BVTS verse.
Comments from author:
Well, it is crossover fiction. If you're looking for stories that don't cross universes, I guess I would look on another site.

www.fanfiction.net has a large selection of non-crossover stories.

Hope you keep reading though.

Response to the Response: Ahh. That was mostly dictated by the Challenge. AU might have been difficult but possible, but lone Tok'ra would have violated the rules.
Review By [burn] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Rating [1 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from VillageOrchid
Review:
That was fun and exciting with just enough of a cliffhanger to want more, but not so much that I'm going "Aaarg!" before talk like a pirate day.
Comments from author:
Stay tuned for our next episode. Episode 5: Return of the Jolinar.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from Irda
Review:
Great story so far, very promising. I love Teal'c's observations, and I am really looking forward to Xander's reactions to Sam's more 'personal' memories, let alone Sam's response when she finds out.
Comments from author:
I think Sam's response to knowing that some one else had those memories, let alone a 17 year old boy... priceless.
Review By [Irda] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from michaelangelo
Review:
Peanuts? PEANUTS! I never got peanuts! I got a faffing little bag of pretzels it was like eating sawdust, all the way from Chicago to Boise, pretzels *cries* it was game over man, Game Over!. I'd have gnawed my leg off to have peanuts, I was thirsty as hell and they gave us juice or water in tiny sealed bowls.

The only other time I took a flight back in the 70's I was 9, we got sweets, fruit and a flimsy etch a sketch. This time I received a tiny bag with personal hygiene stuff, a blindfold which was useless because I'm terrified of flying and kept looking for something on the wing, some THING on the wing, oh and pretzels.

Oh yeah and the story was great. Well done :).
Comments from author:
Probably depends on which airline you fly and when. The last time I flew was before 9/11 and I got peanuts and a can of soda.
Review By [michaelangelo] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from (Recent Donor)drdeth
Review:
Very good story so far, I look forward to the meeting between the Scoobies and SG1.
Comments from author:
Should be interesting. Also, thank you for Recommending my story. That means a lot to me.
Review By [(Recent Donor)drdeth] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from Genuka
Review:
Ack! too Short!!!!! Moremoremoremoremoremoremoremoremore!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Comments from author:
It's only been 2 days. You'll have to be a bit more patient.
Review By [Genuka] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from borgrabbit
Review:
Great story!! May your Muse smile.

Haiku hiccup:

Poor child of great strife
Lives his complicated life
Stormy horizon
Comments from author:
Thank you for that beautiful Haiku.

Actually, Now that I read it again. I'd like to use it later if you don't mind. I'm going to change the last line to "Event Horizon" though. I think it fits better. Let me know if that's ok.
Review By [borgrabbit] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from CanuckDownUnder
Review:
Great story so far! Is Jolinar still there? Can't wait to find out, please update soon!
Comments from author:
You'll see very soon.
Review By [CanuckDownUnder] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from Selias
Review:
Seems like this will be a pretty good fic. Hope you update again soon.
Comments from author:
3 times in 2 days isn't enough for you. ;-)
Review By [Selias] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from ovid
Review:
Well, I don't know near enough to write up a hack segment. I was just thinking that there would be several scene changes focusing on Sam and Xander, and their reactions to their opponent's moves. And to simplify it, you could have Xander thinking simply while Carter/Jolinar are doing the hacking, and Sam is doing a running commentary to O'neill.

I like your solution to Xander's fighting memories. Reinforcement of the memories would be necessary. And tealc's response to the airport and the accompanying scenes was hilarious. On a side note, I don't think armored jaffa would even fit into economy seats. Though the thought of them putting their staffs into overhead storage is humorous.
Comments from author:
LOL at the overhead compartment visualization.
Review By [ovid] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from desartrattaz
Review:
good start, I am not a writer, so I just enjoy the stories.
Comments from author:
Well, I enjoy your enjoyment. :-D
Review By [desartrattaz] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from (Current Donor)vidicon
Review:
A lie that will be revealed pretty soon...Nice chapter and I thank you for posting it.
Comments from author:
Yes, I fear that it will not last.
Review By [(Current Donor)vidicon] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from dustin
Review:
Very nice! I've never seen quite this take on Xander as a Gould/to'kra before. I loved reading about Teal'c on the airplane. I can't wait for more
Comments from author:
Thank you. I do like to be unique.
Review By [dustin] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
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