I really like this story so far...but am a tad confused. Does Xander have the actual Tok'ra in his body or just the memories? 'Cause wouldn't he be freaking out more that there is an alien in him then? I gotta admit that you may have made this clear in the story, but I am too lazy to reread the chapter...I got some more stories to read:)
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Not yet. He did during Halloween and a piece was left behind. He's about to become very hungry as it regrows. He's eating for 2 after all.
Review By [lorimarie] • Date [15 Sep 11] • Rating [2 out of 10]
What I'm looking forward to right now is a hack war between Carter and Xander/Carter/Jolinar. It would be a typical mirror fight, except jolinar may give Xander and edge by having a different perspective.
I would have been more intrigued if Xander wasn't detected, and he did a major Intel drop on the SGC. They would be rushing to confirm its authenticity, and trying to figure out where it came from. Be fun and chaotic.
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Unfortunately I don't know enough about hacking to even write about it effectively. Thank you for your review though. If you think you can write it, I would love to read it. If it fits in the story somewhere, I would be happy to use it and give you credit.
Review By [ovid] • Date [15 Sep 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
That´s cool, genetic memory! Lucky that it was Tok´ra instead of a Goa´uld. Wondering what Xander will do once he sees Tealc and the gang in Sunnyhell.
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Keep reading to find out.
Review By [zima] • Date [15 Sep 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
I'm disappointed in the Xander/Sam/Jolinar combo, they really should have realized that their log-in to the website would raise questions. With their combined knowledge they should have been able to use so many different starting points for any found log-in that no one would have believed that Sunnydale was the start, unless they plan on contacting the SG team when they arrive to checkout the town and school.
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Xander's in control now. Carter and Jolinar are all but gone at the moment. At the moment he decided to access the site, answers were more important than questions. Basically, there was no way that Xander could think of that wouldn't alert the SGC. This was the least likely to raise suspicion except that Carter was in the infirmary (which Xander didn't know), which led to the log in being flagged.
And any part of Carter still there would like the SGC to find her. The host can influence the symbiote.
Also remember that bad decisions make the best stories. ;-)
Great chapter, even better that the first. I wonder if Xander will be as paranoid about trusting SG1 as Jolinar was or as trusting of them as Sam would be? He is sure to get a shock when he sees them around town! If he is smart then he will just hand himself in right away. His best chance at protecting Buffy and Willow is to satisfy Jack's curioisty before he manages to find anything suspicious about the town and hopefully they could keep the whole thing unofficial with no records of Xander's identity. After all he knows how good SG1 are - once they are on the trail they will find something! His choices are limited to him, or his friends and none of the memories in his head would sell out their friends.
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I agree. That would be the best idea. But bad ideas make the best stories. :-P
Review By [Gideon] • Date [15 Sep 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
I'm really liking this so far, and I can't wait to see where you take it. Unlike the challenge suggested, I'm hoping Xander (symbiote AND host) stays together and also maintains the full memories... that's mostly because I like 'super' Xander, even if, in this case, super only means much smarter and more skilled.
Anyway, keep writing!
Comments from author:
Thanks. Xander will lose any memories he doesn't keep in practice. However, Jolinar will retain all the memories. And don't count our Super Xander yet. I like him too.
Review By [OdinMage] • Date [15 Sep 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
It's a great story so far, and I really hope that you continue it, but just have one really big suspension of disbelief nitpick.
It seems like he went as the WHX character that corresponded with Sam around the time of her "bond". I even accept WHX being created before it was in sg1, since you disclaimed continuity.
My problem is that the WHX character that represents Sam is... a girl. And while some men do cross dress, Xander was an awkward, geeky teen that defended his near-zero man-cred just that episode. You see where I'm going with this, right?
Anyway, besides that lil' plot hole, i really like it and would love to see more.
Comments from author:
It's come as you aren't night. Or he just found an unmarked set of fatigues at Ethan's. Take your pick? Maybe he thought he was going to go as Colonel what's-his-name but didn't get it right. As I remember, his hair was closer in length to the girl of WHX than the Colonel.
To be honest. I couldn't really get past that part either. I just wanted him to host Jolinar so I skipped that part.
Ooo! lightning! In the show, the Colonel got the symbiote. ... but then he wouldn't get Sam's memories. Yeah, let's just stop thinking about it.
Look over there! Aliens that speak English!
Review By [TurfSurfer] • Date [15 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Nice fast update! Chapter two is even better than chapter one. The story flow along nicely, and the characters are spot on. The way Xander is tempered by both Jolinar's and Carter's influence is very good.
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Three reviews for the price of one. I like it. We'll see if I can keep everyone in character for the duration.
Review By [Malu] • Date [15 Sep 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Nice fast update! Chapter two is even better than chapter one. The story flow along nicely, and the characters are spot on. The way Xander is tempered by both Jolinar's and Carter's influence is very good.
Review By [Malu] • Date [15 Sep 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Nice fast update! Chapter two is even better than chapter one. The story flow along nicely, and the characters are spot on. The way Xander is tempered by both Jolinar's and Carter's influence is very good.
Review By [Malu] • Date [15 Sep 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
I like it! Looking forward to seeing where it goes. Does Xander just keep Jolinar's memories, or Jolinar itself? I think either could be interesting, especially when considering Lantash and Martouf. Not to mention Jolinar's memories from/of Sam. Talk about weird! And him meeting SG1 could only be fun.
Update soon!
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Technically, right now Xander has the memories of both Sam and Jolinar. Soon, those will start fading though and not long after that Jolinar will re-manifest. (He's currently ... incubating? I guess would be the right word. Only a small portion of him got left behind and now it has to re-grow before he is a fully mature simbiote.
Review By [Kalliza] • Date [15 Sep 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]