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Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from CPTSkip
Review:
On my last flight I remember I got 8 peanuts. And some peanut dust. The airline also damaged my luggage and then refused to replace either bag. I used to love flying, even on C-130s. Not any more. I do continue to enjoy your story.
Comments from author:
I remember on my first flight, I got 9 peanuts. I started a journal and wrote down the number of peanuts on each flight. I lost it a while ago, but I believe it ran from a low of 6 to a high of 13.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from VillageOrchid
Review:
I enjoyed the chapter. To compare you to another excellent writer on this site, I would compare you to "Methos."

I liked the idea that Xander was really just trying to go as a generic team-member, or what if he were the team-member - but Chaos had a hand i the results.
Comments from author:
I figure he was probably thinking he was the Colonel but the spell decided otherwise.

Thank you for the comparison. Methos is quite an excellent writer. I hope to live up to your expectations.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from maydaymason
Review:
a very promising start
Comments from author:
Thank you for reviewing.
Review By [maydaymason] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from Persephone
Review:
This story is quite good. I am looking forward to reading more of it.
Comments from author:
Thank you for reviewing.
Review By [Persephone] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from Nuklear
Review:
okay really liking this so far... and you have managed to curb any enthusiasm I had at my upcoming first plane trip
Comments from author:
I like to call it 'managing expectations'. Just eat before you go and grab a window seat.
Review By [Nuklear] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from Questara
Review:
Interesting start, I will follow this now.
Comments from author:
Thank you for reviewing and following.
Review By [Questara] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from Glongi
Review:
Great story, but I would like to see more about insight into the female mind by Xander... Even if Sam is not that big on being feminine, she is still female, so is Jolinar, doesn't?
Comments from author:
That's coming later. Right now, Xander and his male brain are in almost total control. He's focused on other things right now and trying very, very hard not to think of what it was like for Sam or Jolinar to have sex. And that might not be the 'insight' you were looking for, but remember than Xander is a 17 year old boy right now.
Review By [Glongi] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from Oakheart
Review:
Good peg on the time/date stamp with peanuts served on the flight; most people apply the current status quo in their fics and miss the little details. Also, you're doing well in what I feel is the most prevalent trap of crossover writing: favoring one source material over another.

Three brains, no waiting - plus a potential for hyena influence! I don't think I've seen a writer take that on before (except a Ranma 1/2 fic ages ago...). I'm looking forward to your continuation of this fic very much. Thanks for posting!

SD
Comments from author:
I am trying very hard to balance them right now. Thank you for noticing. Though I'm afraid that Xander and/or Jolinar will have to make a choice soon.
Review By [Oakheart] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from WolfWriter
Review:
Amen to THAT!

From now on, when I air travel, I'm taking a big old bag of nuts and other goodies with me!

Love the story too. It's growing teeth.
Comments from author:
I used to take a candy bar with me. Not sure that would be allowed any more.

Teeth? They haven't even run into any vampires yet. :-P
Review By [WolfWriter] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from SimulatedSoul
Review:
Very interesting premise, and it seems as if it is off to a good start. Looking forward to reading more soon.
Comments from author:
Thank you for your review.
Review By [SimulatedSoul] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from Zyanadryn
Review:
right on! love this story so far, i hope you continue it! :D
Comments from author:
Thank you for your review.
Review By [Zyanadryn] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from eset
Review:
Great story. I can't wait to see where you take this. Or how good Xander's poker face is when he recognizes Sunnydale's new visitors.
Comments from author:
Not good at all.
Review By [eset] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from MissE
Review:
Very interesting start :D Looking forward to reading more.
Comments from author:
Thank you for your review.
Review By [MissE] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from VillageOrchid
Review:
That would just in case Jack has to kill someone and have plausible deniability for where he buries the bodies in the desert. Good stuff. Thanks for continuing so soon.

The only "fudge" on the timeline would be if it is second season SG1 it would have been too early to have rescued the aliens who wrote the show... and have it on the air. However, since this is a crossover, you can have another reason why the show was launched and just have those aliens come over for creative reasons later on when they are rescued.

EDIT: Oh, you mean Jack and Teal'c are driving back together. I thought you meant just Jack. 'Cause you know he has done the black ops.

EDIT TOO: Yeah, because we are all wondering what the production company "double secret" means, it is either a mind f*ck, or what we're seeing is our world's version of Worm-hole extreme!
Comments from author:
Umm... no. A little violent there aren't we? The General wants Jack to show Teal'c around the planet a bit after the mission is done. Remember, he hasn't been off the base yet at this point. Apparently I didn't write that very well. I'll see if I can clean that up.

Yeah, in my reality, the Airforce actually wrote and produced the show for "Plausible Deniability" The rescued aliens came later.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from gaulty
Review:
great chapter, byes
Review By [gaulty] • Date [15 Sep 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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