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Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from ovid
Review:
Well, I don't know near enough to write up a hack segment. I was just thinking that there would be several scene changes focusing on Sam and Xander, and their reactions to their opponent's moves. And to simplify it, you could have Xander thinking simply while Carter/Jolinar are doing the hacking, and Sam is doing a running commentary to O'neill.

I like your solution to Xander's fighting memories. Reinforcement of the memories would be necessary. And tealc's response to the airport and the accompanying scenes was hilarious. On a side note, I don't think armored jaffa would even fit into economy seats. Though the thought of them putting their staffs into overhead storage is humorous.
Comments from author:
LOL at the overhead compartment visualization.
Review By [ovid] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from desartrattaz
Review:
good start, I am not a writer, so I just enjoy the stories.
Comments from author:
Well, I enjoy your enjoyment. :-D
Review By [desartrattaz] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from (Current Donor)vidicon
Review:
A lie that will be revealed pretty soon...Nice chapter and I thank you for posting it.
Comments from author:
Yes, I fear that it will not last.
Review By [(Current Donor)vidicon] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from dustin
Review:
Very nice! I've never seen quite this take on Xander as a Gould/to'kra before. I loved reading about Teal'c on the airplane. I can't wait for more
Comments from author:
Thank you. I do like to be unique.
Review By [dustin] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from (Past Donor)Peaslums
Review:
Calling the memories 'CQC' just sounds off. Maybe the hand to hand memories, or CQC training. Besides, the Army and Air force normally use the term 'Combatives' to refer to unarmed combat training.
Comments from author:
I read it in another fic. It might be a British term though. The author of that story used more than a couple British terms. It's called Fate's Little Plaything and it's very good.
Review By [(Past Donor)Peaslums] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from sonofden
Review:
Does Xander remember Carter's more personal memories? That could lead to quite some embarrassment. Looking forward to reading more.
Comments from author:
He's trying very hard not to. But he is a 17 year old boy. Eventually he's going to see them.
Review By [sonofden] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from fayefree
Review:
Ok, this was fun. Can't wait for more.
Comments from author:
Thank you for reviewing.
Review By [fayefree] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from (Past Donor)pinkhairedharry
Review:
awesome update
can't wait for SGC to hit the crazy night life of sunnydale
Comments from author:
Thank you. I believe you will like it.
Review By [(Past Donor)pinkhairedharry] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from CPTSkip
Review:
On my last flight I remember I got 8 peanuts. And some peanut dust. The airline also damaged my luggage and then refused to replace either bag. I used to love flying, even on C-130s. Not any more. I do continue to enjoy your story.
Comments from author:
I remember on my first flight, I got 9 peanuts. I started a journal and wrote down the number of peanuts on each flight. I lost it a while ago, but I believe it ran from a low of 6 to a high of 13.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from VillageOrchid
Review:
I enjoyed the chapter. To compare you to another excellent writer on this site, I would compare you to "Methos."

I liked the idea that Xander was really just trying to go as a generic team-member, or what if he were the team-member - but Chaos had a hand i the results.
Comments from author:
I figure he was probably thinking he was the Colonel but the spell decided otherwise.

Thank you for the comparison. Methos is quite an excellent writer. I hope to live up to your expectations.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from maydaymason
Review:
a very promising start
Comments from author:
Thank you for reviewing.
Review By [maydaymason] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from Persephone
Review:
This story is quite good. I am looking forward to reading more of it.
Comments from author:
Thank you for reviewing.
Review By [Persephone] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from Nuklear
Review:
okay really liking this so far... and you have managed to curb any enthusiasm I had at my upcoming first plane trip
Comments from author:
I like to call it 'managing expectations'. Just eat before you go and grab a window seat.
Review By [Nuklear] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from Questara
Review:
Interesting start, I will follow this now.
Comments from author:
Thank you for reviewing and following.
Review By [Questara] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from Glongi
Review:
Great story, but I would like to see more about insight into the female mind by Xander... Even if Sam is not that big on being feminine, she is still female, so is Jolinar, doesn't?
Comments from author:
That's coming later. Right now, Xander and his male brain are in almost total control. He's focused on other things right now and trying very, very hard not to think of what it was like for Sam or Jolinar to have sex. And that might not be the 'insight' you were looking for, but remember than Xander is a 17 year old boy right now.
Review By [Glongi] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
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