Cool start that I hope you do continue. It is a different approach from the other one that has been posted recently but I think that you are capturing Xander's personality better. I mean often time Xander is used as a piece that can fit anywhere but a lot of those stories loose what makes him into the character we know and love. You don't seem to have that issue in this or your other stories so I want to see what happens if you take this story to its conclusion. ~Reflections
Comments from author:
Wow, glad to know I'm getting the characterisations right, it's often hard for me to tell when I'm writing. And I know those stories you're talking about, Xander's a very malleable character but often his core personality is unfortunately lost in such fics, so I hope I don't make the same mistake.
Review of chapter "First Impressions" from Tanaxanth
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Has potential to be interesting and a good read though I do wonder how emma and cuckoos react to hyena and soldier. I am looking forward to seeing what you come up with.
Comments from author:
Glad to hear it, though I'm sorry to say that I don't intend on the Hyena and Soldier to play any part in the story (odds are that they won't even make an appearance).
Review By [Tanaxanth] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "First Impressions" from Trunnwildcat
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Yes please do continue this, I'm liking where this is going. and I've always liked it when Xander has to turn to stripping to get cross-country. :)
Comments from author:
Thanks, glad you liked it.
Review By [Trunnwildcat] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "First Impressions" from thegoodfight
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It is a nice start. It's nice to see that while Xander may be tougher than most, he isn't able to handle himself against people that are trained. At the moment, he seems more like a bruiser that plans on hitting things till they stop moving, which is a valid way to go. Laura and Xander could be a cute couple or close friends thing, I don't know why. They always just seemed that way. I'd like to see more of this. good job.
Comments from author:
Thanks, and yeah, I see Xander as something of a street fighter, someone who could take care of himself against a couple of untrained humans without his powers, maybe a vampire or two on his own and even a couple of tougher demonic species using them, but against someone like X-23 and Wolverine, who are highly trained, Xander doesn't stand much of a chance.
Review By [thegoodfight] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "First Impressions" from JoeHundredaire
Review:
Rather see this continue than the other two on the site. This has promise. Those are shit.
Comments from author:
Thanks, best way to fight bad fanfiction is with good fanfiction.
Review By [JoeHundredaire] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
This must be continued for it has the earmarks of a great story. And if you dont I will hunt you down and feed you to my Pyrano (hybrid Pyrhana/kangaroo), if you are then please disregard the aforment threat of death by genetically created superfish.
Comments from author:
Though I would be very interested in seeing what a Pyrano would look like, I think it would be best for my health if I skipped it and continued the story.
Glad you liked it.
Review By [Pup] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "First Impressions" from TurfSurfer
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Despite whatever inspiration the other story may have offered, this is miles ahead of it. An excellent lead-in, a believable backstory, and an intriguing future. All good things that compel me to compel you to write more.
the memory flashes seem to indicate either telepathy or a similar lab-rat experience. I hope for the former or both, since I'd prefer he have both Frost powers.
Comments from author:
Thanks, I really am glad for that.
As for the possibility of telepathy, I don't know about you, but for me telepathy is very tricky to write when it is actually used, and, I'm not sure why, but the thought of Xander with telepathy just seems wrong somehow. I'll work it out, but I doubt Xander will be using telepathic gifts to save the day any time soon.
Review By [TurfSurfer] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "First Impressions" from mackenziex
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Probably the best start to a Xander's real family is Emma Frost story I've seen. :) Keep going!
Comments from author:
Considering the competition, (is there more than one?), I'll still take that as a compliment. Thanks.
Review By [mackenziex] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "First Impressions" from AllenPitt
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Definitely continue it! "Adopted Xander" stories have been done before, can't think of one when he was already 5 when it happened. Interesting. So... either Emma F coldly dumped him for some reason, or he was maybe kidnapped? (Unless cloned like Laura?). Mr. Sinister, maybe? And he's already experienced being near a telepath (Buffy, in that one ep). Didn't react well to it...
Comments from author:
Well, I'm not giving it all up just yet, but let's just say that Emma didn't heartlessly dump him off at the orphanage. And thanks for the recommendation!!
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "First Impressions" from AlecMcDowell
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Yes, definitely continue this. I'm not too upset if Xander never develops telepathy but having him use his diamond form should be fun.
Comments from author:
Thanks, I don't know what it is, but something about telepathy just seems wrong when put together with Xander. I'm glad you're enjoying it though, and I can't wait to continue.
Review By [AlecMcDowell] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Not Rated
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