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Review of chapter "J Street" from (Past Donor)Glendon
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Just started reading this, and I have to say that it really is quite good. Uses some of the Harry meets the Council cliche's, and turns others on their ear. I like the combination. New ideas on the concept, but no changes just for the sake of changes, as some authors would do. Great work so far. Pacing along quite nicely.
Comments from author:
Hey there! I'm so glad you're enjoying the story! If I may ask, what sorts of things do you see as cliche and which do you see as turning them on their ear, as you said? I've read some stories where Harry meets the Council, but not enough to really get a feel for what's been overdone and what hasn't. I maintain that Sherza's fanfic, "White Knights and Dark Lords" is a heavy inspiration for this story, and Sherza is my primary beta-reader. So, if you've read that fanfic and see similarities, then that's why. If you haven't read it yet, I highly recommend it. It's a Xander-centered story that is positively amazing.

Thank you so much for your review. I hope you continue to leave feedback! Always good to get more opinions. ^_^
Review By [(Past Donor)Glendon] • Date [24 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Uncle Lance" from VillageOrchid
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Charming and well thought out writing and storytelling in this chapter. Not quite as heavy-handed as your set-up.... meaning improvement as the story goes on.... as information is revealed. I liked how you kept having warnings against swarms of super-powered teenaged girls to Harry, and the TARDIS house was quite interesting. It is shame that Xander and Jessie weren't enough into Doctor Who for Willow to know about it. As a science hero, I think she would have had quite the pretend tv-boyfriend crush. Thanks for sharing.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [23 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "J Street" from grd
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Love how Willow is training Harry. Hope she does get the DADA job.
Review By [grd] • Date [23 Sep 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "J Street" from borgrabbit
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Great chapter!
Review By [borgrabbit] • Date [23 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "J Street" from Shanna
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I always wondered about the comment, I think it was by Ron, that they had a squib cousin, but they didn't really talk about him too much. It seems for all the liberal thinking the Weasleys/Prewitts have regarding witches and wizards they still seem to be somewhat prejudiced about being related to non-magicals. Like Lance would be considered a blight on their family tree or something.

I'm glad Willow got the story of her past out in the open to Harry. It would be difficult if it came out in the wash down the road.

I can't wait to read more of this story. Keep up the great work!
Review By [Shanna] • Date [23 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "J Street" from AriaDragoncrest
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Excellent
Review By [AriaDragoncrest] • Date [23 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Uncle Lance" from borgrabbit
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Why do I picture a red headed John Candy when I see "Uncle Lance"? Oh well, Great chapter!
Review By [borgrabbit] • Date [23 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "J Street" from AllenPitt
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I don't think Ron would be mean at all; he might be rude without meaning to, i.e. oblivious. He's not a bad person, he's just the character in the books who actually acts his age. More realistic. Not sure how Molly would react to Willow.
Hm... please, a scene where HP has to deal with an entire floor of teenage slayers, heh.
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [23 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "J Street" from DarthPayne
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A wand with Spike's hair in it?

Hmmm....
Review By [DarthPayne] • Date [23 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Uncle Lance" from proofreader
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This shows promise. Just please don't make it a Ron/Hermione fic, it drives me nuts. Plus I somehow think Ron would NOT like meeting a squib relative while Hermione would just treat them like a fellow human being. The poke towards Dumbasadoor's living chess game was an interesting foreshadow too. Willow meeting Hermione should be fun, with them both being knowledge sponges but Willow having learned moderation.
Review By [proofreader] • Date [23 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Uncle Lance" from dreameralways
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I've given a lot of thought to the different magics in these universes over the years (b/c yes I am that geeky). The way I always saw it was Willow had to worry more about addiction because she often drew her power from outside of herself. I figure that when they use the magic from their own core it's non addictive, which is why most wizards never have to worry about it. Wizards typically only use supplemental magic in potions and a few magical artifacts. However, because Willow can draw from outside herself she has the capability to be far, far more powerful than Harry Potter universe wizards. Of course, while Willow always has some magic at her fingertips, she would need a little time to draw up to her uber-witch levels. I mean, yes it was with a focus (the scythe) but Willow was powerful enough to change the laws of nature in her universe (one line to all potentials being chosen). She's crazy powerful when she wants to be. I think she might actually be so powerful that she'd simply burn up any normal wands if she tried to push her power through them. Maybe she would need one that actually resists her power, in order to slow it down, or perhaps just a prop wand?
Anyway, story is still interesting. I look forward to more.
Review By [dreameralways] • Date [23 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Uncle Lance" from AllenPitt
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I get that magic becomes a crutch for wizards. The whole 'don't overuse it' thing by Willow is likely her projecting based on her own experiences. But people do that.
Getting her a wand should be an experience. Hm, getting her the DADA position.... normally I'd say it wouldn't work, but Dumbledore will be desperate to get anyone for it, so as to avoid having to accept Fudge's choice (Umbridge). He accepted Gilderoy L., he'll accept anybody.
Meanwhile I'd imagine the alarm level of HP's absence will be going up steadily, by the Order anyway.
Hm. Any chance of Willow recognizing anybody in a portrait in Hogwarts? Drusilla or Darla (back when human) ? It'd be fun.
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [23 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Uncle Lance" from (Current Donor)vidicon
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Interesting...A very good way of bringing in a Prewett who is unknown and yet plausible. And the indignities and suffering of a squib.

Well done! I look forward to the continuation.
Review By [(Current Donor)vidicon] • Date [23 Sep 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Welcome to Yet Another Hellmouth" from AllenPitt
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The 'evil vibe' might not just be the blood ward; might be his curse scar, too. They don't yet realize how connected to Voldemort HP is. Hasn't mentioned the prophecy yet; then again he doesn't know about it yet, I think.
Not surprised by your take on Dumbledore. He started out in life intending to become a dark lord type, with Grindelwald, then sort of got 'scared straight' by what happened to his sister... ANYWAY, boy will all parties be upset about HP's disappearance, or what? The ministry not so much, but the Order, yes.
Poor Hedwig, has to cross the Atlantic to deliver his letters? Ouch. Presumably he's a magic owl & it'll be no problem...?
I bet Willow will very much want to see HP's textbooks --
Comments from author:
Yeah, there's a lot that Harry doesn't know yet. He doesn't even know that the Order exists at this point, so he really has no idea about the panic he's likely set everyone into.

As for the nasty vibes Willow was getting, I'm gonna say her focus was on the house at that point in time. The scar will come up, just not quite yet. And we don't know where Sirius was hiding, aside from Africa. Hedwig may have had to cross oceans before. At the very least, she's had to cross the Mediterranean Sea. Admittedly, that's a LOT shorter distance than the Atlantic. That is a good point that I'll have to bring up, so thanks for that.

I hope you're enjoying the story so far. Thanks for the reviews, and I hope you like what's to come. :)
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [23 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Welcome to Yet Another Hellmouth" from WolfWriter
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This is moving along nicely. I really like it.

Others have stated their opinion of Harry's type of magic vs. Willow's.

Willow's magic was heavily tainted by the Hellmouth, so she became addicted to it very quickly. Plus, she really didn't have a teacher, but taught herself; which really isn't the way to go about something like that. It's like teaching yourself to swim by jumping into the deep end of the swimming pool, instead of learning to float in the shallows.

Plus, if Harry were to slow down on, or stop using magic altogether, would that have an adverse affect on his health?

Not only that, but what about accidental magic? He was pulling it off for years, before he went to Hogwarts to learn how to use his magic safely. Now, it takes something of a major stress level for him to lose control and perform accidental magic.

From what I've read of other fics, isn't his magical core like a muscle, i.e., the more he uses it, the stronger it gets? Well, if that is so, then the less he uses it, the more it will atrophy, won't it?

He should be checked over for any power limiters or other spells of that nature. It wouldn't surprise me if he had a few of those on him.

Just don't kill Hedwig in this fic. I was very sad when I read in canon that she died, and I thought it was very unfair of Rowling to kill off Harry's most loyal friend.
Comments from author:
You bring up a lot of food for thought which I will definitely be digesting when I write the upcoming chapters. Willow's addiction in season six will not and does not affect Harry or any of his friends. I won't say that the entire wizarding world is immune to such things, but magic is, rather like pre-demolished Earth, mostly harmless.

As for killing of Hedwig or other main characters, I can't promise anything. I don't want to make anyone suffer, but I do want you to care about the characters and feel for them when they're in pain. That JKR pulled that off with Hedwig makes me admire her rather than hate her. Kinda like how Joss Whedon tends to off his most likable characters.

With that said, thanks for reviewing, and I hope you enjoy what's to come! ^_^
Review By [WolfWriter] • Date [22 Sep 11] • Not Rated
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