Review of chapter "Chapter One" from BlueEyedJedi
I've not seen any story where Angel is connected to Hermione, congratulations on being the first. Please hurry with the next chapter quaility stories are rarer than I would like.
Comments from author:
thx for the review and really there wasn't one before? wow ....tx again.
currently I try to write the next ch. for my story Xander in Trouble which fights me a bit at the moment, but after that the next ch for this one is planned.
Review By [BlueEyedJedi
] • Date [25 Sep 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Glongi
Not a bad start, just more than a little unreal.... Too much money, too strong "friends", and even if I like Dru being back and X and F together, without any background on them they just add to the unreal feeling...
- and Willow does seem a little like an extra, not a real character. The role of the firm is all backwards too, unless they got more out of the reading of the will than shown - And how is they are again active in L.A.? It would be more useful to have the reading of the will in New York, or even London!
Comments from author:
why to much money? Angel was quite old and in this time you can get a lot of money if u want. To Dru, X & F, the background to that will come later in the story because as Spike said to Buffy in this ch. long story... which didn't fit into ch 1 and is for later. Willow in ch 1 is just a spare and just came with B and G as a friend, but we will see her a bit more in the next chapters.
Do you really think W&H will keep it's fingers from LA? I don't. And why would it be backwards....sometimes even an evil law firm has to do normal things...and who says they didn't get anything out of it?
Review By [Glongi
] • Date [25 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Razial
nice start, I have to say hearing xander and faith were married was a surprise and not something I saw coming so well done. deadboy's background was far more intertesting than in cannon and the will was handled nicely. the appearences or mentions of some fun characters was nicely done as well. I can't wait for more(razial)
Review By [Razial
] • Date [25 Sep 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]