Oh, Cornelius, you wonderful wonderful man. That was such an excellent scene, thank you so much for it. I loved Amelia's dryness and Cornelius' astonishment at her blase attitude.
Oh, foolish, Remus, very foolish. Assuming, making bets, and so forth... especially with Snape.
Poor Ron, being trounced so thoroughly. Still, it's his own fault, for being so cocky, and he learned from it - it'll be good for him.
Oh, Luna and Xena were absolutely precious, and her sparring with Lucius was a piece of brilliance on both their parts. The information about their meals was quite nice to have.
So, they're already preparing for war, which based on the end of the chapter, is a good idea.
Oh, Fred and George, those fools. Do they not know Snape is the master of all trades, and has vied with far greater pranksters than them? His actions with Lupin were very good, though. I really hope this makes Lupin more self-sufficient and reconnects him with his parents.
The small glimpse into the Malfoy's home life was absolutely beautiful, I loved it.
Great chapter, and can't wait for more. Maybe now that the excitement is over, we'll return to the supposed villain of this story, Sirius?
Comments from author:
Thank you. Writing those two is actually quite fun.
Remus is learning. He was never the greatest 'prankster' of the Marauders. He may just get his revenge...
Ron must let go of his assumptions. After that, he will probably be the best chessplayer in the school.
Yes, Luna needs more airtime.
Prepare for war... Or isn't that the saying?
Fred and George will try and get their revenge. Officially they quite often escaped punishment because they weren't caught. But that doesn't mean people can't prank back... Lupin and Snape may actually end up... friends.... HORROR!
Thanks. Lucius and Narcissa have to have more going for them than being blond and looking cool...
As it has been written I can assure it indeed has Sirius in it...
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Review By [Meneldur] • Date [28 Feb 13] • Not Rated
I haven't laughed so much at an update to your marvelous series of stories in ... Well, I've never laughed so much. Actually, thank you so much for the wonderful entertainment this whole series provides us. Especially the hilarious parts.
Comments from author:
Thank you. I wasn't quite sure about the humour. (And reviews, though full of praise, are few) I hope the next chapter will allow for even more laughter.
Glad you like it all, Thanks for reviewing
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [27 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Debts of honour" from AllenPitt
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Poor Ron, but he'll learn from it. Profiling Voldemort, great idea. Hadn't even thought about Remus' family. I wonder if he has any siblings? And meanwhile Fudge's plans move on...
Comments from author:
Indeed he will. Albus will be joining the process later. A lot of backgorund is never shown in HP. I just decided to run with this one.
Fudge for President! ;-)
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Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [26 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Slytherin to the future" from Meneldur
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Onwards! An excellent chapter, with many plans for the future which were quite interesting.
Aberforth and Albus joking together were very fun, I'm glad they have a good relationship. I wonder what Aberforth will find in Jamaica.
Those are very good plans for education, I'm glad they're finally getting on the ball. You have to wonder how correct Maxime and Karkaroff are, since these plans are only being implemented now. Lord knows it will impress them when they come next year, but if Maxime and Karkaroff have had more balanced and correct education until now, I can't see the Hogwarts students being better than the Beauxbatons or Durmstrang students. It's true that teenagers can learn and adapt quickly, but I can't see them learning and changing that much in time for the Tournament. That offers interesting potential for clashes...
Severus and Minerva verbally jousting was excellently done, and I'm glad to see the teachers have an overall good relationship, rather than an intense rivalry. “Computers with an interest connection" - Did you mean for Albus to make this mistake? Because that's quite amusing. Poor Ablus, nobody wants to learn Alchemy. But it's good to know Molly will be coming to help people and control the Twins. Narcissa teaching magical culture will also be good for everyone, and Poppy teaching about bodies will have everybody healthier, and more aware of the dangers of sex.
It was very interesting to get a glimpse into Sybill's head, and how she intentionally set herself up as a fraud, that shows a great deal of understanding and cunning. Why did she faint, I wonder? What is so mysterious about her father?
So no Horcruxes, but I think their plans for fighting Voldemort are quite good, as far as they go. It'll be very interesting to see what this does for the Magical World until the war erupts... we have yet to see the full consequences of that, though the poignant ending with Fudge hints that we'll be seeing some Ministerial changes soon... I will eagerly await them.
“Grindelwalt had no use for Houses, only views." - Grindelwald. "At least he lacks Grindelwalt’s preferences in torture.” - Grindelwald. "Too many people would set of her talent" - 'set off' "‘Precedent and jurisprudence of the Lords of the third Rank of the Wizengamot, volume III’." - The entire title should be capitalized, like so: ‘Precedent and Jurisprudence of the Lords of the Third Rank of the Wizengamot, Volume III’.
EDIT: Well, I personally really can't wait to see how you do the Tournament, and develop the other schools and their students, who were sorely neglected, especially the Champions.
Comments from author:
Thank you. Yes, a lot of planning, very little Luna. Must rectify that. Aberforth and Albus' relationship is still strained, but they do communicate and can joke, a little. Aberforth will find an Island in the Sun, of course. ;-)
Hogwarts education to me always seemed wholly inadequate. Not to mention lethal in some cases... School pirde goes only so far. (Though I somehow doubt that Karkaroff has any anti-bullying plans in place.)
The animosity of Snape and McG only becomes truly bad after book six. In this case, they won't ever reach that point. And you, that's A;bus trying to keep up with modern times. He may yet get a pupil though. Molly might be the only one who can do it. Though the others might also not be best pleased... Yes, Poppy should do quite well. I really should write a 'Hagrid tells the facts of life' short.
Sybill here is rather different from 'Book Sybill', and even more from Movie Sybill (other than that I use Emma Thompson, at Sybill's age in the book, as her model) Her relationship with her father first comes to light in Anno Domini, in the Portrait of the Philanthropist.
The plans are good, but they yet have to make contact with the enemy...
Thanks for the corrections. I actually left the title like that, it reflects 18th-19th century British Law practice. But then I thought, who the heck knows that? ;-)
Thanks for the long and thorough review, Vid
Review By [Meneldur] • Date [17 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Slytherin to the future" from SpacedCadet
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While we're at it, you still havn't explained what abluaria are.
Comments from author:
Not in detail. But when they are first mentioned they are described as being able to cleanse dark magic, or remove the taint. The Monolith is one giant Abluarium that does that with the Hellmouth energies. Once Patrick finishes a few more, I 'll explain more fully.
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Review By [SpacedCadet] • Date [10 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Slytherin to the future" from SpacedCadet
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"Sealed Squib"
Hopefully, you will explain this in the future.
I like the concept that "Buffy" is considered a good wizarding name, tho since we do know the source it's a coincidence...unless there's something about Mrs Chandler you haven't revealed yet.
Comments from author:
It will indeed be addressed. Buffy is a very old name, like Bess, a diminutive of Elizabeth. A pure coincidence in that way.
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Review By [SpacedCadet] • Date [10 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Slytherin to the future" from AllenPitt
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I like your version of the Minister. Better motivation all around, same for Trelawney. I still hope she's related to Drusilla somehow. Hm, Spike & Dru haven't even come to Sunnydale yet. Things are starting to stack up against Voldy. Any chance he'll find some vampiric/demonic allies to even things out a bit?
Comments from author:
Thanks. Two dimensional characters are far easier to flesh out and give meaning to. Related to Dru? Well, everybody seems to be related in the wizarding world...
You don't want to know. Trust me on this.
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Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [6 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Slytherin to the future" from ChaosLady
Review:
Not bad.
Comments from author:
Thank you. Mostly talking heads of course. Luna next chapter!
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Review By [ChaosLady] • Date [6 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Witches and Broomsticks" from Compston
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The three Fates Shivered for a moment then relaxed as Malfoy and Potter began arguing again after watching Ms. Lovegood fly. "Well Sisters... Disaster has been averted! Their arguing again!"
NIce chapter
Comments from author:
Thank you. It was fun to write that scene.
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Review By [Compston] • Date [16 Nov 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Flight of the Moon" from AllenPitt
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I was half expecting Luna to run into Buffy & company at the museum. Interesting about the 'slayer alarms' even more so at the huge amount the Council has been paying to the Ministry. Funny that their budget is now messed up because of it stopping. Travers isn't going to change his mind on that score, and the Slayer now has a lot more protection than 'only' the Council. Should be an interesting meeting. Things should be perfect once that horrible Sirius Black is caught..... X Lovegood's soul taken then passed on to Marigold links the story lines nicely. Common enemy.
Comments from author:
Heh. Hem Hem.
Yes, the money that the Coucnil paid was a good chunk of hte Minsitry budget. Poor them... Travers is moderately unfond of the wanding world himself.
Sirius Black Must DIE!!!!
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Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [20 Jun 12] • Not Rated
Review By [James] • Date [19 Jun 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Flight of the Moon" from Arekanderu
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Nice one. I like the subtle inclusion of the Slayer and I can't wait for more Luna!
Comments from author:
Thank you. I Started the HP stories to give Luna more 'airtime' I'm glad to see that more people like her.
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Review By [Arekanderu] • Date [19 Jun 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Flight of the Moon" from shazamfan
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Very nice chapter. Had a 'Fantasy Island' moment when it was said the slayer had landed. The words 'The Slayer has Landed...The Slayer has Landed' rolling around in my head while picturing the classic Fantasy Island opening.
Luna gave her new family something to worry about and I liked Molly thinking about a fund to help children from low income families out.
-J-
Comments from author:
More people seem to like that sentence. She didn't really intedn to but for all her wisdom she's still only a young girl.
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Review By [shazamfan] • Date [19 Jun 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
I loved Narcissa´s teasing of Tonks, and the snowbal fight.
Interesting insight into Moody in the scene you used to recap the Forever revelations. It does make me wonder what might happen in regards to Buffy when Simon mediates on the dementors. She´s never been the best at keeping her secret idenity...
I do wonder if Luna just got lost/didn´t want to be dragged back, or if something happened.
Comments from author:
Tonks has very little family in the books, despite being covered in cousins. I gave her some to play with. Oh, most people will realise who and what she is pretty fast, what with the huge bell ringing...
Luna's fate has been revealed. I hope you liked it.
The Slayer lands at HeathRow! The rest of the chapter still excelled at creating interest in me for all the characters. Luna disappears and comes back is one of the elements that intrigued me. All in all a very good read. But the Slayer lands at Heathrow, the Council has stopped the bribe to the Ministry and Draco is getting bonding time, something I wouldn't expect at all. Great fun. I tried spelling the airport name different ways, I'll just let it go for now.
Comments from author:
Glad you liked that. The Slayer has landed... There is nothing that creates a bond like shared adversity. Or the chance to take down a snooty cousin. Now if Nymphadora had waited a few minutes...