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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from smiley
Review:
Hopefully a multi chapter sequel is following. I would think it best if he returned as something/someone he willingly became. And he's pissed. I wouldn't kill anyone, how would they suffer, but I would make the suffer. Some more than others but everyone.
Comments from author:
Well, ALL of the canon relationships are definitely going to end up significantly different, once Xander does finally return.

And as one of my beta-readers, Bill Haden, pointed out, I can't really see Cordy or Wesley really considering working with Angel in L.A., now, without a LOT of reservations about his ethics and loyalty to whoever he might be working with.
Review By [smiley] • Date [25 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from TheYeti
Review:
I am thinking...
For lack of a nail a shoe was lost
For lack of a a shoe the horse was lost
For lack of a horse the knight was lost
For lack of a knight the battle was lost
For lack of a battle the war was lost
For lack of the war the kingdom was lost
and all for the lack of a horse shoe nail.
Comments from author:
All I can really say is that Joss' canon timeline is screwed all to hell now, and the Scoobies are going to have to come up with some alternate way to deal with the Mayor.

Good luck with that.
Review By [TheYeti] • Date [25 Oct 11] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from cwolf
Review:
It's never fin when a person leaves off with that last sentence
Comments from author:
Yes, it isn't, is it? ;-)
Review By [cwolf] • Date [25 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from eriktheviking
Review:
Much more enjoyable than canon, thanks.
Comments from author:
Thanks. I had actually half-hoped that Xander would tell the Scoobies to all piss off after he realized what Buffy, Giles and Angel had done, and they didn't even offer any sort of apology, however belated, for their actions.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [25 Oct 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from oldgirllost
Review:
I'm sure that the morgue and the hospital were checked by Willow and the others first. It almost goes without saying. Is it possible that some immortal passed by and instead of leaving him in a paid for hotel room takes him along on a real road trip? Xander could be a pre-immortal, or just a normal person of interest. Then again whatever being "The One Who Sees" entails maybe some person/demon/wizard or whatever has him to kick start that ability for whatever good/evil purpose they have in mind. Could be a Harry Potter, or Harry Dresden, or Twilight crossover or even Stargate possibility as well.

Just about anything in fact.

Don't leave it here. Please.
Comments from author:
The follow-up story is still marinating in my muse's mind, so it will be a while before it gets written and posted, but al I will say that Xander is not a pre-Immortal, and was not rescued by any HL character who stumbled across him. ;-)
Review By [oldgirllost] • Date [25 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from CPTSkip
Review:
Wow! Isn't this a dark snark-fest? But almost everything you wrote is canon, for certain values of canon. I hope we get to eventually find out what happened to Xander. I think his simply getting vamped is too cliched for your twisted mind and imagination. Lol!
Comments from author:
Yes, it was snarky, but it was also completely canon as far as any of their characterizations is concerned.

And no, Xander was not vamped. That is quite cliched, now, as you point out. ;-)
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [25 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from missinglink
Review:
Nice slight skewing of canon for the period. Regardless of what the one review said, I don't think a rant was here or intended. Cordy's feelings for Xander were majorly conflicted and her pursuit of Wesley could be construed as either actual interest or punishment of Xander. Her railings against the others is just fleshing out a sentiment the show couldn't pursue due to time restraints and probably lack of interest in the writers. All said the characters feel within the realm of what they were in the series and their characterizations feel close if not right on the money.

As for what happens to Xander, the easy one would be Initiative and either as a early version, pre Adam. Maybe one where Maggie let the original consciousness remain and using a living person where she realized that Adam would be better if a clean start with a complete wipe and hardware running the body more. I would vote for the next most likely which is Drusilla getting her hands on him. Not sure that you would have to have her turn him as her facination didn't require that and if she is following the stars then she might be less inclined to do so. Either way it would keep him as a seperate party away from the ascension (him being removed and not making the bomb or leading the students could create a lot of variables to play with). Faith and the Mayor having him would be okay I guess, but it wouldn't feel right, all things considered. Big question is do you want it to have a dark/evil Xander show up, an empowered Xander show up (good or evil), or him removed from the field to another dimension/world where he then is affected/hardened by his experiences only to return. These three are the main ones to consider from my pov. Heck, you could have him drop thru a dimensional portal that randomly sprung from underneath and find himself in Pylea and deal with that only to run into Angel and the rest when they show to rescue Fred. That might offer some different ideas and depending on how you would want things to play out allow for some significant alterations to take place due to his absence and him meeting Angel again after some time with last impression that he must be evil again.

Hope this get's the ideas flowing. Later.
Comments from author:
You've recognized Cordelia's actions as I interpreted them, for the most part.

At that point in time, Cordelia was still a self-centered, relatively shallow shrew, who had previously manipulated people like dolls to suit whatever whim she might have had at the moment, and she had finally learned shortly before this point what it was like to be hurt by someone else's actions, whether intentional or not.

She and Buffy had always clashed in a battle of wills,and she usually was not on the winning side, so she was taking advantage of the opportunity to twist the emotional knife in Buffy's psyche.

As far as what actually happened to Xander is concerned, all I'll say is that one of my beta-readers (Starway_Man) had also suggested that Xander be transported to Pylea through a portal.

That's not what happened, though.;-)
Review By [missinglink] • Date [25 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from draconis
Review:
Very good short story. Dynamics were intense and quite plausible.

Hated the..."ending". You're like some soul-less Holl'ywoo'd Demon that kills a series before the writers can bring it to an controlled end.

Did I just hear evil cackling in the background?
Comments from author:
If you did hear cackling, that would most likely be my muse. ;-)

Glad you enjoyed the story.
Review By [draconis] • Date [25 Oct 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from banner
Review:
That was *chilling*. Everyone on the show was so completely casual about just leaving him there...
Comments from author:
Exactly! From the way they reacted to hearing what Angel did, you would think he'd done nothing worse than give Xander a wedgie, when he actually left a so-called teammate lying, unconscious, alone and undefended in a location accessible to any of the predators that roamed Sunnydale.
Review By [banner] • Date [25 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Current Donor)JanessaRavenwood
Review:
Would have been a better story without Cornelia acting as a blatant mouthpiece for an author rant/bashing, which seems to be the real purpose of this story. Could have actually gone somewhere, but, ah well.
Comments from author:
On the contrary, to portray Cordelia as anything but a complete and utter bitch at that point in the show would be seriously out of character.

She made a point of being nasty and vicious to everyone after regaining her so-called crown as Queen C, and it was clear she hung around the Scoobies in order to keep herself safe, not to try and help out. Any assistance she provided was done grudgingly, and with a lot of complaining and snarking, not because she was happy to help out.

And Buffy and Cordelia almost always clashed when it came to inter-personal contact between the two. Remember, Buffy described herself as the Cordelia Chase of Hemery High shortly after she first met Xander, Willow and Jesse.
Review By [(Current Donor)JanessaRavenwood] • Date [25 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Current Donor)vidicon
Review:
Nasty, very nasty. In character and all, but very nasty. Well done on the vitriol between Buffy and Cordelia.

Thanks for writing.
Comments from author:
Thanks. I was trying to keep everyone in canon character at that point in the series, and I'm glad you think I did so.

And Buffy and Cordy both considered themselves as Alphas and wanted to be acknowledged as such by EVERYONE, so I can't see them doing much else but clashing like that when they argue.
Review By [(Current Donor)vidicon] • Date [25 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from djhardim
Review:
Not bad. I would have thought though that Willow would have at least have checked the hospital and the morgue for his body.

I hope you follow up on this - at least leave him dead this time. It would be interesting to see the fallout. I imagine that Whistler might have a few things to say to him about that.

One bad thought - what if Maggie used his body in the creation of Adam?

One thing - doesn't vampire/demon activity fall off during the summer?
Comments from author:
I took it as SOP that they checked the hospital and the morgue during any search.

And no, Maggie's people did not grab Xander. That is a very commonly used plot bunny now, and I'm going for something much different than I hope anyone would expect.

Not exactly sure when the follow-up story will appear, since it's still being mulled over by my muse, but it will eventually show up.
Review By [djhardim] • Date [25 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from AbscondingCascade
Review:
Good story, and it raises a question in my mind. Is there a vengeance demon for betrayal? and if so will it cast any wishes for a angry former scooby? Anyway in thanks for this story - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=z3W3FbZuziA
Comments from author:
A very good question, and one that opens vistas for additional plot bunnies.

Glad you enjoyed the story, and thanks for the link. ;-)
Review By [AbscondingCascade] • Date [25 Oct 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from etienneofthewestwind
Review:
Is this story really complete?
Comments from author:
This episode is complete.

The overall story is not.
Review By [etienneofthewestwind] • Date [25 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Current Donor)Tanaxanth
Review:
Enjoyed the story, but then you end with a cliff hanger...

EVIL!
Comments from author:
Thanks you.

And thank you, again. ;-)
Review By [(Current Donor)Tanaxanth] • Date [25 Oct 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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