Harry's desperate stand of self-defense against the Dementors. Imbuing the arrows with the Patronus. Residual effects clinging to their cloaks - or is it in fact, residual? The confrontation with the self-important troika of Aurors. The fog-shrouded ride through London with nine Nightmares! Sirius Black, more vilified than ever. Severus Snape, cut off at the knees (metaphorically). An extra tier of questions regarding Marion and her herd of Nightmares: How were they found; how were they hidden? What abilities will they prove to have, over time?
More, and more still - I'm on the edge of my seat here. Amazing. Gripping.
Thanks.
SD
Comments from author:
I'm glad you liked it. Most of your questions will be answered in later chapters, so I won't get into it now.
As for how they were hidden, the wizards never thought that muggles would have any so they didn't look.
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Review By [Oakheart] • Date [5 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Hehe, great chapter, keep up the excellent work. The prank at the end was pretty funny. :) Also the whole thing with comparing him to a ring wraith. LOL. I'll be looking forward to reading more. :)
Comments from author:
Well, what else do you call a dark rider with an oppressive aura that seems to just appear and vanish through the fog? I'm thinking of actually painting the scene to post. I'm working on a number of pictures that just haven't gotten there yet and I'm planning on posting them when I'm finished.
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Review By [CageFire] • Date [5 Aug 12] • Not Rated
giving/taking points, great idea. But wouldn't Umbridge try to destroy the column? Meanwhile Voldemort may have outsmarted himself on this --Harry is very unlikely to show up at the Dept. of Mysteries now, so the prophecy will remain out of V's reach? Nice to see the good guys starting to fight back, though. Hm. Too bad they don't know any Willow-like wiccans, I bet that's a form of 'wandless magic' that Harry could learn.
Comments from author:
The way I see it, Magic is Magic. People just use different techniques to access it. Willow, for example, chooses to mostly call on other powers for the big stuff, but uses basic incantations for the little stuff. HP wizards and witches use wands with precise motions and incantations to get effects. Both work because the caster believes it will work.
Tommy won't be using the same old trick. He'll be doing other things.
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Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [5 Aug 12] • Not Rated
You might want to tweak a few things in this chapter.
The bit where the aurors think of Harry's bow and arrows as a strange staff and feathered sticks really should be changed.
Wizards have a bus and a train. The Ministry uses cars. They have radios... They have a quidditch team named The Appleby Arrows, and the fans used to use a spell that conjured arrows (until the practice was banned).
I think it's safe to say the average witch/wizard knows what bows and arrows are, to say nothing of trained aurors, even if some of them do come off as painfully obtuse in the books.
Furthermore, Godric Gryffindor used a sword; humans had arrows or similar projectiles a long time before anyone had the technology to construct a sword (we're talking Paleolithic versus Bronze age, at the least), so -and I feel silly even pointing this out- if wizards are aware of swords and axes, (and knives- which Dobby could tell you, if one hadn't killed him), then they are certainly familiar with the basics of archery.
Heck, the wheel (and, perhaps more relevant to Harry and his ancestors, the potter's wheel) was invented roughly 3000 BC, way, waaaay after the earliest arrowheads, yet wizards, I'm sure, know what wheels are.
Anyway, that's enough with the history lesson; I'm not trying to beat you over the head with it, I just wanted to put things in perspective. It's just that, whenever I see a story try to imply that wizards are so backwards that they can't recognize even the most primitive muggle technology, things that existed before the Statute of Secrecy, it makes me cringe a little at how hokey it sounds, and I'm sure that's not what you're aiming for.
Wizards seem to be aware of a lot of muggle technology, it's just that (in the case of more modern tech) they seem to underestimate its usefulness and, perhaps, deadliness, or misinterpret its uses. In fact, wizards may not even consider such basic things as swords and arrows to be "muggle" technology, since they have been around so very long. --
Secondly, food can't be conjured, not even for horses... existing food can be increased, but it can't be created from thin air. Apparently it's one of the things magic simply cannot do, according to Rowling. --
The passage that reads, "...the hawthorn arrow glowed with the light of a patronum..." should say "Patronus". 'Patronum' is just part of the incantation, the spell itself is a Patronus Charm, and the thing it produces is called a 'Patronus'. So the arrow would have glowed with the light of a Patronus.
Other than those few issues, and 'kneazle' not having an 's' in it, things seem to be alright.
The story is pretty interesting. Good luck and keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Well, I suppose I could tweak that, but it's one thing to know how to cast arrows from a wand, it's something else to know that they are supposed to be shot with a bow. I'll think about that.
I'm not sure where you think I said their food was conjured. I went back and looked and it doesn't seem to be there. Maybe I missed it. And I was thinking more of making a space where grass is forced to grow magically, not conjuring bags of oats.
The others are easy enough to fix.
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Review By [Warlocke] • Date [5 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Exciting stuff with Harry and amusing stuff with Hermione and Forge. I did wonder how you phrased it about the kitten plates, if like butterflies on the way of a bug collector she had to kill a kitten for each plate. Your supposition, something from the books or movies? Fannon?
Comments from author:
Well, people have paintings of their dead relatives imbued with the personality of subject. Why not have a version of that with pets? Umbridge doesn't seem like the person who could possibly ever have loved ones, humans she cares deeply about, but pets? I could totally see her as a crazy cat woman who can't even let them go when they die.
It's not really Fannon, just an idea I had. No clue if someone's used it before.
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Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [5 Aug 12] • Not Rated
"Harry bent down, strung the bow and drew an arrow, all in the same motion." ... stringing a bow is not usually an easy process. At least not on bows with enough draw weight to do some damage.
After that, the fight scene was excellent. Incredible, even.
Loved the idea of turning Hogwarts against Umbridge. Very funny.
Comments from author:
No, stringing a bow is NOT easy. I put that in as a bit to show how much Harry practiced. He put as much into his archery as he did flying or more even. It's also a bit of foreshadowing. I'll leave that for later.
I'm glad you liked the fightscene. It took me a long time to get it the way I wanted it.
And in my opinion, Hogwart should ALWAYS be against Umbridge.
Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Review By [Oxnate] • Date [5 Aug 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Well done Harry! Taking out a bunch of dementors and some Aurors without even a wand :) Plus he gets a whole herd of cool magical horses. None of which makes up for the fact that the last of his new friends are now dead :( I'm glad Hermione has found a worthy successor to her prefectship. Good old Darth Vader!
Comments from author:
He's not yet had time to deal with the loss of his friends. That should be in upcoming chapters. Tonks and Sirius will be dealing with the same.
As for Hermione... I agree that she left Hogwarts in good hands. Well, "good" is a bit subjective, I suppose.
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Review By [Gideon] • Date [5 Aug 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]