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Review of chapter "Chain" from burmafrdnow
Review:
Actually if you are using logic no zombie could last; and what other cause can there be but a disease unless you use magic.
They cannot eat or digest; the body is slowly dying. That is what a zombie is; a slowly dying animated animal. So unless you are going way out there for something that is not seen before, a month or two is about all there is. That is why I said a year at most. You would have a few victims; then it ramps up to where it is in the beginning of your story; and by the way you have written it some time has already passed. At that point you have millions of zombies and the few people left are just trying to survive. so the progression is very fast. Another reason it cannot last long.
Comments from author:
I'm not trying to argue with you. And I'm not even that invested in arguing the particulars of the disease. Honestly, at this point in my writing of this story I'm more interested in telling what they are doing -now-, not a year from now. Trying to tell all the characters as I see them at the -present- as thoroughly as possible. -Then- I will move on. There is much more of that to go for me, individual characters and also how the group as a whole is reacting to their environment and building a society. It won't be until after I feel that I have finished with the present (and other than the initial chapters note of 6 months in, I haven't stipulated any time) that I write more.

The slayers aren't thinking long term and I have purposely not written it that way. -I- have however been considering the future of this story post-zombies, but that will be a while because there is still much more to tell in my opinion. I apologize if that bothers you or if you feel I am still not being logical.

I am sorry if I come across as harsh, that was not my intention. I'm simply trying to get my point across and I apologize if I said anything that offended you. I do appreciate you taking the time to read my fic and respond, I always like feedback - I just wanted to try to explain to you my point of view.
Review By [burmafrdnow] • Date [17 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chain" from eriktheviking
Review:
A great choice of character for the Slayer who would most appreciate the uncluttered view of a return to the life of the First Slayer, a hunter/gatherer.
Comments from author:
I just wrote another piece for Faith for the Wishlist prompt thing and I've found a here-to-for unknown appreciation for the Slayer. *laughs* There is something undeniably enjoyable about her character and I truly think she would have liked this life.

Thanks so much for continuing to review, eriktheviking.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [17 Nov 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chain" from burmafrdnow
Review:
The whole Zombie thing is temporary. Zombies cannot last very long; a month or so. The disease will kill them pretty quickly. So in 6 months; a year at most they are gone. Then what will the Slayers do?
Comments from author:
How long a zombie last fluctuates from universe to universe depending on it's cause. Since in Walking Dead it is virus based, we do not yet know it the virus could actually effect normal decay. The bodies decay is actually not set in stone anyway, it is effected my a number of environmental and other factors. Plus you have the fact that more fresh zombies are being made occasionally from those that ate unlucky enough to have survived initially but then be bitten later.

I'm not saying this way of life is sustainable forever, just that the zombie problem would be something might last a bit longer than that. Right now I'm still world-building their present life and trying to make it as well-rounded as possible. I'll move on to the future after that. Don't worry, I am thinking about how they might live in this post-technology world after most of the zombies are gone. :)

Thanks so much for the feedback, I really appreciate you taking the time to review.
Review By [burmafrdnow] • Date [17 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chain" from Gideon
Review:
This world is almost made for Faith isn't it? Maybe if there were a few more men around? She seems fairly content in any case. And pairing up with Willow? That would not have been my guess.
Comments from author:
In 'Buddy System' I set in place that everyone had to be paired up and I thought that the two of them together helped show how that worked a bit, that the overwhelming trust necessary for the present just eclipses any past feelings. And yeah - if Slayers are suited for this life, I think Faith is more suited than most. :)

Thanks so much for reviewing, Gideon.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [16 Nov 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Preserve" from mellusene
Review:
Awesome! I love how you're creating a new Slayer culture in this fic! Beautifully done! The way you've written this, the words you've chosen, is really poetic. Love, love, love!
Comments from author:
Aww, thanks so much for your kind words. The culture has been especially fun for me. Having them pull in tighter as a group, embrace their Slayerness, and degress into a very nomad/hunter society. Trying to write them as a sort of pack while keeping individuality in little ways.

Again thanks so much. And thanks for reading and taking the time to review. :)
Review By [mellusene] • Date [16 Nov 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Preserve" from AllenPitt
Review:
They should concentrate less on zombie killing and more on finding survivors and organizing them. Then said survivors could handle things like clothing, food gathering, stuff like that, and let the slayers do the slaying. But these are the early days of all this, later on they'll probably get more organized.
Maybe get people set up on an off the coast island as a safe haven to start with?
There must be tens of millions of zombies even in the near area, they've really got their work cut out for them.
Comments from author:
In my head there is what they -should- be doing, what is more logical and then there is what they are being pulled towards. The instinct and group feeling that has been amplified by living in a mass like this that is what they are going with. The Slayers in my story aren't really concerned with creating a safe haven for survivors their goal is getting rid of the zombies.

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [16 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Preserve" from eriktheviking
Review:
An insightful and unusually tolerable Andrew, well done.
Comments from author:
I rather think a zombie apocalypse and being in a position of responsibility for 1000 girls could mellow even Andrew into a less obnoxious person. *laughs*

And thanks you kindly for the continued feedback, eriktheviking. *curtsies*
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [16 Nov 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Preserve" from grd
Review:
Nicely done. Wondering what the perspective is from the survivors of this Army of girls destroying zombies where they may be.
Comments from author:
I might do a POV from a random survivor at some point...hmm, so far I've pretty much kept it with the group but it might be neat to do an outside perspective.

Thanks, grd.
Review By [grd] • Date [15 Nov 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Preserve" from Gideon
Review:
Now we get down to the nitty gritty details. Even after the end of the world, no-one likes doing chores. And with 1000 Slayer appetites they would pick any area clean fairly quickly and then have to move on.
Great attention to detail here. I love it.
Comments from author:
I was really overly fond of the picture in my head of a quiet prairie with a bison grazing when, out of nowhere, a Slayer with a spear pounces.

Dinner.

*laughs* I think that says a lot. Thanks so much for continuing to review, Gideon. I'm glad you liked all the little details. :)
Review By [Gideon] • Date [15 Nov 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Wishes" from eriktheviking
Review:
A well written and unusually apathetic Xander.
Comments from author:
I'm glad the shown through. That's one of the points I particularly wanted people to notice - that he was keeping a complete mental and emotional distance from what he was doing. What I've been trying to do in each character bit so far is take the character and just tweak them a bit as I think they might react given the situation. I've tried to keep changes small and human.


.........how successful I've been is another matter entirely. *laughs* Thanks bunches for taking the time to review both chapters.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [15 Nov 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Lunar" from eriktheviking
Review:
A great take on the Slayers matching cycles.
Comments from author:
I think I overly enjoy the idea of the group falling back on telling time by lunar cycles. It's one of those things that has always seemed so magical, primal and feminine anyway that it fits well with Slayers.

Add in dancing crazily around fires and.....

*laughs* Thanks for taking the time to review, eriktheviking.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [15 Nov 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Wishes" from maydaymason
Review:
Gah! How are you so good at this? Slayers as opposite werewolves, truly human only three nights a month and maybe as bad as what they fight the rest of the time? Come on.

It sounds sort of like Xander needs to talk with faith about relaxing, because someone that high-strung with a gun cannot be good for the long term.
Comments from author:
*dances* Makes me happy that you caught that. Tied to the moon cycles but the exact opposite to werewolves, thing.

As for Xander, I didn't mean to make him seem high-strung. He's actually rather happy, just happy thinking about another time and place - not as hyper-present as the Slayers are in there fighting. As far away in his sharpshooting as the Slayers are in their hand-to-hand. But, everybody has they're quirks and I wanted to deal with Xander in a very believable and human way. I'm not sure if it came across quite right but....*shrug*

Thanks for reviewing, maydaymason. I really appreciate it. :)
Review By [maydaymason] • Date [15 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Wishes" from Dhampyr
Review:
Somehow I get the feeling Anya would wonder why Xander wasn't giving the Slayers protecting him many orgasms as thanks for fighting the good fight. I always got the feeling she's be okay with him moving on. She would never share him in life, but in death I could see her wanting him to be happy. ANd she'd get a kick out of him thinking of her as he took out monsters.

I like how Faith her been helping to interject life back into the group. It's good to see that they're not letting themselves get bogged down too far despite the situation. At some point I'd like to see a conversation or strategy session or something among the core Scoobies. Maybe Willow pointing out that the plague will eventually burn itself out as the dead rot into immobility so that they can plan a more stable platform for the warrior society developing among them. This war won't last forever, after all, and I don't think everything else that goes bump in the night will just fade away.
Comments from author:
I'm not sure if it got across as well in my writing, but in my head, Xander isn't necessarily still hung up on Anya to the point of never moving on or anything. I just wanted to show the differences in the way how the Slayers are completely in the present and fighting very hands on. While Xander is working from a distance and is dealing with the situation by purposefully mentally reframing it like a story and thinking about a happier time and place. I'm not saying he's crazy or not aware - definitely not - just choosing to deal with what's happened in a very different way.

Xander wouldn't really be open to giving the Slayers many orgasms right now, less because of his feelings for Anya, and more because he is just in such a different mind set from them. It's honestly not what he's thinking about at all.

Also, this is another time you've mentioned strategy and I think we're of two different minds of the Scoobies actual goals here. I've been hinting or insinuating bits and pieces but it's all kinda in my head so I'll see if I can articulate it.....

Ok, in Willow's drabble 'Choice' I mentioned about how they made the decision to come together and hunt once they had watched one of their own go through the change. That was Giles (who I mentioned the death of in Dawn's bit). In my head he was the one before this that was being the logical one - trying to figure out the orgin (mystical or otherwize) planning the possibility of having to bunker down and wait it out, etc. But planning.

Then when he was bitten that all got scrapped. Not only did they see the world falling apart around them but they watched the man they saw as a parent die. After that when they planned the only real idea was that they wanted everyone together, safety in numbers. They were going to hunt these things.

It was no longer really logic, it was vengeance for Giles and a sort of push back - a re-tacking of their world.

The society that is developing is meant to seem spontaneous, born out of necessity of a people on the move and not planning sessions. They are no longer really thinking like that, they are now thinking in a very pack-hunt manner.....Yeah, that's kinda what I wanted to get across.

I also want to point out that it takes a while for the dead to rot into immobility - eventually, yes, but that's a long time. And you can't build any sort of safe stable society (especially one that would involve anyone other than Slayers) until they are all gone. One left, a few bites, and you could have another epidemic. Zombies aren't like the other supernatural creatures - they are utterly mindless, they have no restriction against sunlight, and they don't get tired.

And I will deal with the other things that do bump in the night in future drabbles. I've just been having fun with these character and world-building bits so far. :)

Thanks so much for the feedback, Dhamyr. I know I went even longer than I usual do there and I apologize for that.
Review By [Dhampyr] • Date [15 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Wishes" from Gideon
Review:
I hope Xander gets a chance to dance too. it sounds like he is entirely too serious and that can't be a good thing for a joker like himself.
Comments from author:
Don't worry, everyone dances. :) And I wasn't trying to particularly show that he was overly serious, more that he was emotionally and mentally distant in this as opposed to the way the Slayers fought.

Thanks for the feedback, Gideon!
Review By [Gideon] • Date [14 Nov 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Vital" from Dhampyr
Review:
Another nice installment. Part of me wonders how much of the original Walking Dead comic, with it's evil fiefdoms and plethora of villains to go along with the zombie hordes, that you want to incorporate. Not that I think someone like the Governor would be anything resembling a threat to an army of Slayers. And I will admit that part of me wants to see how this situation has changed Xander as well. Has he delved deeper into a role as Watcher since he was Giles' de-facto successor? Has he had a mental breakdown to the point where the soldier and hyena parts of his mind are running free? Is Dawn keeping him under lock and key since she finally won him over in the season 8 comic? Has he become empowered himself somehow because of the enjoining spell during the final fight with ADAM? After all he DID had a visit from the First Slayer like the others.
Comments from author:
I don't plan on dealing much with any of the characters in the Walking Dead universe - I'm mainly playing within the world that was created there and writing out how I think the Slayers and Scoobies could have reacted to it.

As for Xander, I'm not going to change him in any majorly outwardly noticeable ways. That's kind of what I want it to be like for everyone - little changes that they might not even really notice in themselves that have come about because of this situation they are in. Bits of themselves that have always been there.....

I know I'm being rather vague but I've already written a Xander bit and plan to post it later this evening so I'm hesitant on how much I should write here so I don't just duplicate information....I'll just leave it there. :) Thanks for reviewing again, Dhampyr. It's always lovely to go into the intricacies of these worlds.
Review By [Dhampyr] • Date [14 Nov 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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