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Review of chapter "Ch. 53 - Strategic Assessments" from VillageOrchid
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I like the stuff you're doing with Jamie who is an emotionally developed character but a plot-wise under-developed character. If she's in California - it will help for her to know valley girl speak. It was hard to tell in the show if she was teaching near a base in Washington DC or near her home in rural California... near a military base.
Comments from author:
In theory, Jaime lived in Ojai California, but that wasn't where she did her student teaching (which was never specified).
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [13 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Ch. 51 - Attrition War" from VillageOrchid
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Some interesting stuff going on here. The HP former Prisoner Wizards are apparently real - Willow wants to see her friends get torn apart by Zombies, but is basically having fun - so that has a slightly light side to it.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [13 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Ch. 49 - The Bat-Mission" from VillageOrchid
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Really enjoyed Bat-Man POV while exploring Xander and O'Neill interacting with each other. Also good back up plan.
Comments from author:
Batman's backup plans have backup plans, and since he was Selina's backup plan...
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [13 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Ch. 46 - SNAFU, part 8" from VillageOrchid
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Not quite sure how Buffy finessed the limitations of the construct, but glad that she did.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [13 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Ch. 42 - SNAFU, part 4" from VillageOrchid
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Certainly the definition of a hellish situation. You can't fight the manifestations of your own subconsciousness. Can you?
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [13 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Ch. 41 - SNAFU, part 3" from VillageOrchid
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Interesting -- only Belatrix seems to be "real" in comparison the others are not more than what was expected.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [13 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Ch. 39 - SNAFU, part 1" from VillageOrchid
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Hoping the fact that they are facing their exact worst foes is that this is some kind of "boggart" on steroids magic.
Comments from author:
You'll see...
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [13 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Ch. 36 - Airborne Operations" from VillageOrchid
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Ah... wasn't sure if they would be able to carry it off in this go. Well, good foreshadowing that Hermione might have a miscarriage; I will be genuinely surprised if it turns out to be something else. Although prophesies don't account for modern medicine. So we'll see!
Comments from author:
You can never trust prophecies. Just ask Xander Harris, who personally thwarted several in the course of the Buffy series.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [13 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Ch. 35 - Ground Operations" from VillageOrchid
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Good point. They have to really deplete the enemy before they can go for that control gem.
Comments from author:
Can you deplete an enemy that may be functionally infinite?
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [13 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Ch. 32 - Planning Goes Better With Chocolate" from VillageOrchid
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Also I missed a declaration of time passing and everyone having the chance to get those results. It's like they "magically" got a response and stuff back. I read through twice. No time lapse. Perhaps a sentence or a paragraph got left out???
Comments from author:
Just a time skip of a couple hours.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [13 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Ch. 29 - Trials and Tribulations, part 1" from VillageOrchid
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While this is a plot lengethener - it's a fun one!
Comments from author:
It might turn out to be plot-relevant in one way or another. Always expect sneakiness like that from me. Also, if I run an 'A' plot and a 'B' plot, you can count on them interacting in some way later in the story.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [13 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Ch. 27 - An Unexpected Visitor" from VillageOrchid
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I like the additional interaction. Can't see Blaise wanting his mother to be convicted of Murder, but maybe after so many husbands he can't help but want to stop her.
Comments from author:
I didn't plan on that particular visitor when I conceived the story, but my muse insisted.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [13 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Ch. 24 - After-Action Report" from VillageOrchid
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They still haven't ruled out the obvious - pregnancy. But hey... after all of those healing potions that Hermione took - she might have effected a pregnancy in a negative way if she was.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [13 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Ch. 23 - Force Recon, the Sam Carter Way (3 of 3)" from VillageOrchid
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So far the only thing in their favor is that there doesn't appear to be much of a time difference. Maybe a 3 to 1 ratio or possibly a 1 to 2 or 1 to 1.
Comments from author:
Yes, some hell dimensions have that 100:1 time ratio, but this one is pretty close to 1:1. Although D'Lazza could change that on a whim if she thought about it. (Yeah, she's that powerful in her own dimension, the team just doesn't know it yet.)
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [13 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Ch. 22 - Force Recon, the Sam Carter Way (2 of 3)" from VillageOrchid
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Exciting and scary. These are hell dimensions, not alien worlds. Buffy was so right about Willow not sampling the local power source, too.
Comments from author:
Thanks. In retrospect, I should have gone further into the 'creepy and weird' descriptions, perhaps with some HP Lovecraft adjectives like 'cyclopean' and 'batrachian' and 'non-Euclidean'. Or not.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [13 Dec 12] • Not Rated
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