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Review of chapter "Sound Vs Leaf I" from Harry
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Time to start splitting it up for the one on one battles. Question is, will it be Peter or will it be Naruto that go against Sasuke in the final fight? And don't forget about Sand! They have a score to settle with Snake face as well!
Review By [Harry] • Date [25 Jan 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Gato's Enforcer's" from Marvelsoldier
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I reread this chapter and just realized something. Wouldn't it have been funnier if both Naruto and Pete tried to see who could eat more? After all Naruto eats A LOT of ramen in one sitting. Meanwhile Pete is a growing superhuman with a healing factor. Pete must consume a lot of calories to maintain his awesome strength. I would expect at least 20,000 calories per day or something and possibly more since he's still a growing boy. Do you plan on ever using this hilarious info in future chapter?
Review By [Marvelsoldier] • Date [5 Jan 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Sound Vs Leaf I" from Marvelsoldier
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If you need help figuring out Pete's powers during that time, I would be more then willing to help.
Strength upgrade: He was put easily at class 25 (but that is not his true limit, only at REST strength without exertion)
Speed upgrade: He was now 20% faster (which is over 48x faster than peak humans) in combat
Durability: He took a punch to the face from a 10 tonner and just smirked as the Spidey copycat broke his hand
Healing Factor: He can heal from huge nearly fatal injuries including broken bones in just a few hours
Spider-sense: He can not only use it to sense danger but it also warns him of WHERE and WHEN your going to attack. But after his upgrade he could now sense everything (even non dangerous things in his environment) by detecting vibrations through the air, ground and his webs. He can even "feel" his enemy's every move and sense their muscles tighten and hearts beat.
Spider-night vision: Speaks for itself
Spider-telepathy: He can talk to spiders and sometimes they will help him
Stingers: Can paralyze with just a scratch or possibly kill depending on the dose
He can hold his breath under water for over 20 minutes (just wanted to say that because its really impressive)
Stamina: He can fight for hours without getting tired; Example: He fought Morlun who was feeding on his energy/powers FOR 12 HOURS STRAIGHT.
Agility and webs: You already know that part but his webs are 10 times stronger than steel
It would help if you looked at a respect thread or just bought "the Other" issues or his 30th anniversary issue. I hope I was helpful. Feedback would be appreciated.
Review By [Marvelsoldier] • Date [1 Jan 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Sound Vs Leaf I" from Marvelsoldier
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This was F%$# AWESOME. Boy it sure was worth the wait(even though it's been more than a month like you said). I will never get tired of Peter shocking his friends with his abilities. But how come Peter couldn't see in the dark? With the other powers he should have spider night vision by now. I'm glad you chose to mix things up and change the fights. Peter should fight Kidomaru or Sasuke or Kimmimaru. Just so you know Pete's combat speed is over 40x faster than normal humans (and even more with his upgraded power set and chakra) so a Peter going all out would be moving faster than the speed of sound(for short distances and h2h combat, not overall travel) like Lee with gates. Just sayin. When Pete grows up he will be surprising even Lee with un natural speed and even more strength. Please update soon (preferably much sooner next time). Great chapter.
Comments from author:
Glad that you enjoyed the chapter. Sorry it took so long. As for Peter not being able to see.I'll be honest I never read a Spidey comic during his Other powerup so I have to guess to a certain extent. Besides can you imagine Peter not wanting to have something like that on hand?
As for the fight well you'll just have to wait and see.
Review By [Marvelsoldier] • Date [1 Jan 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Sound Vs Leaf I" from demonichellfire
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Nice match-up I don't care who fights whom expect for the one you know about.
Review By [demonichellfire] • Date [31 Dec 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Sound Vs Leaf I" from Harry
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I say go with a variation of how it was done in the Magna. Just go with who was against who, and use your imagination to write them!
Comments from author:
Eh, I've only ever seen the anime so I have no idea how it was done the Magna.
Review By [Harry] • Date [31 Dec 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Spider vs. Spider and Fan Blows Flower Away" from Marvelsoldier
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Quick thing I wanna say. Shinobi technically shouldn't be able to free themselves from spideys webbing just by cutting it. This is because his webbing can be sticky all over and not just the ends, so if they tried to cut it they would only get more stuck in it. Just saying.
Review By [Marvelsoldier] • Date [11 Nov 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Spider vs. Spider and Fan Blows Flower Away" from Marvelsoldier
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I almost feel like that Peter's words might get through to Sasuke better than Naruto. Here are their backround comparisons.
Its true that Sasuke lost his clan but he at least has the excuse of admitting to him self that he wasn't strong enough to stop it. Compared to Pete he had more than enough power to stop his uncles death but he did nothing(I think Pete in a way has suffered more). Sasuke because of his rep is loved by the village while Pete was hated in school and Spider-man was hated in public. Here is a MAJOR key factor of their characters. Sasuke has let hate consume him and kills his brother and yet what does Peter do when he meets his uncles killer? He spares him, this shows more strength in character than Sasuke ever has. Even when Osborn killed Gwen Peter told him he didn't hate him for it even though he should, because by doing that he would forever blacken the memory of his first love(in contrast to Sasuke who has blackened the memory of his clan). Sasuke's main drive in life is his hate but even hate doesn't last forever as a determining force, but Pete is driven by Love, the love of his friends and family will forever keep him fighting. By giving into hate Sasuke chose the easy path to close himself off to everyone but Pete took the harsh but enduring path of still trying to make friends and be understood.
Review By [Marvelsoldier] • Date [2 Nov 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Missions & Healing" from kelvin
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great update really liked peter showing is abilities with the computers on his memories though i hope you do a more faded in than him getting them all at once. spread it over a couple chapters

question:
since peter is running chakra through his body( also you said in the latest chap his body is getting stronger) i was wondering if he would get any extra abilities from it
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Spider-Man%27s_powers_and_equipment#Arthropod_communication
check out his powers extras in the Powers after "Disassembled" and "The Other" section

edit 10/20/13
How about his night vision i'm sure that would come in handle in the ninja world?
Comments from author:
Glad you enjoyed the chapter. Yeah I thought Peter using his other skills would be useful here, I've been promoting his physical abilities so much that I was kind of ignoring his mental ones. As for memories, you'll just have to wait like everyone else on the results. Mainly because I have two or three different ideas on what could happen and am still deciding which would be the most interesting to use.

Answer:
I think that his other powers would come to him similar to the way that a teen goes through puberty. Since in the old world that was pretty close to what was going on he just kept on avoiding it somehow. (Maybe that's why he's always been a joker, he's only recently gone through puberty.) I have some thoughts on his Other related abilities as well. Like the stingers, technically they only come out when he faces mystical opponents according to wikipedia. Chakra could be argued as a type or form of magic though. So have to wait to see where the Muse leads on that.
Review By [kelvin] • Date [20 Oct 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Spider vs. Spider and Fan Blows Flower Away" from Marvelsoldier
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Oh and I forgot to mention that maybe the next time kido tries hitting Pete he tenses up his muscles and kido breaks his Hans hitting him (HA that would be funny). Not to mention spider summons are useless against Peter since he can telepathically talk to spiders(another HA HA in kidos face over who the true chosen one of the spider is from the great weaver). Plus the moment kido uses his curse mark Peter's stingers reveal themselves (those stingers can even Peirce Luke cages tough skin). As for kidos best shot arrow attack... pfft Peter will just catch it the same way he caught those bullets. Another thing I'm excited for is the evolved spider-sense that should be kicking in soon(its so sensitive that it doesn't detect just threats anymore but everything in his environment he becomes aware of better than seeing with his own eyes including accurate info on how many fingers your holdin up) now that radar definetely puts neji to shame. Btw do you have a link to a pic I could look at so I can get a better image of Pete's look in my head? Oh yeah and one more thing spider-man has oneshoted giants even at an early age... he's that strong. As long as pete trusts his instincts he should dodge all the traps as easy as he does against machine guns. Few sorry for rambling just trying to help you with some facts and idea's.
Review By [Marvelsoldier] • Date [13 Oct 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Spider vs. Spider and Fan Blows Flower Away" from Marvelsoldier
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Good chapter, I'm really getting fired up now. Still I didn't peg Kidomaru as being that fast... at least compared to Peter or Rock Lee but whatever. Poor Kido, in the canon dimension He at least fought an opponent who's senses had a blind spot, but that's not the case with good ol Pete. I'm just going to assume Peter pulled his punches in this chapter cause next time I'm pretty sure Kido's armor is gonna be worth nothing against someone who can crush steel with his bare hands as if it were paper when he first got his powers. Here's an idea (but please don't hate me for it) you could have more memories popping up in Pete's head confusing him (the memories of the Superior Spider-man Aka Doc Ock). Does Peter still remember his kung fu training with shang chi? If he did he could use his pressure point combat to mimic Neji. Also loved that Avengers reference, so good for Pete to say it this time and be the leader. I hope this run in with Kido inspires Spidey to invent his awesome Spider-armor. Just imagine what he could do with that big brain of his: Spider shaped shurikens that detonate with impact webbing, electro shock shuriken and much more. Please let me know what you think of this review.
Comments from author:
For Peter's look if I opt to continue this into Shippuden that armor is actually 1 of 2 looks I'm considering using.

As for the kung fu training it wouldn't really matter since he uses martial arts from the Naruto world which seems based on basic jujitsu or variants of kung-fu.

As for the various spider themed weaponry maybe mix some of it with chakra.
Review By [Marvelsoldier] • Date [11 Oct 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Spider vs. Spider and Fan Blows Flower Away" from (Recent Donor)nerfherder
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Gooo, Tex! Time to kick ass and take name and I ain't interested in names! Please give the Uchia Teme a good kicking. He needs it! Hell, make him a lobotomized breeder! Bout all he's good for!
Review By [(Recent Donor)nerfherder] • Date [5 Oct 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Spider vs. Spider and Fan Blows Flower Away" from justapiranha
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"Ninja Assemble!" lol love it!
Comments from author:
Seemed like a good time to use it.
Review By [justapiranha] • Date [5 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Spider vs. Spider and Fan Blows Flower Away" from Harry
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Uchia, you IDIOT! Snake face has only one reason for you joining him, and its NOT to make you stronger! No, he wants your BODY! And this eight man team is just the team to track down Sasuke. Time to get to work and find him before Snake Face gets him!
Review By [Harry] • Date [4 Oct 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Promotions" from (Recent Donor)nerfherder
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Love the storyline and the characterizations, still need to smack the proofreader. Keep it up Tex!
Review By [(Recent Donor)nerfherder] • Date [1 Oct 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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