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Review of chapter "Rebirthing Now" from dialNforNinja
Review:
Who had Harry proposed to in the old world, anyway? At first you say Hannah, but then later it's Luna. Not that it matters a whole lot with him starting all over fresh in the new world, but it would be best to iron that out, what?

It's possible I've asked this before, but it's long enough since I read the story (and a new revision as well anyway unless I'm much mistaken) that I've started again at the beginning.

- dNN
Comments from author:
Neville's the one engaged to Hannah. I can see where the wording might be a little confusing, but I've never had anyone else question it so I've never really thought about it...
Review By [dialNforNinja] • Date [29 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Steam Train to Hogwarts" from laoshi
Review:
I love tom boy Hermione. I like the way you set it up with Harry scoffing at his own imagination then having her show up for real.

Unintentional Americanism Alert: Hermione’s surname is Granger not last name. Also watched a few kickabouts would be the closest equivalent to a pickup game.

Hermione should punch a person a day.

Does Ginny even exist in this world? Since the Weasley parents were blatantly going to keep having kids until they had a girl wouldn’t they just stop with girl!Ron?

Ok Percy just mentioned her.

How come there are bajillion twins in Hogwarts?
Review By [laoshi] • Date [28 Mar 12] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Samhuinn" from DCG
Review:
Well this is moving along much much fast. I never thought anything in the old versions was filler. But its easy to see this is getting places much quicker.

Growing hair out magical? That work for bra sizes to? There is a lot of lady around to keep the compation going..
Review By [DCG] • Date [28 Mar 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Kisses, Kicking Around, & King's Cross" from laoshi
Review:
I’m enjoying the action scene. I feel like somebody should be shouting Neo is Fighting Morpheus.

Action scenes are one of the hardest to write and you did a very credible job. I like the irony of Lily using Harry’s signature spell to end the fight.

Lily is scary when she’s angry and all that bravery and quick thinking is rewarded by the mockery from her lover and her son. The injustice!

I do love a good spit take.

You do a great job of summing up the evolution of Harry’s relationships with his friends and family despite the long period of time elapsed. I think his relationship with Narcissa is especially interesting.

Who Let Sirius near the government?

It’s a Great chapter. I think the extra work to make changes was definitely worth it.
Review By [laoshi] • Date [28 Mar 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Dinner, Deliberations, & Discovery" from laoshi
Review:
I’m glad you’re letting Lily apply all that magical knowledge she has a little more in this version than you did in the last. Surely a concerned parent who wasn’t involved in Charms research would investigate an unusual wand if it chose one of their children? And Lily doing it with her specialized knowledge makes even more sense.

With her affinity for causes, Lily gets more and more like the original universe Hermione before she went off the rails.

I’m really enjoying the dynamics of Harry and Lily’s relationship.

Info dump away I find it interesting.

Fight the Patriarchy Sister Harry!

Harry Potter the Machiavelli of Hogwarts, who da thunk it? Although Su Holds here own too.

Lily and Narcissa is still the best thing EVAH!!!
Review By [laoshi] • Date [24 Mar 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Jeg Har Kommet Tilbake" from laoshi
Review:
And Ginny’s Freudian creepiness doesn’t end there. Given Harry’s the saviour figure I thought having a girl whose name is the Italian version of Guinevere show interest in him meant they’d end up together. Then I remembered her dad’s name is Arthur. Hello Electra Complex.

Nice crack about the universe with no taste.

Now I’ve spoiled myself on Hermione’s future relationships an odd thought has popped up who does the cooking in her household?

If Lily is the Hermione of her generation, James was presumably the Draco.

Whenever you quote Ron it makes it sound like the most clichéd drivel. I only read the books once years ago and I must of blocked all these utterances of his out.

The Power the Voldemort Knows Not: Sexual Frustration. His probably went the way of his nose.

Harry and Luna are exhibitionists are they?

Is the uniform switch purely for aesthetic considerations or is there a major clothing related plot point later on?

This line made me burst out laughing: She was like Cho without the waterworks, and with a quicker mind, more potent wand, and plumper rear.

I love the way you’ve fleshed out Li Su. I’m hoping that having her as one of what I still hope is Harry’s Angel’s Will mean we get to see some Chinese Magic and Mythological Creatures. I know you’ve gone mostly with a Norse theme but seeing more than her doing the odd spell would be very interesting.

Draco’s in this one. That’s the first big change I’ve noticed from the last version I read. Tell me there are humiliations galore in his future.

A small typo, an unnecessary was in the following sentence: It was made its way to my family over a millennia ago and has been waiting for its master to come ever since.

I really enjoyed the mythology behind Harry’s wand. Does Rensaren actually mean anything or did you just think it sounded cool?

Also will Thor’s wand show up later?

Girl Harry? Is he semi-possessed by Thrud’s spirit? Will he be randomly turning into a girl throughout the story. I enjoyed the switch you did with Harry as Emma Frost’s daughter in that one fic. I’m sure this is going to be very entertaining.
Review By [laoshi] • Date [23 Mar 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Boys of Summer" from laoshi
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It’s nice Sirius got a chance to live a decent life. Although it’s slightly weird to think he has the most conventional long term relationship of any of the characters in Uru.

I enjoy the way you get straight into having a family has it’s disadvantages not that those aren’t massively out weighed by the whole not living in a cupboard thing.

Question: Is Anastasiya a half or full blooded Veela?

Are Remus and Tonks going to end up together this time around? Throw the werewolf a bone.

Oooh Potterverse characters cracking star wars jokes tickles my funny bone. I like to imagine Lily taking James to see it. I have know idea how old they were in 1977 but I think it would go something like the way it did in That 70’s show with James complaining about being dragged to muggle entertainment and then going into slack jawed wonder the first time he sees a laser on screen.

Where’d you get that cool little Parseltongue symbol?

I guess cooking classes are too difficult for Lily to squeeze in between shagging Narcissa, enchantment research, shagging Narcissa ,looking after the kids, shagging Narcissa, being mad at James, shagging Narcissa and shagging Narcissa. Are you sensing a theme?

Is anyone else hungry? All your ingredients for a Fully Monty are right except for hash browns you don’t usually find them in an English cooked breakfast.

No idea about chicken fried steak. I ate a dish in china called fish resembling meat though.

From my memory of the last version of this Cassie doesn’t end up sharing Harry. Who does she end up with? I hope it works out for her.

Tara is a great OC and I love your version of Narcissa.

I’m enjoying all the domestic touches and the last scene with Harry and Lilly was sappy in the good way.
Review By [laoshi] • Date [11 Mar 12] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Rebirthing Now" from laoshi
Review:
I had no idea who SilverAegis was before you mentioned him and I can barely remember his name now.

All Hundredaire. All the Time.

I’m all excited for what I believe is my third go round with Uru. What undiscovered gems await?

As annoying as this version of Hermione is I like to think Uruverse Hermione will eventually, when all the parties involved are old enough for it not to be creepy, occasionally indulge herself in a less obnoxious way.

Which is my unsubtle way of asking if any of Harry’s future dreams show us glimpses of Hermione with her paramours.

You do have a way in pointing out the glaringly obvious in retrospect there is something wrong with a girl wanting to marry a guy she’s been obsessed with since the age of nine.

Is Gobbledegook a canon language in the Potterverse?

Head duties. Ouch. That was mean but she deserved it.

I just googled Luna’s middle name way to go with obscure Celtic Goddess part of whose name means naked.

You do a great job developing Harry’s sense of isolation and misery in a post victory world. And the way he talks about Luna is just made of wonderful.

I like you employing wishing on a shooting star as Harry’s method of world hopping rather than a random portal. It feels like something Neil Gaiman would do.

I think you might of answered this one already but did the consciousness of 11 year old Harry get put into the 17 year old Harry back in “our” reality?

James Potter is a dick isn’t he?

Dahlia Potter lacking oomph would be the whole point just like Buffy the Vampire Slayer.

The colour shifting was a massive clue. I can’t believe I didn’t get it the 1st time around.

I enjoy the depth of thought you put into Harry making the first steps to adjust to his new world.

I don’t think that chapter had any major changes since the last time I reviewed it.
Comments from author:
Ginny? Creepy? Nooooo. Almost as creepy as a middle-aged woman inserting herself as a preteen girl who grows up to marry the character she openly admits she patterned after her ex-husband.

Gobbledegook is the canon language of the goblins. It's mentioned that Crouch and... I believe Dumbledore speak it. Crouch for sure, though.

I've never confirmed or denied what happened to the Harry of the second world. I don't want to because then I might be held to it later.

The color-shifting letters were a subtle thing. Most people missed it.
Review By [laoshi] • Date [6 Mar 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Aftermath p2" from Elleria
Review:
Love this, very happy to see an update.
Comments from author:
Thanks, hope to have the last bit of Aftermath soon.
Review By [Elleria] • Date [23 Feb 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Aftermath p2" from Chikageko
Review:
YOU'RE BACK!

Well, sortof; that was really short, as you noted.

Out of curisoity, did you make this from my suggestion, or did you have this planned previously?
Comments from author:
I actually have had thirty chapters outlined since when I started the story. So it's not a matter of figuring out what to write, so much as actually executing a given idea and getting it cleaned up by my beta readers.
Review By [Chikageko] • Date [23 Feb 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Aftermath p2" from TheMaskedLurker
Review:
--'{@

A "half" of a "half",
Better than no "half" at all.
That is my thinking.

-[ Releasing what you've got to get some "feedback" from your readers and to satiate a bit of their appetites is a good decision, in my opinion. Then again, I am reader, so there is some bias there.
Anyways, having "Harry's Angels" coming up with his back-story for his wand and his abilities is a little bit amusing. I just hope you can turn into a gag that keeps on running. If your Luna had been a fanon Luna, there would have been a lot of comedic potential there. I'm a big fan of humor overkill. Having a flight of fancy being the truth is just the starting point for me. ]-
Comments from author:
Well, they're startlingly close to the truth, and it also gives Harry the ability to not-lie even if they're wrong. "I never lied to you, I just didn't tell you that you were wrong when you assumed something" and all that.
Review By [TheMaskedLurker] • Date [22 Feb 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Aftermath p2" from AbscondingCascade
Review:
Epic as always and in thanks for this and all your other wonderful contributions to the fanfic world I give you a short :) 40 minute 29 second medley I found on youtube - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=l7sN2ijzhdk

Now If you'll excuse me I still have my outstanding project of making my reviewing name a reality as I find a way to run away with a waterfall ... :)
Comments from author:
It'll give me something to download and watch on the bus tomorrow...
Review By [AbscondingCascade] • Date [22 Feb 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Aftermath p2" from Ernestt
Review:
that was a creative way to explain things. also. TAKING TOO LONG!!! but i still appreciate it.
Comments from author:
Yeah, I had wanted to go from Su's scene to the end of the chapter in one long go but my betas disappeared. The two remaining bits (both of which are quick) are... well, one is simple but the other is not. So I want to give one or both betas a little bit longer to reply before I give up and post it too.
Review By [Ernestt] • Date [22 Feb 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Aftermath p2" from Gideon
Review:
I guess it isn't surprising that Su is guessing better than the rest of Harry's friends, she does have a little more information than most of them. The explanation of the wand works well though and it also informs your readers! But experimenting with much power and gender based shapechanging? I don't know if that will turn out well. Better to know beforehand than in the middle of a big fight I guess.
Comments from author:
Well, up until now, he's sorta taken Thrúd and Rensaren for granted. It's like his old power set, so no big deal. It's now that he's being confronted with questions and ideas and theories that he's starting to investigate it too, or express a willingness to investigate it. And, like you said, better to know now then to find out later.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [22 Feb 12] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Aftermath p2" from AnFan
Review:
Yay, glad to see a new chapter. Sorry to hear about the beta blues, but it is the season for school in case that is where yours has lost themselves.

I continue to enjoy the story and look forward to anything you post.

One thing about this chapter, you've gone back on your statement that you were going to replace 'tàijíquán ' with 'tai chi' for sanity's sake. :)
Comments from author:
I'm actually getting ready to reload all the chapters with UTF-8 versions that make foreign characters display better. I made the change in all of them and will edit my note accordingly because... well, screw the stupid people. :)
Review By [AnFan] • Date [22 Feb 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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