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Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty Eight: Epilogue" from (Recent Donor)GothTroubleMaker
Review By [(Recent Donor)GothTroubleMaker] • Date [22 Jan 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty Eight: Epilogue" from SilverMidnight
I loved the story, it was really well done and I can't wait for the sequel!
Review By [SilverMidnight] • Date [19 Jan 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty Eight: Epilogue" from MountainKing
Trying to review the story as a whole is a little difficult, and I've been trying to since you first posted the epilogue. I always try to give balanced and fair reviews and sometimes it feels like I'm sticking a knife in. Finding flaws that aren't really there, but here we go.

There is something about this story that feels both rushed and unfinished. Either there is a lot of set up for a sequel or you've left a lot of unanswered questions on purpose. What exactly was the extent of Buffy and the Doctor's relationship, where did the Shadowmen get a Time Lord child, how does Angel know the Doctor, what other things has the Doctor been involved in and what sort of impact has meeting the rogue Time Lord had on this instance of Buffy? More is needed. Either Buffy reflecting on what has happened or Willow and Xander's outside impressions on how she's changed.
A whole new story, set two or three months later, might help solve some of these issues.

Next comes something that is a personal issue, so feel free to ignore it. The Doctor having a personal relationship with a human is just wrong. This is one of the reasons I hated Rose by the end and found Martha such an annoyance. Put simply Humans are like keeping half trained Apes as pets to Time Lords and that's being generous. We are so far down on the evolutionary scale that we have more in common with plankton! Now the Doctor, due to his compassion and morals, accepts humanity for what it is and enjoys travelling with one or two people. Their fresh outlook and courage making them friends and good companions. Writing the Doctor in any sort of relationship, other than friend or elderly relative, cheapens him. It might be argued that it makes him more relatable and more human, but that's the problem. He's not, there should always be the sense that what you are dealing with is very much a God. The Oncoming Storm, a Lord of Time. Not some love sick school boy yearning for some pretty girl. That, or vice versa a girl falling for the Doctor, just adds a whole factor that doesn't work.

Another point in the mis characterisation of the Doctor is the will not kill idea. Right at the start you have the Doctor trying to reason with a Vampire, the Ancient Enemy. To him this is like trying to reason with a Dalek, worse still his argument is; 'Hey maybe you don't bite people anymore, mmkay?' While he despises killing, like most Time Lords who not only see the act as barbaric but see it as grand interference on the web of time as it should play out, he is more than willing to resort to it. If there is no other option. There is a reason his name often comes with a list of the dead. Before today he's used cyanide gas, spike traps, temporal snares, explosions and in the Great Vampires case a steal shaft to the heart. Heck when he first encountered Omega he detonated a Black Hole with a matter/antimatter explosion. The centre of which was Omega.

Finally vamp-be-gone ? The Doctor has a cure to Vampirism lying around in the TARDIS? First of all this is a cheap way to resolve a plot twist, my jaw literally dropped when reading it. Just as cheap, but more in keeping should have been Omega, horrified at the Doctor's imminent un-death took Buffy back in time in the TARDIS and saved the Doctor. Creating a paradox that both sealed "Toby" in the black hole and killed Omega, freeing him from his torture. Vamp-be-gone was a deux ex Machina that was both unnecessary and killed a great portion of the drama you had going.

Which is a shame, as this is a very good story. Buffy questioning her destiny like his is something very few writers have ever had the guts to try. Another change from the norm is a lot of writers, myself included, put Buffy in one of two roles; the hero that gets it right or the smug pain in the arse that needs to be taken down a couple of pegs. Here you have the right mix of both, far more in character with the Buffy we all know. She's sure, confidant and capable of making mistakes while at the same time quietly uncomfortable. If only more writers could pull this off. Xander and Willow, while cameoing here, are the perfect foils for her to bounce off from. Showing both sides of her personality.

I also like how you've got the Watchers Council, people meddling with forces beyond their control. Using what little knowledge they had dangerously, with it all about to explode in their collective faces. Faith's hit first, don't bother with questions later, attitude that got her in to so much trouble originally is used to great effect.

So a good story, despite it's flaws. I do look forward to reading more from you

AKA Mountain King
Comments from author:
I think that's fair. I disagree on the Doctor falling in love, because I think it just makes things more interesting. But overall, it's a fair critique. It's not the best thing I've ever written. The vamp-away was probably a bit deus ex machina. But I figured because I mentioned it earlier, I might as well use it again.

Vamp-Away is not mine, by the way. It was taken from a Doctor Who book about vampires, Vampire Science.

The only thing is, about the vampire killing -- I originally had a whole thing in here about where the Doctor explains that vampires are not Daleks, but I cut it out because it was seriously boring. In Vampire Science, the Doctor honestly feels he doesn't want to kill vampires, even though they act despicably and evilly and everyone around the Doctor keeps telling him that he's crazy. He still doesn't want to kill them. He does have a loophole in this logic (which I will use later), but in general, he seems very against. And I think that's right. I feel like, if there is any way for a vampire to get better (and Buffy has shown us that this is unlikely but possible) that the Doctor should want to give them a chance.

I was going to write a sequel short story that did exactly what you were talking about -- a digestive, reflective story on how Buffy's changed. Thing is, it was boring, so I scrapped it. I'm afraid that when I do post the next installment of this series, you are going to hate me. I apologize ahead of time.

There is, of course, the possibility of writing extra short stories, later on, that cover this ground. I remain optimistic that I can -- maybe -- write a short story that will be not-boring that will discuss these issues. But I don't have anything written right now.

Thanks for the review! Hope to hear more from you in the future!

Review By [MountainKing] • Date [18 Jan 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty Eight: Epilogue" from Sinangeled
Oh Wow! I really liked the ending, even though there is a lot that I didn't understand. I love your portrayal of Angel though, and the Epilogue was fantastic.
Comments from author:
Thank you! I also really love the epilogue. I've been getting a lot of "huh?"'s, which I expected, but I loved the fact that I said nothing and said everything at the same time. It's a skill I'm working on. Thank you so much for your feedback; I'm glad someone else besides just me really liked the epilogue.
Review By [Sinangeled] • Date [16 Jan 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty Eight: Epilogue" from katfairy
I wish that just once somebody would point out that the Doctor doesn't bring death, destruction, etc. It's like blaming Buffy for vampires- the circumstances already existed; the Doctor just happened to find them. In almost every episode, the situation is already begun before he arrives and he keeps it from being worse. He certainly has his flaws, but causing wide-spread disaster is not one of them. I guess it's just a case of "blame the messenger."
Review By [katfairy] • Date [16 Jan 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty Eight: Epilogue" from Valkyrie
Well, that's an interesting story.
Review By [Valkyrie] • Date [16 Jan 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty Eight: Epilogue" from (Past Donor)FireDragon
I was wondering if Buffy is an alternate version of Rose for the Doctor in an earlier chapter, now after that ending I am wondering if I was right. But he called her Elisbeth. hmm dude you can't leave it there. So the Doctor was in Love with Buffy? I am confused. and what did he do that hurt her? (tried to leave her for her own good? UG!!!)
Comments from author:
You picked up on everything you were supposed to. Buffy isn't an alternate version of Rose. She's just Buffy. And in terms of what he did to hurt her -- wouldn't you like to know? hehehehehe...
Review By [(Past Donor)FireDragon] • Date [16 Jan 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty Eight: Epilogue" from Mayrose
Oh, I can't wait until the sequel! I'm very anxious to know more about Elizabeth and what happened between her and the Doctor to make her so angry, and just generally what she'd been like, not being a Slayer and facing Daleks and aliens instead of vampires and demons.
I've enjoyed this fic very much. You have a unique little twist to the Buffy/Doctor Who crossover that I really liked.
I wonder, did Spike have a role in time line A, or is he unique to this one (at least, when it comes to knowing Elizabeth/Buffy)? Will Buffy still die saving Dawn, or is the Doctor going to interfere with Buffy's life before that. His reaction to Dawn would be very interesting to see, too.
I'm keeping my eye out for the next story. :)
Review By [Mayrose] • Date [15 Jan 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty Eight: Epilogue" from Eureka
So what happened in 03????
Comments from author:
Ah, well, to tell you that, I'd have to watch a lot more Buffy. So the answer is, I have no clue! But I know what the effect is -- because that stays the same across both timelines.
Review By [Eureka] • Date [15 Jan 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty Eight: Epilogue" from Gideon
That is so typical. The Doctor doing something selfless for someone else partly in order to cover over his own guilt :( Angel is very similar in some ways to the Doctor and I think he rejected this opportunity for the wrong reasons. Buffy really doesn't ever have any good luck with men does she?
If the Doctor could guarantee that none of the "past" would come back to bite Buffy I would actually agree that it should not be mentioned. When has that ever happened though :(
Review By [Gideon] • Date [15 Jan 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty Seven" from Gideon
It makes sense now, after the Doctor has explained it. He does that much better than Jack does, possibly because he understands the process a bit better than Jack does. Surely turning Angel Human again could be his second chance though? I guess the Doctor wouldn't want to force it on him though and Angel probably wouldn't take it, wouldn't feel that he deserved it, not to mention all the history between them that Buffy doesn't know.
So is that the end of Toby's incursion then? All fixed now? Because Omega said that it was too late, that this wouldn't stop Toby. Was he correct?
Review By [Gideon] • Date [15 Jan 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty Seven" from Mayrose
No, no, I want to know! Even if it's just in his thoughts. What was Angel in that alternate timeline if not a vampire, and how did Elizabeth know him? (I'm getting this right, right? Timeline A was with the Daleks and Timeline B was with vampires, which means no vampires in timeline A right?)

Is Buffy going to go travel with him? I mean, she wanted a reward/vacation, time machine might be able to give her just that.

I hope poor Jack isn't going to wake up alone and abandoned...
Review By [Mayrose] • Date [15 Jan 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty Seven" from (Current Donor)vidicon
A time for second chances? And still he mucks up... Angel just never seems able to win, does he? Poor Irish vampire. I think I'd prefer to be dust than to know that it was me, albeit with a disease who had committed such atrocities as vampires do. There would always be the doubt, the pain, the knowledge that maybe if you had fought a little harder... Definitely the stake, then at least there would be a clean death and not the torment of the soul the Doctor apparently likes to inflict.

Thanks for writing
Review By [(Current Donor)vidicon] • Date [15 Jan 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty Six" from Gideon
Just in the nick of time we hope? Loved the view of Buffy's driving! Not her fault really, driving in another country is hard.
Comments from author:
I know! I put in the stuff about "other right!" because that's exactly what it's like driving in England. It's totally nutsy.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [14 Jan 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty Six" from CageFire
This story is awesome so far. :)
Review By [CageFire] • Date [14 Jan 12] • Not Rated
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