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Review of chapter "Eye for an eye (1)" from JaredDrake
Heh. Who needs a renegade response option when you have Xander Harris next to you? He's awesome like that.
Comments from author:
Oh femShep will still get her occasional moments of being a hell on wheels bitch I love Jennifer Hale too much not to let her shine through from time to time.
Review By [JaredDrake] • Date [3 Jun 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Price of Revenge" from Omegaprime
Man, I just love how you are changing things in the Mass Effect universe.

You just pulled the rug from underneath Morinth, Jack and Zaeed and totally freaked them out.

I loved how Shepard and Xander totally shut Zaeed up when they proved that they weren't wet behind the ears idiots.

But I think Jack might lose her mind soon when she realizes that Shepard and her crew will not screw her over.

I wonder how Garus's loyalty mission will go when Xander gets involved?

I sense chaos on the horizon, the galaxy will never know what hit it.

That tune Morinth sensed, was that the indoctrination tune?

Keep up the good work.
Review By [Omegaprime] • Date [27 May 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Price of Revenge" from JaredDrake
Man, I love the little spins you put into this story. You're not just rehashing canon... you make it more interesting! (...better too) Although, I'm still on the fence with the Morinth thing. A good vampire, is a dead vampire. Even if they do have a soul.

Another thing, Jack/Xander? Ergh. That being said, I always imagine Natalie Portman or Mila Kunis as Jack. :P

Miranda/Xander is so much better. Dat Ass. There's also the Cordy/Xander thing those two could have. ^_^
Comments from author:
Unfortunately Dat Ass is about to wind up in a bitter tug of war with a certain thief who is after ...The PRiiiiize

Xander will play a role in the resolution of this battle ... Though I guess I'll have to break up my favorite paring in the game so Jacob can go off and be an ... ugh... husband and father ...

As for Morinth ...if I do my job right you are going to love how the Morinth question gets resolved.
Review By [JaredDrake] • Date [23 May 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Price of Revenge" from JonnyNapalm
Each time I read one of your chapters for this story I plan on setting the bar a little higher on quality...and then you clear it by the current setting. It's getting kinda ridiculous. The way you've been integrating the characters in this story is fantastic, and I'm really looking forward to getting everybody's little side missions out of in print. Shepard's run down of Zaeed's character flaws and obsession were fantastic, and the action scenes were thrilling. I'm still hoping we run into Grunt, 'cause I loved his story and the mission for him on Tuchanka would be interesting to see Xander on. Great stuff. Thanks for sharing it.
Comments from author:
Grunt is coming as are Tali and Legion

Tuchanka is home to my two fav mission --- aside from LOTSB

As for the Quality bar ...I am chasing just as many awesom writers as you are and My desire to be at least as good as them is partly responsible for why I keep trying to make the story better.

And we are all chasing BIOWARE, no matter what you think of the ending everything that comes before is some of the best ingame writing I have ever seen.

And I m not just talkingabout the obvious stuff like Mordin and Thane I mean really cool character moments like Tarquin Victus a scene that I am hoping to do justice to when Team Normandy get involved.
Review By [JonnyNapalm] • Date [23 May 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Price of Revenge" from EroSlackerMicha
bravo. well done.
Citadel next and that will be fun to see.

and who or what will mess with Xander there? and Jack...on a station with a quarter of a million people all alone in the...whoops wrong series.

anyway keep up the good work
Comments from author:
Have no fear my friend ... The jack/Xander shmexy willsoon rear its head ... There is just one tiny bit of unfinished business Xand has to clear up first... Cue sinister laughter
Review By [EroSlackerMicha] • Date [23 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Omega (7)" from Cmiller
Ya know if you were to go with my idea of Lorne having a Caritas on Illiusm(sp?) then you should totally have the confrintation between Mother and Daughter(Samara and Morinth) under the Sanctuary spell.

Would be another fun twist if you had Faith taunt Jack or Shepard(mostly want to see Jack) into trying to attack her(Faith) in Caritas. Be even better if Lorne tricks Xander and Joan into singing for him... no Just me.
Review By [Cmiller] • Date [19 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Omega (7)" from Yeffaros
Another great chapter, I'm certainly interested to see where they are headed next. It would also be interesting to see how Samara would act if she were forced to work with Morinth through Shepard's decree, assuming of course that she joins the team.
Review By [Yeffaros] • Date [19 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Omega (7)" from Blackguard
Oh the meeting with Samara should be most interesting to read. Can't wait for it.
Review By [Blackguard] • Date [19 May 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Omega (7)" from Tjin
More and more complicated... but still a heck of a lot of fun... thanks for letting us read.
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...wait til Willow joins the crew, then stuff really starts happening
Review By [Tjin] • Date [19 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Omega (7)" from Kaosreign
I find myself asking...what happens if Morinth decides waiting for something she will not receive is no longer viable? Let's face it she is a unrependent killer who takes pleasure in the kill, she will bolt when her mother is being recruited and Samara will go on the warpath when she learns Shepard is harboring her.

The logic dictates that a choice must be made, save the murderer who will never stop or side with the Justicar who has suffered years of shame and guilt for the actions of her daughter. Morinth has had centuries of freedom she has used to kill she will not give it up, it's not in her character...or perhaps you have something planned like you did with Benezia?

I do hope to read more soon, you have a very unique gift for making this story more and more intriguing
Comments from author:
Morinth is an unrepentant killer who puts her life on the line for people she barely knows and has no reason to trust largely on the strength of her obsession / attraction to a single person who obviously only spared her life on a dangerous whim ... kind of reminds one of a certain vampire or two.

Samara has suffered for her daughter's actions but she freely admits she was no angel in her younger years and Now upholds a dangerously strict code of ethics that it is very easy to transgress.

Try playing a Shep who's only real renegade acts are to allow your companions to get their kill-on whenever the have a mind to, Never mind your own actions ... you will easily acquire enough renegade points that Samara will actually threaten you when you meet her or at least hint she'd be inclined toward killing you if it were not for her oath of subsumation.

I find the Samara-Morinth dynamic to be fascinating and couldn't resist exploring it in detail when I sat down to write my own version of the events of the game.

Assuming this whole thing doesn't blow up in my face The Morinth Storyline should be a fun ride

Hope you get to see it play out.

thanks for reading.
Review By [Kaosreign] • Date [19 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Omega (7)" from EroSlackerMicha
Cool. Are we going to collect Samara next? or will she get a bullet to the brainpan SQUISH.

Xan's still attracting the dangerous. wonder how long before Jack chases him too.
anyway, keep up the good work and give us more soon please.
Comments from author:
I have been thinking about a Jack Xander ship

I've had it pointed out to me that Xand's experience with Faith would make him able to cope with Jack and her issues better then some. I also like the idea that Jack might get a Xander-related tattoo --- Suggestions?
Review By [EroSlackerMicha] • Date [19 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Omega (6)" from Cdog
I haven't decided on whether I plan to keep Morinth around for my story or not, but here you are with the same idea. I can't tell whether I like this story more because it has so many ideas that I've already worked out, or plan to anyway, or disappointed because you beat me to it first.

I still love it and I can't wait to see how Xander's reunion with Aria will play out.
Comments from author:
How do you think I feel, Malardark and Setrus seem to have come up with every brilliant idea before I could write it down.

Sometimes I'm reading Dark Energy and it's like the woman has a hotline connection to Bioware's writing team

My only weapon has been asking myself constantly how would Joss Whedon write this scene or that scene

Morinth for instance, I could see Joss have a hell of a lot of fun with Morinth and Samara.

The best advice I can give is the one that I am following, the game is filled with choices

Malaradark and Setrus both choose to kill off Morinth and reduce Samara to barely mentioned support character so thats one reason I'm making their parts bigger

Just write your story ... go left when I go right and you'll be fine but hey even if you follow the exact same pathway if you manage to find a unique Cdog spin on the how and why of it all it will still be original in its own way and maybe even better then my story.
Review By [Cdog] • Date [16 May 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Omega (6)" from Blackguard
I look forward to seeing Xander and Aria's chat. That should be most enjoyable.
Review By [Blackguard] • Date [13 May 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Omega (6)" from lorwen
truly awesome story!
Comments from author:
thanks doing my best to keep it that way, hope you continue to enjoy it.
Review By [lorwen] • Date [10 May 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Omega (6)" from Maelwyse
... I blame you...

I already have 190 hours in ME2, and NOW, I'm going back and playing it from scratch *again* because of your DANG story.


When do I get more? Please? pretty please? I'd even volunteer to be a beta, if you need one!
Review By [Maelwyse] • Date [7 May 12] • Not Rated
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