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Review of chapter "Just Gotta Vent Sometimes" from (Past Donor)KieriToews
*stands up and applauds* Brava!!! THANK YOU!!!!!! I've wanted to see a scene like that after watching the episode! You made me *Very, very, very* happy!!!
Comments from author:
It would have been nice, wouldn't it? *dreamy sigh of possibilities*
Review By [(Past Donor)KieriToews] • Date [6 Feb 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Just Gotta Vent Sometimes" from Valkyrie
That's fantastic. "A nice backhand..."
Comments from author:
Gotta admit that Big D would ask for it, and with each passing loop, Buffy's getting closer to agreeing.
Review By [Valkyrie] • Date [6 Feb 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Just Gotta Vent Sometimes" from (Current Donor)Sulien
As far as I'm concerned, this is word for word how things should have gone in the series. I was waiting for Buffy to 'Slayer Up' when the rest of them finished dog-piling on, but she backed down and left.

Pity the loops can't end here and 'fix' the canon error made by Joss.
Comments from author:
I know! It was absolutely sickening how she slinked out like an abused animal.
Review By [(Current Donor)Sulien] • Date [5 Feb 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Just Gotta Vent Sometimes" from Harry
Well, Buffy got a lot off her chest in this Time Line. My suggestion for the next time line: Take it down a darker path. Get rid of Kennedy in a way that shows Wilow and the others just what Kenney thinks of the others. Maybe have her record a video before she goes out to try and take out a nest. THat way, it shows Red and everyone else just what a person Kennedy is!
Comments from author:
If you want to write it, go ahead. I rarely can handle doing dark stuff.
Review By [Harry] • Date [5 Feb 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Just Gotta Vent Sometimes" from clarityfades
That was perfect! & I love the idea of Buffy keeping her "venting" options open. ;) If I was a decent writer, I'd try my hand at one myself!
Comments from author:
If it were me, I'd stagger the loops: one real option followed by a venting session.
Review By [clarityfades] • Date [5 Feb 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Just Gotta Vent Sometimes" from Gideon
That didn't see like a whole lot of fun but I'm sure it was cathartic for Buffy. Maybe she could take one loop off and just go to Disneyland for a few days? That would be a more meaningful break :)
Also if being Buddy Buffy didn't work maybe she needs to go a bit further. Maybe some flirting with kennedy when she turns up? If Kennedy thinks she has a chance with Buffy maybe she and Willow would not get together and Kennedy would be on Buffy's side? If Buffy can pretend to like Kennedy for a few days then she can turn around and crush her spirit when she is not needed anymore :) But even having Kennedy onside is probably not enough to turn the tide :(
Hey, if she wanted to get extra cathartic she could get her friends turned one by one and then *really* beat them up!
Comments from author:
Hey! How'd you know that I was going to use Disneyland? Stop hacking into my computer!!!

I shudder to consider the Kennedy 'ship one, though. I'd almost prefer she tried to seduce Caleb instead (Not that I'll write either of those two, but maybe somebody else will).
Review By [Gideon] • Date [5 Feb 12] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Just Gotta Vent Sometimes" from JasonBarnett
I'd like to but honestly I think the smart think to do was for Buffy to go by herself in the first place so I don't see how it could work without being at least semi-anti-Buffy

edit: No, I meant instead of going to rally the troops in Empty Places she just headed out.

also I'd like to add I think it's a bit foolish to expect Dawn to be happy Buffy died for her.

edit2: maybe, but she probably sees it as saving a lot of lives, including Buffy's since if Buffy feels she needs the troops then she won't attack without them.

By the way, can Buffy win if we write a chapter.
Comments from author:
I did a loop where she went by herself...or at least tried to. It actually was the first loop she tried in the main story.

EDIT: Not happy, but maybe a little more loyal and a little less selfish and bratty.

EDIT 2: Sure, she won in the first outtake, albeit in a crackfic sorta way.
Review By [JasonBarnett] • Date [5 Feb 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Just Gotta Vent Sometimes" from misterq
That was nice, although I kinda wanted to see how things would develop with Buffy snapping, telling everyone off, and becoming alpha bitch. Would they accept her forceful leadership or go out minus weapons and get torn apart by bringers?

There should also be a point where Buffy realizes that everything she does would probably fail and so starts asking the question, what would Buffy NOT do. Things like, despite not liking guns, raiding the (now abandoned, I guess) army base again for weapons and gearing everyone up for war. Guns don't work that well on vamps, but bringers and Caleb aren't vamps. Plus, Buffy should have a healthy respect for rocket launchers by now.

Or asking Willow to supercharge her magic again now that she knows what to look out for to prevent turning dark.

Or asking Riley about some military help, or an airstrike.

I forget what Angel's group were doing at the time, but Buffy could send for them to come help. If Willow and Faith can't handle the bringers while Buffy and Spike grab the scythe, then maybe Willow, Faith, Angel, Gunn, Wesley, etc.. would stand a better chance? (Or Willow, Faith, and Xander and Giles with machine guns and LOTS of ammo?)
Comments from author:
Huh, I may have to consider one of those suggestions. It kinda matches with a bunny I had a long time ago and could work as a side loop here.
Review By [misterq] • Date [5 Feb 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Die, Kennedy, Die!" from Valkyrie
I think I liked the first half for its ominous moral implications. (Being that, after a certain time, Buffy would stop seeing them as people. The fact that the loop in which she lets someone die goes better than others is also sort of telling.)

The second half... Why did I keep thinking of Kraft singles when you mentioned velveeta? I have no idea what velveeta is, mind you. I realize that it's a cheese of some form, just not sure I've ever had it.
Comments from author:
Yeah, kinda figured that if she knew the loop would just repeat again, she'd try this at least once. And the nice thing is that KenKen is sorta to blame for her own death since she didn't listen to Buffy's advice.

Velveeta is pretty much the same thing as the singles. In fact they have Velveeta singles too. They are GREAT for grilled cheese sandwiches. wiki said that it's a 'cheese product'; not very encouraging.
Review By [Valkyrie] • Date [3 Feb 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Die, Kennedy, Die!" from Angelsgirl
Love it I never liked Kennedy!! :)
Comments from author:
It'd be fun to do a series of ways to kill her. Maybe title it, "You killed Kennedy...You bastard!" Sorry, just a little South Park humor. Except in this case, only Willow would be really upset at her death...s.
Review By [Angelsgirl] • Date [3 Feb 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Die, Kennedy, Die!" from (Current Donor)Sulien
*LMAO!* Oh, man...the cheese bit was cracktastic! Thanks for the laugh, I rather needed it. :)
Comments from author:
To be honest, I have no clue where Musie got that from, other than just wondering what would be the oddest way to close the Hellmouth? Then a flash of the Cheese Man from the dreams, and there you have it.
Review By [(Current Donor)Sulien] • Date [3 Feb 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Die, Kennedy, Die!" from cryyhavoc
So, the lesson here is if Buffy doesn't like you or you disagree with her, instead of doing her sacred duty and protecting the innocent, she will let you die. Basically, she is going to let everyone die except for her "yes man" Spike, right? Your Buffy is such a hero.
Comments from author:
No, the lesson is that if somebody has more experience fighting demons and they tell you something, you should listen to them instead of your own arrogance.
Review By [cryyhavoc] • Date [2 Feb 12] • Rating [1 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Die, Kennedy, Die!" from clarityfades
Hee! & Kennedy bites the dust! Love it. :D & I like the idea of opening up the time loops to multiple authors. It'll be interesting to see who takes up the challenge & what comes of it. :)
Comments from author:
Sure hope somebody decides to try it.
Review By [clarityfades] • Date [2 Feb 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Die, Kennedy, Die!" from Gideon
Yeah that last bit was pretty cheesy :) It should count as a win though right? Unless, maybe, the scoobies kicked Buffy out of the House for not telling them how it was done??
It is a pity that the potentials can't remember a few helpful tips from some of the loops. Respect for Buffy's knowledge would do them all some good. Remembering Buffy getting them all killed a bunch of times probably would not be good for Morale though :(
Comments from author:
The way this story is going, they probably *would* kick her and Faith out, thinking they could do things without a Slayer now that the First has been smacked down.

The morale thing could be an issue if they ever found out.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [2 Feb 12] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Die, Kennedy, Die!" from Harry
Well, this is one way get rid of the headace Slayer Kennedy! Now, lets give Red a little something seductive to deal with.
Comments from author:
She'd be better off with a vibrator.
Review By [Harry] • Date [2 Feb 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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