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Review of chapter "chapter 6" from Elleria
Review:
Love this. Looking forward to the next bit.
Review By [Elleria] • Date [19 Apr 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "chapter 6" from CrystalBlaze
Review:
Xander may just snap up Ms. Calendar at this rate, if she turns out to be the Hinata of the piece. One way he's far in advance of Naruto, after all, is in noticing the attention of girls.

(Does this mark Cordelia of the witty insight and vorpal tones as being Ino?)

Edit:

Kurenai is, in her own words, interested in furthering the art of Genjutsu. She's devotedly protective of her squad, notorious for her dislike of perverts, and a confident, competent Jounin ninja of Konoha. It pretty much takes the thoroughly broken uber-genjutsu of a full blown Mangenkyo Pink-eye Infection (AKA Sharingan) to overcome her expertise in illusion.

Jenny Carpenter (AKA Janna Kalderash) is a techno-pagan and a not-very-appreciated member of the Kalderash Gypsy clan. Asuide from being a hottie and a computer sciences teacher, she's in Sunnydale to watch over and preserve the misery of one Angel of the Aurelius line, previously Angelus of the Scourge of Europe.

As she's just heretical enough they don't like her, the elders of the clan haven't told her what will break the curse. Canonically, she manages to fall for Giles, but gets spurned (likely due to his own guilt over things like Eyghon and the Cruciamentum) when her secret is revealed.

She's not crazy enough to match the style of, say, Anko. (If Drusilla ever gets her soul back, however..)
Comments from author:
Truthfully, I havent really tried to make anymore parallels between the characters. I mostly think about things as I write it. I see Tara as Hinata though and Cordelia could work as Ino. I would say Harmony, but Ino was way too smart and I respect her too much for that.
I would choose an older lady for Ms. Calender. Probably Kurenai, but Im still not sure about all of her personality traits. I'll look it up when the time comes.
Thanks for reviewing!
Review By [CrystalBlaze] • Date [15 Apr 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter 6" from lillyb
Review:
Good job, the pace seems to be picking up. Not sure where your going but it's an interesting path your taking.
Review By [lillyb] • Date [14 Apr 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "chapter 6" from eriktheviking
Review:
A well written and entertaining blend of characters with Xander trying to remain primarily Xander.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [14 Apr 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "chapter 6" from kayron
Review:
I know nothing about whoever Xander is supposed to be, but I find his changes and improvements interesting. I think it's kind of weird, but funny at the same time, that Xander is a now cheering. I think that it is disgusting the way Willow has no problem turning her back on Xander when it is convenient for her.
Review By [kayron] • Date [13 Apr 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "chapter 5" from eriktheviking
Review:
A cracking good fun twist.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [8 Apr 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "chapter 5" from lillyb
Review:
That's new I don't think I've ever seen Xan as a cheer leader... I'm speechless.
Comments from author:
Ha that was my point.
Review By [lillyb] • Date [5 Apr 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "chapter 4" from Elleria
Review:
Love this.
Review By [Elleria] • Date [31 Mar 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "chapter 4" from (Current Donor)Shieldage
Review:
I like Giles' gibe at Buffy. Good use of vamps having money - them looting each other in the background makes a lot more sense than the Scoobies suddenly discovering the idea first, after all the undead spend a lot more time with themselves than the Scoobies do :)
Review By [(Current Donor)Shieldage] • Date [24 Mar 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "chapter 4" from Riniko
Review:
Xander like Naruto is now thinking about the welfare of the people of the town it seems. Hopefully this will work out much better for him than it did Naruto, as the town does not have a hate Xander on sight mentality.
Review By [Riniko] • Date [23 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter 3" from lillyb
Review:
I don't know much of Naruto but i think your very smart to use a fan fiction version of him for this story it gives you so much freedom with him, I mean if someone nags you about him being out of character you can just say "hands off my Naruto you cant have him..." or something less immature and more literate. good work.
Review By [lillyb] • Date [15 Mar 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "chapter 3" from CrystalBlaze
Review:
Lovely work, and quite sensibly done.

The fact it's a boatload of chakra bound into certain disciplines means that Xander is a major healer, especially if his Naruto managed to get instruction from Tsunade. What would happen if his chakra blockage is ever cleared?
Review By [CrystalBlaze] • Date [13 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter 3" from IrFane
Review:
At first I thought this was a different story from the title, but it's something new, and entertaining at that.
Review By [IrFane] • Date [12 Mar 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "chapter 2" from Doodle
Review:
Excellent chapter. 1,000/10
Review By [Doodle] • Date [9 Mar 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "chapter 2" from CrystalBlaze
Review:
Having read stories where Naruto retained aspects of Xander (likely due to the seal), I like to think that Xander ends up retaining Naruto's traits and powers but may not know at first, especially if he took it upon himself to copy the Shiki Fuuin Seal as shown in the anime and manga onto his belly before Halloween.

What I pray does NOT happen is his getting a 'ghost' of the freaking Yoko no Kyuubi... (I frankly doubt it as the seal being realized would have had the Shinigami collect it as payment, since any deaths would have had Death's attention that evening anyway..)

Edit: This, I forgot to say earlier, is why Xander would not know about the Naruto-template inside aside from his appetites and the like until he's some some soul-searching. As you know, the soul of the user of the Shiki Fuuin is also collected. Thus, the template's soul was sent on to the next life--restored to Naruto, in other words.

Xander's body is underpowered by Naruto's standards, I suspect, because his body doesn't have either the conditioning of Naruto's nor the Kyuubi.
Comments from author:
Xander won't get a ghost Of the kyuubi per se, but the fox will leave his mark. ;)
You'll find out next chapter.
Review By [CrystalBlaze] • Date [9 Mar 12] • Not Rated
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