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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from CrystalBlaze
Review:
Very, very short.

I think the biggest problem is that Alexander Lavelle Harris is very, very white.
Comments from author:
blade is 1/2 white according to the comics
Review By [CrystalBlaze] • Date [25 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from msdarque
Review:
Intriguing start. I really hope to read more soon. :)
Congrats!
Comments from author:
Glad you like it
Review By [msdarque] • Date [25 Mar 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Omegaprime
Review:
Hmmm, this sounds like it could be an interesting story.

Who is this lady that was with Blade?

How will Buffy and co. react to the news that Xander will get?

Keep up the interesting work.
Comments from author:
Answers in good time
Review By [Omegaprime] • Date [24 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from uten
Review:
Very interesting start, although it is definitely a little short.

It looks a lot better with the added spaces, although there are still a couple of errors.

One is grammatical, in that you repeatedly use "at a Hellmouth". It really should be "on a Hellmouth", especially given that technically, the Sunnydale Hellmouth is underground.

The spelling mistake is probably software based - "is will to take him in." should be "is willing to take him in."

I really hope you continue this, as despite the shortness, there was at least two great hooks there. Who is this English woman?? And Xander being Blade's child also creates questions about what he is and how he looks. Definitely hope you fill in the back story of how Blade and the mystery woman met, got together, and whether they ended up staying together. I also look forward to seeing how this Xander turns out, especially since he'll know he's adopted.
Comments from author:
thanks for the help made the grammar corrects
Review By [uten] • Date [24 Mar 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from griffindorgirl
Review:
Please continue the story! : )
Comments from author:
thank's for the encouragement
Review By [griffindorgirl] • Date [24 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Silentbobfoley
Review:
Do you have an email i can sent the thought to, i dont want to do it on here at the risk of coming down like a prat or something in people's eyes.
Comments from author:
Private review on an imperial duty gives it
Review By [Silentbobfoley] • Date [24 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Silentbobfoley
Review:
Never mind I don't want to make bones about something and come off sounding like a git
Comments from author:
I don't care and yes I know Blade was not married however I have read recent comics including Blade so that's where I got the idea for Xander's mom
Review By [Silentbobfoley] • Date [24 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from trongod
Review:
Talk about a hook! Now, where and what do I need to go to to bribe the Muses for more?
Comments from author:
thanks for the input
Review By [trongod] • Date [24 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from LNR
Review:
Sounds like a really good beginning to me.

Format in some spaces though.

More Please.
Comments from author:
thanks
Review By [LNR] • Date [24 Mar 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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