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Review of chapter "And so it begins." from ovid
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As a guy who likes prototype crossovers, I'm a bit picky. I gotta ask, have you played the game, or just 1? I ask because there's a couple of things that don't add up. First off, D-Codes. They are never called that in 2, they are only called Orions or phase ones. So how Heller knows what they are called in 1 doesn't make sense. Second, Heller himself. I'm sorry, but if you've spent your whole life as a member of one minority, then suddenly your base form shifts into another, wouldn't that send you for a loop? Also, no where is it said that Heller is blackwatch. In fact, it explicitly says he isn't. He's deployed alongside the regular marines.

And what's going on? Is this a trans-universe crossover, or is Blacklight already apart of this reality? How does someone dress up as an Orion (unless your the governator, I doubt anyone has the body build), and how do you get a freaking Brawler into Sunnydale? I can't see anyone dressing up as one, and It'd be hard for it to already have been in town.

Finally, what's the whole "gangbanger/PCP user" thing about? I know that its the default Buffy-verse explanation, but Heller should be exempt from that assumption, seeing how he's either crossed realities, or is simply a human-shaped virus. Calling it a mutant or something would have made more sense.

Despite the fact that I'm picking your story apart, I did actually enjoy the fact that you put this story up. Their aren't many people writing prototype fan fiction. Thanks for the time and effort!
Review By [ovid] • Date [18 May 12] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "And so it begins." from CPTSkip
Review:
Nifty! It was a bit short, but I liked it.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [18 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "And so it begins." from Greywizard
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Seeing Spike dusted almost always brings a smile to my face.
Review By [Greywizard] • Date [17 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "And so it begins." from Bobboky
Review:
sweet
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [17 May 12] • Not Rated
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