I still think there is another chapter on its way, habit I guess.

And you'd be right!

My mistake for not clicking a button on the story details!!!

Cheers,
Dave.

Faith vs yautja? Woot!

Loads of story to come. I screwed up doing the story details!

Sorry,
D.

Bad luck about Brenda, I kinda like her; at least they're still friends.
And talk about peculiar things, this particular Yautja seems way too much, I mean, he was careless enough to crash-land in an town, and ruthless enough to shoot down an unarmed chopper to create a distraction, probably killing even more non combatants.

Maybe he's being chased by other preds, because he broke their Code??.
Cool chapter, see ya!.

Well thank-you for explaining a few things to me...I've only watched the first two Predator films so everything will be taken from there.

Cheers,
D.

I think it makes sense that Faith would react, there would be consequences to what she went through earlier, so the breakup with Brenda makes some sense. She's not very good at relationships. Meanwhile... SGC crossover coming up? Or maybe "predator"...

Yep another 17 or 18 chapters coming up! I forgot to click the story completed button to m'No'.

Cheers,
D.

Um, I liked almost all of the rest of the stories in this series, but this sucks. The mechanics of it are reasonable, but then you have several vignettes that, at best, seem to be tying up the loose strings of the series. At worst, they are all cliffhangers of one type or another, and one would have to assume that you accidentally hit the "complete" checkbox. But they aren't telling a story.

Added to all of that, you threw away the Faith/Brenda pairing, after investing a lot of time and effort, almost as an afterthought. I'd have to agree with my fellow reviewers that you could at least have foreshadowed this in your previous story.

I will say that you at least have Faith reacting to some extent to your previous story, and that's good, but there's not that much else that is.

First, screwed up and didn't click the story completed button to 'no'. So, there's loads more of this story.

Second, if there's one thing I hate about doing this series is trying to explain the situation to knew readers. Also this chapter is actually about three chapters that I edited out because i didn't like it and I admit i don't think its one of my best Chapter Ones ever. Things however pick up in chapter two (I hope) so stick with it...please!

Cheers,
D.

Mother of all premature/abrupt story endings.

And...that's how you deal with Faith and Brenda breaking up after a looooong history of them being together and all the effort that went into keeping them together in the series?

I'd think these kinds of things would be considered by someone in the military long before he or she started thinking about spaceships.....A missile impact that failed to detonate could show all those crash characteristics (including absence of fuel smell) noted by Faith. It also could have been a large practice bomb gone astray from a training exercise miles away, or even a practice or unarmed bomb accidentally dropped while being flown to/from the nearby base. Those kinds of accidents have happened.

Screwed up with the story details so more to come.

Spaceship, yep maybe it was a bit premature in my defense maybe Faith has been reading sci-fi on those long night duties at Fort Shaw?

Will try better in chapter two.

Cheers,
D.

This can't be the end! Great start, but what a horrible cliffhanger. Please write more. Was the blonde Buffy? But if it was, why didn't she recognize Faith? So many questions unanswered!

I did notice one spellin error. You wrote "from the long scare across the school sports" when I think you meant "from the long SCAR across the school sports".

I'm sorry Faith and Brenda didn't work out.

Screwed up while posting the story is not over.

Scare/scar...yeesh! Just when you think you've got them all.

No Buffy in this one so the blonde is... well you'll have to see.

Cheers,
D.

Good story, but why did you end her relationship with Brenda?

Ending the relationship with Brenda was done after a great deal of thought. I needed to move Faith's military career on a bit and Mrs B might have held her back (I'm just an evil author!) and well I needed a more higher profile character as Faith significant other.

Brenda will pop in an out of these stories from time to time.

Cheers,
D.

Great start - but you've marked the story as complete, did you intend to?

NO I did not, I've changed that now still loads to come.

Cheers,
D.

oh... little sad about Faith and Brenda breaking up but I look forward to more.

A great read, just crying out for a sequel.

I wait in hope...

And chapter two will be out as soon as I've finished here!

I screwed up and marked it as finished.

Silly me.

D.

It has been too long since we have been able to read about Faith’s military exploits, but they are well worth waiting for, so many cheers for a new story.

Complete it may be, but there are plenty of hints that might lead to a sequel. I should be very disappointed if not.

For the time being, though, well done and many thanks!

More to come honest, almost anytime soon...now even!

Cheers,
D.

Oh yeah! Looking forward to this one Dave. You do have the lingo and attitude down.

Thank-you you're too kind.

Cheers,
D.

Oh this is gonna make for a interesting fight.

Good story looking forward to your next chapter.

Next chapter up very soon.

D.