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Review of chapter "Chapter Seventeen." from AllenPitt
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Oh, Wesley. That lie is going to be a huge problem-the truth will come out at some point and he could lose Shannon over it. But I understand why he did it; and if they work together for a while, she might forgive it i.e. once she knows him better.
Faith working for both groups? Interesting. I really thought she'd end up in the SGC, this could be interesting as well. Meanwhile...speaking of lies, if F. ever finds out that Willow knew her from 'before' and didn't tell her plus supported Riley's lie about her background. That's even worse than what Wesley is doing, in a way.
Faith has changed so much now, I imagine her finding out the truth would be a huge shock....
Comments from author:
Yep one of these days all the lies will come out. I'm going to have to write down who knows what about whom.

When the truth comes out its going to be like one of those Soap episodes were you get the big reveil...only with more violence.

Cheers,
D.
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [11 Jun 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seventeen." from slmncpm
Review:
it was a very good story and i enjoyed it immensely.
Comments from author:
Thank-you,
D.
Review By [slmncpm] • Date [11 Jun 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seventeen." from (Current Donor)vidicon
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Dear me, she is indeed going places. And no doubt took Willow places. I hope they get to develop a steady realtionship. I wonder if the Council will find out what they are missing in Shannon. At least the child will get a nice stepfather.

And Agent Keyes no doubt will be back. Nastier than ever. Thanks for writing.
Comments from author:
You know you've just given me an idea! Agent Keyes indeed!

Cheers,
D.
Review By [(Current Donor)vidicon] • Date [11 Jun 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Seventeen." from MarcusRowland
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What happened to the last predator? Or was it the G'ould she was sensing?
Comments from author:
The last predator (if it really existed{snigger}) will have to be dealt with in another story when everyones forgotten about it!

Cheers,
D.
Review By [MarcusRowland] • Date [11 Jun 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Fifteen" from (Current Donor)MaxGSandeman
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Eventually, when Wesley tells Shannon about Faith, I think she would provide another perspective that would lead to a change in his views about Faith. Possible?
Faith is a slightly built woman. Sam hasn't noticed her carrying the heavy gun with its loaded magazine.
I'm thinking more than one room will be occupied and Faith will get her ambush cramps again. Later, Sam might think about it.

With the loose of the Preds ship, I would think that a bigger ship might be on its way from their home planet. The crashed ship might have a short range, so a mother ship is already in the solar system. I can image twenty or more Preds appearing but not attacking and Faith's comment to herself.
Do they record and transmit their kills?
Comments from author:
Well, whether the Preds send another ship may well be dealt with in another story or maybe they just write off the ship and crew?

Faith slightly built? Hmm, I wouldn't have said so, however that shotgun must look huge in her hands.

Cheers,
D.
Review By [(Current Donor)MaxGSandeman] • Date [11 Jun 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Fifteen" from Rich
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This is moving along nicely. In answer to the earlier reviewers question: would you stand between the monsters and the Slayer with the shotgun ?
Comments from author:
Now that you mention it NO!

And actually now that you mention it, the one with the shotgun always goes first!

Cheers,
D.
Review By [Rich] • Date [10 Jun 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Fifteen" from Mcspender
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Teh hehehehe!!. Oh Peters, Carter can surely manage herself in an fight, she really do xD.
Now this is a good team up, a trade specialist with long track like Carter, with Faith. I pity the fool Yaujta that gets in their way.

Nice to see Wesley doing the right thing, the lad is growing up nicely indeed =).

Cool chapter, see ya!!.
Comments from author:
Thank-you.
D.
Review By [Mcspender] • Date [10 Jun 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Fifteen" from PATM
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Wesley has well worn tracks in his head that are looking like ruts nowadays. Two soldiers are going to check on the Sanders? It looks too much like a cliche. Three troops would be better, eh? Why is Carter always ushering Faith ahead of her. Respect for alien killing abilities?
Comments from author:
She's just being polite...also maybe she recognises a natural born killer when she sees one!

Cheers,
D.
Review By [PATM] • Date [10 Jun 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Fifteen" from Gideon
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Sounds like Carter is missing being in on the action :) At least Wesley is out of the way for now, caring for his Slayer. I hope he doesn't feed her enough misinformation to turn he against Faith all the way. If anything would push Faith over the edge it would be a blonde woman coming after her with murderous intent :(
Willow is also out of the way, resting up her magic, if she has any sense. That just leaves Carter and Faith at the sharp end. And they are splitting up from their buddies. Have they never watched a horror movie? Still, Faith has the weapon she wanted now so as long as they don't run into more than one Predator at once they come out of it alive, if not unscathed.
Comments from author:
As Jack would say 'cliches' ! I think that how its spelt!!!

Cheers,
D.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [10 Jun 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Fifteen" from (Current Donor)vidicon
Review:
I do hope Wesley realises Faith isn't that bad before Shannon and Faith get into a Slayerfight. That would be bad. And it seems the attraction (and more) between Faith and Willow is growing...

Thanks for writing
Comments from author:
I've a feeling that the journey to realisation is going to be a long one for Wes and I've not yet decided how its going to end.
Cheers,
D.
Review By [(Current Donor)vidicon] • Date [10 Jun 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Fifteen" from BillieBog
Review:
more please thanks. the anticipation is building--
Comments from author:
Thank-you!
D.
Review By [BillieBog] • Date [10 Jun 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Fifteen" from war
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To bad she couldn't get a AA 12 automatic shotgun with frag 12 rounds

http://www.defensereview.com/exclusive-video-aa12-machine-shotgunfrag-12-grenade-weapon-system-test-fired/

Riley's cover has to be getting thin by working out in the open so much plus with him getting NCIS so angry at him he better no one blows his cover.

Good story looking forward to your next chapter
Comments from author:
Thank-you for the link.

Yep gonna have to do something about that!

Cheers,
D.
Review By [war] • Date [10 Jun 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Fifteen" from RevDorothyL
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Hmmm... What are the odds that Faith and Sam will run across something nasty while they're off on their own? :)
Comments from author:
Oh, about 100% I'd guess!

Cheers,
D.
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [10 Jun 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Fifteen" from Cordyfan
Review:
Good chapter. It'll be interesting to see if Faith does eventually go down the SGC route or not. Wesley is really getting annoying, however...

Thanks for writing this - keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Thank-you Faith's fate will be decided soon.

Cheers,
D.
Review By [Cordyfan] • Date [10 Jun 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Fifteen" from AllenPitt
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I'm sure nothing bad will happen while Faith & Sam are off by themselves. The Predators must be happy-- target rich environment. Meanwhile, I'm pleasantly surprised to see Wesley making the right decision at a critical moment. He's growing up.
And by the time Willow & the council find out about Shannon, it'll be too late to get her to dump Wesley. I look forward to seeing how upset they get by a 'rogue slayer' working with Wesley. They really mishandled him. He's also very dangerous & getting more so. He could end up being a serious danger to Faith.
I like the new gun for Faith. She also maybe needs to get into the habit of carrying a large knife (Bowie?) or machete or something. She ends up getting into hand to hand situations quite often, after all.
She'd do great in the SGC. Just picture her tearing through a group of Jaffa...
Comments from author:
I have plans for a few spin off stories featuring Wes and Shannon plus other BtVS characters to take place in the same reality. Something that started as a very secondary story line in one story has taken on a life of its own!

As for knives, a Marine K-bar is probably more than adequate.

Cheers,
D.
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [10 Jun 12] • Not Rated
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