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Review of chapter "Chapter 16" from shazamfan
Review:
I'm really enjoying the budding relationship that is just starting between Emma and Jean. I think that is yet another thing that improves on this Belle tale over the last, along with Michelle using her shifting powers more and other little things that just add up to a far more fun tale to read.

Looking forward to the public outing for Cordy as a mutant.

-j-
Comments from author:
Yeah. I never really had a plan for the original apart from "what weird shit and traditional BtVS/X-Men crossover lampshading can do I next?!" and it suffered because of it. Then again, I didn't think to use Rachel until now, so some of the better shit inevitably comes from that...

And Cordy won't get outed until Chapter 18 under this version. Next, we find out more about Rachel... and meet Cordelia's aunt and one of her cousins.
Review By [shazamfan] • Date [26 Jul 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 16" from Jimbobob
Review:
Another fun chapter. The scene with Jean and Emma was quite fun.

Now I'm curious if Rachel detected Michelle's thoughts and shifted to answer the unasked question, or if they're being attacked by something.
Comments from author:
Well, she is a telepath... and Emma's daughter...
Review By [Jimbobob] • Date [26 Jul 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 16" from Roth
Review:
This is humming along nicely. I loved the Emma and Jean interaction. I'm looking forward to the other two spin offs.
Comments from author:
I'm working hard on them.
Review By [Roth] • Date [26 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 16" from Orchamus
Review:
Huh, the scene with Emma and Jean was kinda cozy. Nicely done there, just a touch more and Jean would have been bolting out of bed lol. The cliffhanger was nice too, rather surprised at the red crystal form.
Comments from author:
Emma knows exactly how far she can push without getting in trouble. After all, she knows exactly what Jean's thinking...
Review By [Orchamus] • Date [26 Jul 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 16" from (Recent Donor)Deamondeathstone
Review:
So this Rachel is a cross between canon Rachel and Ruby Summers from Bishop's reality power-wise? Without Ruby's optical blasts of course, seeing that she got those from daddy and he's uninvolved in the making of this Rachel.
Comments from author:
Essentially. We'll get more details on how her transmorph form stacks up compared to her half-sisters' forms in the next chapter, but for all intents and purposes she is a full power pool fusion of Emma and Jean.
Review By [(Recent Donor)Deamondeathstone] • Date [26 Jul 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 16" from (Current Donor)Katrina
Review:
Yay! An update and a very enjoyable one that got us all caught up. Plus a neat little surprise at the end. Nicely done. Looking forward to more, as always.
Comments from author:
We'll get an explanation next chapter. Along with Cordy's aunt. And cousin.
Review By [(Current Donor)Katrina] • Date [26 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 16" from (Current Donor)Sithspit
Review:
Keeps getting better; Looking forward to the next one. Thanks for writing, Joe.
Comments from author:
Monday, Monday, gonna post fic on Monday...
Review By [(Current Donor)Sithspit] • Date [26 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 16" from Meneldur
Review:
This is definitely different. And for the better, I think. I really like the new scenes, and the old scenes come out better as well.
The bedroom scene with Jean and Emma was brilliant. I loved seeing Emma's thoughts on pursuing a relationship with Jean. The future looked interesting too, and quite bright. I'm all for it - it's certainly better than the current Emma/Scott storyline. It's just so much fun seeing how Emma thinks and the way she plans. I hope we'll be seeing some more of it. Jean's uncertainty and embarrassment was great fun as well. Their interactions are just so well written, intriguing while being humorous.
So... did they meet Miriam, or has Cordelia managed to make them avoid her? While the answer seems to be no, the question remains whether they will meet her, as seems likely.
The way Cordelia woke Michelle up was both genius and amusing. I wish people would wake me up that way.
Cordelia's recap was quick and good, though I have to wonder at Jean running away from Emma. Eh, we'll probably learn of it next chapter. She's still good at taking control and making plans, and I liked her reasoning on the coming out as a mutant thing.
Nice to see the gene/genealogy argument revived, in a different format. Considered rationally, Willow's point is the logical one, even if ultimately wrong. It makes for a very interesting debate.
So, Rachel just gave away her parentage - apparently it's not so important any more - and turned to crystal... I assume there's a danger approaching, since it didn't seem like she was showing off... maybe Victor is joining the party early? Guess we'll see next chapter.
So anyway, I finally recommended this fic. I actually have 39 recommendations, and this is the first one I used... but I've been following your fics for quite a while, and this one is one of my favorites while being often updated and clearly invested in. And since you asked for them, I'm happy to help.

"which hardly a good reason to date someone" - missing word here. "Which was hardly a good reason", perhaps?
"but we should probably assume it is until we here otherwise" - hear, obviously, not here.
Comments from author:
Write drunk, edit sober. Do neither while hungover. The corrections are now incorporated into my Scrivener file and will pop up when I flash the site with a noteless version just prior to posting Chapter 17.

Emma/Jean: It's tricky, trying to split up an existing relationship to form a new one and making the person behind it all actually likable. Glad Emma is. :)

Miriam: With her powers, it's impossible for her to be unaware of their presence. That being said, she's staying out of things... for now.

Cordelia: Cordelia makes a great exposition engine because she's so used to dealing with moronic girls that it doesn't come off as weird that she can succinctly summarize stuff and sit there telling people (and by extension, the reader). As for Emma and Jean... after the way they woke up and what Emma did to her, are you at all surprised Jean is playing keep away? :)

Rachel: Nope, just showing off. Why she's suddenly so free with her preciously guarded information will be explored next chapter.
Review By [Meneldur] • Date [26 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 15" from Darkstrider
Review:
Ah, I get a little squee of happiness everytime I see this fic updates :D Can't wait for things to intesify. Fantastic, as always!
Comments from author:
Tomorrow, tomorrow, update you, tomorrow, it's only a day away.
Review By [Darkstrider] • Date [25 Jul 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 15" from Oakheart
Review:
Great stuff going on, and the Thorspawn was excellent, but...

All I can do is geek at your inclusion of Boston and environs. The Hockey, the Sox...
all we need to round it out is a trip to the Gardener Museum, or maybe a confrontation
inside the stained glass globe of the world at the CS Publishing building... a reference
to the Plywood building? Long Wharf and Durgin Park? The Ancient and Honourable
Artillery Regiment?

I've bee living in the midwest for decades now, and you bring me home with a smile.

Thx,
SD
Comments from author:
I'm actually from Connecticut but we go up to Boston regularly. I was up there for the tall ships festival recently and ended up at TD Garden/North Station to do some photography, and the idea just hit me. I actually have a series of 60 pics or so mapping out everything from where Emma and Jean would come down the escalator, around to the sign they stood with, where Faith takes out the guy, and then out the doors onto the street and around down into the Green/Orange Line station. As for Fenway... yeah. I love Fenway. The Red Sox may regularly suck, but we have an awesome ballpark to watch them suck in.
Review By [Oakheart] • Date [23 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 15" from Meneldur
Review:
Good chapter, a lot better than the previous version, I think.
Replacing Sophie with Betsy was a good choice, since it was never very clear Willow would get together with Sophie, but this implies you have some other plan regarding Willow's love interest (or lack of it). I wonder what, and what was the 'incident' Rachel referred to... I also wonder what problems Willow is causing Betsy, though.
Oh, will we get to see what Cordelia and Emma got up to with 'Miriam'? Because that promises to be interesting and fun.
The two Cordy's were amusing, especially the way they treated Michelle.
I must say, out of a combat situation Ivette seems much more on top of things, and a lot more similar to her mother. Looking into Rachel's memories? Sneaky. The other four don't know yet, but they do tend to overshare, so it might just be a matter of lack of ability to share at the moment.
Emma and Jeans' interactions as parents are hilarious. It's good to see Jean has learned to hold he own in verbal battles.
All Emma's kids are such terrors. It makes you wonder how she got Michelle to babysit Rachel. Blackmail and bribery, no doubt.
Ivette's reaction to the memory was priceless. But I do wonder what else she'll be doing with the new information she's gained.
Also, Emma seems a bit more pedestrian in the future - the hockey thing was explained, but baseball? I suppose Jean has an effect on her.
Can't wait for the next story/chapter.
Comments from author:
Betsy actually will sleep with someone while in Sunnydale. In the Biblical way, as opposed to what she's doing with Willow right now. Won't say who it is. But it will happen.

No to Cordelia and Emma and Miriam, but we do have a scene in Chapter 16 covering Sunday morning at Casa Chase. Dun dun dun.

Ivette is more on top of things outside of combat because, well, this is set between X-Men and X2. She's a teenager living in a closed environment. She's never had to fight outside of the controlled circumstances of the Danger Room. And yes, it's the Hellmouth's psi-block that keeps the knowledge with Ivette for now. That little tidbit will factor into the next two chapters, though...

The Grey-Frost family is fucked up. But I love it. :)

Baseball... ever seen the crowd at a Red Sox game? Celebrities galore, from pop culture fixtures to businessmen to politicians. You don't grow up in Boston without being instilled with a tendency to support the home teams, even if you're not a huge fan of sports. Also, keep in mind what Emma pays for. Right now, it's a $35k investment for the Ultimate Monster Package for one game. Add a decade of inflation to that. They get an entire section in a prestigious part of the park to themselves, custom jerseys for every member of the party, gourmet cuisine catered by a chef and delivered via wait staff, unparalleled access to the park... when Emma goes to see the Red Sox, she goes in STYLE.
Review By [Meneldur] • Date [23 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 15" from (Recent Donor)Deamondeathstone
Review:
It seems that Rachel has some trouble keeping the future to herself.
Comments from author:
Keep in mind who her mother is. Is she slipping up, or is she trolling the present day?

(Hint: considering the way Marvel temporal mechanics work, it's impossible for her to fuck her own timeline. No matter what she does, doesn't do, changes, or leaves unaltered, her world will be utterly unchanged when she goes home to it. The supposed grandfather paradox is actually a series of diagonal slides: each timeline is visited by a different timeline's Rachel, who returns to her native timeline at some point. Then each timeline's Rachel goes to a different timeline, spawning an endless series of alternate timelines.)
Review By [(Recent Donor)Deamondeathstone] • Date [23 Jul 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 15" from Jimbobob
Review:
Very nice. Once again I enjoyed this more than the original.

The last scene was my favorite part however. Hahahahaha! Interesting twist.
Comments from author:
I did a lot of research into the Ultimate Monster Package for a friend's story, since I'm near Boston enough to photograph in and around Fenway for them. Decided to use it myself as long as it was at the forefront of my mind...
Review By [Jimbobob] • Date [22 Jul 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 15" from BoosterBronze
Review:
Neat chapter all together. Interesting dynamic between Ivette and Rachel, curious if small changes like the one Ivette thought about towards the end there would have an effect on Rachel's memories or future, doubtful, but curious.

Betsy 'calming willow down'.... Hopefully, Betsy wakes up first, come morning. Because, I just can't see Willow waking up in that situation and waking Betsy up ending well. Those two personalities just seem like oil and water. Betsy's too much of a button pusher, and Will just has way too many buttons. Will demanding answers of a groggy psylocke, seems like a quick ticket to her second mental shut down.
Comments from author:
Marvel has a divergent timeline policy to temporal mechanics. Meaning (for example) if Ivette decided to get breast implants after seeing the memory of being small-breasted as an adult, then the future Rachel returns to would have a small-breasted Ivette and the augmented Ivette would exist in a separate timeline.

As for Betsy and Willow... despite the potential for hilarity, I opted not to go there. Yes, that's a spoiler for Chapter 16. I experimented with it, but realized quickly that interaction between the two come morning quickly got away from me in terms of length and focus, when I wanted the chapter to stick with Michelle as the focus character. Because at the end of the day, while it's largely an ensemble story and the others are important, it's still HER story. Kinda like how BtVS was a near-ensemble show but it was still Buffy's show when push came to shove and the writing reflected that.
Review By [BoosterBronze] • Date [22 Jul 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 15" from Orchamus
Review:
Gotta say, the last time was rather amusing, but this scene this time around was far more so. Especially the way Betsy went on.
Comments from author:
Well, pulling the universe forward a full decade meant that Wild Things went from being a recent thing that people might know to a sorta cult classic. Michelle, I could see knowing it. She's into chicks. She (as stated) crushed on Denise Richards. She'd know Denise's filmography. But to bring the others into that part of the chapter again... well, I needed something. Betsy turned out to be perfect for it.
Review By [Orchamus] • Date [22 Jul 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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