brilliant work! I love your spin on the do over. I saw a few small problems with grammar but nothing big and you may check your math with Xan's money in the scene with his mother Jessy and Willow after they get the call from his "stock broker". This story is very promising and I will recommending it ASAP.
Review By [lillyb] • Date [10 Jun 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The story begins" from Mythological
Review:
Pretty damn good if i do say so myself, feels a bit rushed in places but overall it looks promising
Review By [Mythological] • Date [10 Jun 12] • Rating [7 out of 10]
loved it, a few typos here and there, but still a good story
Review By [RHatch] • Date [10 Jun 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The story begins" from kizunakat
Review:
Love this story. Just wanted to point out you need to go back and check some of the money amounts. You were off by 1000 dollers at one point. Love the idea and your writing style.Kizuna
Review By [kizunakat] • Date [10 Jun 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]