I think Mycroft was a *wonderful* addition! Would like to see more of him, maybe in 'Summer'? Gotta love Hank, huh? What an ass. ^.^ As usual, lovely update. I loved how Clint didn't even bother telling Hank his name. Looking forward to more.
CT.
Comments from author:
Mycroft is the best. I adore his relationship with Sherlock. I think that badass may go like Fresh Starts and i'll bring in a few other faandoms.
Remind me not to edit when the kids are being total asshats. v.v Saw a few spots I could fix. If you want me to, I will then resend it to you.
And hah! I like that Tony didn't get put off for long over her blonde act. And her reply about being his only sparring partner was inspired. ^.^ Keep up the fun times!
CT.
Comments from author:
Hey I was just grateful for the speedy edit. By all means send a new version. Glad you liked it!
I don't know which sentence I liked more: the guy was like a walking advert for the Military, complete with shining, pinging white teeth or the walking tooth paste ad. I so don't like Riley
Loved that you let my favorite General Jack tag along. I love his quips. I would love to read about how Jack and Buffy will take Kinsley down. You know sometimes revenge is sweet and those two plotting together will be fatal and scary they are so much the same. The fun part will be when Kinsley won't find out who did it and I think Willow and Tony will help when asked. They would love to.
Thank you for another good chapter can't wait for the little chat they gone have with daddy dearest.
Comments from author:
Buffy and Jack will get round to taking down Kinsey the only question is whether the Avengers will help her, or try and limit the potential chaos. Somehow me thinks that Tony will help. As for Riley, I was never fond of the character as you can probably tell.
Review By [bradsan] • Date [15 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "First Meetings" from WolfWriter
Review:
Are they gonna chew him up and spit him out? More than once? Rip him a new arsehole??? Make him feel like complete and utter crapola???
Comments from author:
Well, I've just posted the new chapter so you'll just have to read to find out!
Review By [WolfWriter] • Date [15 Jul 12] • Not Rated
I'm enjoying the entertainment, modulo overstretching my suspension of disbelief in places. That's no worry; this is largely humour, and you can get away with a lot more implausibility without breaking things than if this was sober drama. However...
Your punctuation. It's bad. Really bad. Changing the meaning of sentences bad. There are run-on sentences that aren't even comma splices because there are no commas at the splice. There are grocer's apostrophes by the gross. There are semicolons where even I wouldn't put them, and I over-use semicolons pretty badly myself. Something that might help is reading aloud what you've written, if you can find somewhere private enough to do that. I sometimes find that mistakes in the flow of a sentence are more obvious when I read aloud slowly, paying attention to where the commas are, rather than skimming along rapidly in my head. The tricky bit, as ever, is reading what's actually on the page rather than what you "know" you wrote.
Anyway, do keep going. I can't wait to see how Tony deals with overprotective uncles. Given his usual lack of tact, it isn't going to be pretty, I imagine!
Comments from author:
I know it can be and that is why I've sought a beta's help. Well it may take a few bruises but I'm sure that Tony can convince them somehow when he learns to shut up a little bit!
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