Large PrintHandheldAudioRating
using
 paypal
Twisting The Hellmouth Crossing Over Awards - Results
Is your email address still valid?

Leave No One Behind.

StoryReviewsStatisticsRelated StoriesTracking
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven." from striderramses
Review:
Another great story, an interesting variation on 'Blackhawk Down' with supernatural bits added on. I like how Faith wonders a little about her powers, but not too much.

As always well written and well paced, I look forward to the next story in the series.
Comments from author:
Thank-you, we try our best.

D.
Review By [striderramses] • Date [5 Jul 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven." from BrownFinderth
Review:
Most awesome chapter!! Faith gets out of Mogador in one piece and alive!
Comments from author:
Thank-you.
D.
Review By [BrownFinderth] • Date [5 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Six." from BrownFinderth
Review:
Yay that Faith stop the slaughtering of the innocents! Now, just to go about finding a way out of town and back to base.
Comments from author:
Roger that!

D.
Review By [BrownFinderth] • Date [4 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Six." from PATM
Review:
A very exciting description of the action Faith was involved in and her exploits as a grunt. The dust envelopment described is claustrophobic and in effect hides her and makes her vulnerable at the same time. The following fire and movement displayed the fact that luck, good and less than good shows that Faith is embodied with the kind of good luck that all slayers don't always enjoy. Aggression is her default setting and creates the kind of opportunities for success that in turn create even more successes. I do go on, don't I. The death of the cultists has the perfect touch that she would have now with a whole new way of looking at the world. No anger and no fear.

EDIT 7/4/12: I thought running from the firefight in the narrow alley when she ran out of ammunition was also very aggressive.
Comments from author:
You go on as much as you like.

I've watched BHD gods know how many times, add that to my own experiences in the urban setting and you get more or less what I wrote. Of course unlike Faith I didn't have hordes of 'Skinnies' chasing me!

Aggression helps you keep the initiative and keeps the enemy off balance. The trick is to know when not to be aggressive and back off!

Cheers,
D.
Review By [PATM] • Date [4 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Six." from BillieBog
Review:
Good way to start the day, thanks.
Comments from author:
Thank-you,
D.
Review By [BillieBog] • Date [4 Jul 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Six." from eriktheviking
Review:
A well written sense of confusion from Faith about her capabilities and actions.
Comments from author:
Thank-you,
D.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [4 Jul 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Six." from (Current Donor)MaxGSandeman
Review:
I would expect Faith to go through every feeling she experience sometime during a quiet night. Her apparent abilities are nothing like that during basic.
Come on; how can I do head shots without really aiming. How can I do these things?
Comments from author:
All things to be address when people aren't shooting at her.

Cheers,
D.
Review By [(Current Donor)MaxGSandeman] • Date [4 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Six." from Xovervore
Review:
The defeat of the cultists was anti-climactic, but appropriately so; a "drive-by" shooting by Faith. Although it is outside of the scope of the faith-focus of the story, I wonder if someone in the know finds the room, or gets to study the book pages, and realizes what has happened - and how close another apocalypse was (probably not considering it is in a chaotic warzone).
Comments from author:
See next chapter!

Cheers,
D.
Review By [Xovervore] • Date [3 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Six." from Rich
Review:
Well, that was easier than I thought it would be; and of course Faith won't be decorated or promoted because nobody else saw her do it, at least nobody who survived. She probably won't even mention it, although she may have a few things to say about (or to) the officer who ordered her into a potential combat situation and then left her behind.

(largely pointless digression follows:)

I have a private theory about the whole "instinctive use of weapons" thing. Basically, I think that Slayer dreams come from the Slayer "Spirit" and are either: A. prophecies - things perceived by the Spirit, which are distorted because humans don't have the sensory apparatus to understand them or, B. memories, which are not distorted because the Spirit originally received them through the senses of its' human hosts. Slayers, therefore, have secondhand memories of their predecessors lives, or at least of their battles. Since Slayers have been using edged, pointed, and thrown weapons for thousands of years, they subconsciously remember how to use these things; the "instinct" is really memory. They just don't consciously know that they remember.

Slayers have not been using guns as often, or for anywhere near as long; they have few memories of this kind of fighting. They shouldn't be expert shots the first time they pick up a firearm, although they might be better and should learn faster than an ordinary person. Faith, however, has trained with a rifle, even if it wasn't this type of rifle; also, she's firing at pointblank range or close to it, and has superior coordination, senses, and reflexes. So her shooting ability isn't out of line (making head shots at maximum range would be). As I say, this is just my theory - it's not canon and certainly not binding on anyone else.

(end of digression)

Now that I think of it, the officer who abandoned her might cover his ass by not reporting her missing; if so I hope somebody calls him on it. I don't think the general will be very happy about it; if Faith had been killed or captured, the blame would have fallen on him.

More generally - the action was intense and easy to follow, and Faith sounds and acts exactly right. I have an image of a semi-corporeal Old One hovering offshore, in a state of apocalypse interruptus. Overall, this is an excellent addition to an excellent story.
Comments from author:
Great minds think a like...or fools seldom differ!

What you outlined there is almost exactly what I put in one of my old fics when Faith's watcher was trying to explain why she could use weapons without much practice.

It sorta went; at some point in the past a slayer used a bow, thereafter all slayers could use a bow, it was the job of her watcher to 'remind' her and help her improve on that skill.

Digress all you like.

One thing, perhaps I didn't make it clear or you forgot. The officer who 'ordered' Faith into combat is now dead, killed when Faith's Hummer was blown up. The NCO who sent her to Yemalia in the first place will probably never be caught.

Yep the problem of writing prequels is to make them exciting so people will read them while at the same time the hero doesn't make a name for herself and get noticed earlier than she should.

At the moment I'm writing the 'Faith in Training' fic and I'm having to think up all sorts of reasons for her not to shine and stand out, even going so far as to deliberately not do as well as other 'normal' recruits!

Cheers,
D.
Review By [Rich] • Date [3 Jul 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Six." from Cordyfan
Review:
Good to see Faith's Slayer powers kicking in when she really needs them. So much for the cultists - no raising this time round it seems.

Great story - keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
You'd think after continually failing to raise the Great Old One people would stop trying! But then what would us Fanfic writers do if they need a little supernatural content in their fics?

Cheers.
D.
Review By [Cordyfan] • Date [3 Jul 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Six." from Mcspender
Review:
Wow, Faith really got to the rigth place at the rigth moment. And weell, bye bye Ayesha, nice knowing ya, give my regards to ole squid face in Hades :P.

Cool chapter, see ya!!.
Comments from author:
Cheers,
D.
Review By [Mcspender] • Date [3 Jul 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Six." from Tempi
Review:
And once again the Slayer is at the right place at the right time even if, in Faith's case, it's totally unknowingly. I look forward to reading more about her escape from Mogador.
Comments from author:
Our favourite slayer's trials are almost over...almost.

Cheers,
D.
Review By [Tempi] • Date [3 Jul 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Five." from (Current Donor)MaxGSandeman
Review:
It would seem that Faith will save the sacrifices while Ayesha takes the opportunity to worship The Great One for years to come.
Wondering if there's anyone important in the cage?
Comments from author:
In the great scheme of things, probably not.

Cheers,
D.
Review By [(Current Donor)MaxGSandeman] • Date [3 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Five." from PATM
Review:
Oh nice!
Comments from author:
Thank-you.
D.
Review By [PATM] • Date [2 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Five." from BrownFinderth
Review:
Is Faith in Mogador for Akeesha? Will Faith come back to base whole?
Comments from author:
..find out in he next thrilling installment!!!

Cheers,
D.
Review By [BrownFinderth] • Date [1 Jul 12] • Not Rated
start back Page: 2 of 6 next end
StoryReviewsStatisticsRelated StoriesTracking