I thought the multiple viewpoints worked, but it was sometimes not instantly obvious who was speaking. You only had two viewpoints, so switching back and forth worked. If you had tried three, it would have been difficult to tell who was speaking.

There are ways to handle it. Some are better than others. One of the really clunky methods is starting each section with the viewpoint character's name. Another is what I use in the Phase novels: Phase always has first person viewpoint, everyone else gets third person viewpoint with their name starting the first sentence for instant identification, as in: "Darien knew he was in trouble when he realized the woman had to be three or four times stronger than he was."

Still, a fun chapter. I look forward to seeing Darien and Buffy interact. And maybe Buffy can freak out Bobby later.

work so more

The multiple POV worked but I prefer the other.

Cool story. Never heard of this series.

Your point of view experiment did not work to badly, you should develop it more as it is a useful story telling tool.

I am enjoying this story so far.

The multiple first person sort of worked, but it was a little extra effort to keep track of who was who. I'd only use it to try and avoid having to do duplicate chapters from different points of view.

Still trying to figure out what the cross over is.

I think it worked quite well and, leaving the pOV thing to one side, it's a good chapter. Always nice to see Buffy moving from the sham girly-girl persona to a Slayer in full warrior mode.

Thanks for writing this.

I thought it worked fine. if anything gave a more directly immersive feel

It worked, the first persom pov thing that is. I like the story so far though.

Re: switching the PoV - eh, it's good to experiment, but I'd say that keeping a single PoV for a given scene is probably a better thing to do. Conventional writing pretty much says that you should keep to a single PoV for a scene, as it allows the author to use the single character's perspective to add depth of characterization - ie, you can characterize the narrator by what and how they notice things, and you can contrast their behavior with their internal monologue. However, doing that requires setup - and breaking into a different PoV every other paragraph makes it a bit more difficult.

Also, breaking up the scene like this, at least for me, breaks narrative immersion - that is, every time you switch PoV, it causes me to break out of the story for a bit and think, "hey, the author just switched to someone else" - that happens whenever you change scenes, but at least in a scene break it's understood that you're potentially swapping both location and PoV. The line break helps gloss over that, but doing it so quickly meant that I was constantly "switching gears".

Quite a productive conversation for both sides actually. Despite not finding out any real info they found out the most important thing - that the other group are not the ones to blame. Darrien certainly seems to have picked up a lot of respect for Captain Summers very quickly. Smart guy :)
I think the mixed viewpoint worked very well too. You don't get as much from each character but we don't have to wait a couple of chapters to find out what the other side was thinking. The line breaks make it a lot clearer too. Usually it is hard to see when a point of view changes but that made it easy.

It worked OK.
Sometimes the alt. point of view tennis match in a new chapter can get a little old. This was a nice break up.

It was interesting and it does get the story along slightly faster than the usual one chapter, on view, but it also lacks the greater depth of those. I prefer the 'normal' style. Still good though!

Thanks for writing

As long as you make sure to alternate between the different characters using the same pattern and make a special effort in describing the personalities or speech patterns, then using multiple POVs can be effective. Personally I think you pulled it off in this chapter. I look forward to reading more.

Nice chapter (as usual).

On the POV thing; it does make working out who's speaking easier, but if it was me I'd use less invasive (not really the word I'm floundering for but it'll do) section breaks.

D.

I like the story.

As to your question about Multi-point-of-view; the answer would have to be yes. It did work. And you even broke it up and added break lines so we the readers could tell that you were switching to a different person.

Can't wait for the next chapter