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Review of chapter "The meeting." from JonnyNapalm
Review:
Love the word play between Xander and Cap in chapter 2. Pop culture aficionado that he is, Xan was still cracking wise in terms the temporally displaced hero would get. That was fun. A little disappointed we aren't having any more conflict between Xander and Loki going on... But I'm imagining that he's going to be waiting outside Loki's cell looking to taunt the demi-god with how little he is actually prepared for.
Mockingbird is working great as a player in the Slayer court...she makes a lot of sense there really. And I'm loving the 'testing' vibe you've got going with Faith. She does love pushing limits. It's one of the reasons I've always liked her matched up with Xander... they tend to work as a good team. I always imagine a really great synergy working for them.
Great work so far... thrilled that you've been inspired to keep pushing on this one. Looking forward to each chapter coming up.
Comments from author:
Glad you're enjoying it so far. I'll keep pushing the boundaries as time permits.

Raf
Review By [JonnyNapalm] • Date [3 Jul 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The meeting." from (Current Donor)WildMartin
Review:
Enjoying this so far, but I think Mockingbird is having impulse control issues. ;-) I guess some people take longer to tame the Slayer spirit than others. What I really want to know is whether you had already planned out having Bobbi in this story or if you've been playing Marvel's Avengers on Facebook and that gave you the idea for Mockingbird as a Slayer? Keep up the good work, I'll be looking out for the next chapter.
Comments from author:
I introduced Bobbi in a in one of my Rift stories in Earth 616. But when I went back to college I had to concentrate on my studies. The movie just gave me the perfect opertunity to reunite her with her Ex.

Thank you for the review.

Raf
Review By [(Current Donor)WildMartin] • Date [3 Jul 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The meeting." from AlecMcDowell
Review:
Oh this continues to be interesting. Not much new stuff has happened thru the plot, sure, but I'm liking what's going on. Steve's thoughts on Xander in particular, I think they'll get along well. Xander's personality is a little bit like Tony with the snark, but, it's always clear that Xander still respects you, something Tony lacks.

Couple of mistakes/overlooks this last chapter. First, they went to Start Towers when you should've said the went to the Helicarrier. Second, where did Dawn go?
Comments from author:
Tony was daydreaming. That's why Nick yelled at him. He wasn't paying attention to the meeting.

Thank you for the review.

Raf
Review By [AlecMcDowell] • Date [3 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Getting to know you..." from CPTSkip
Review:
Oh, my! This update was just as much fun as the first. You write an excellent, kick-ass Xander, with all the new snarky added accessories. I also like the job you are doing with the characters of Thunder Thighs, Captain Rogers Neighborhood, and the iron covered a**hole. I really look forward to reading the next update.
Comments from author:
I'm in the process of writing chapter 3 now.
I hope you like this one as well.

Raf
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [3 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Getting to know you..." from ColdFuzzions
Review:
I like this, I admit.

Question?

Chapter 2 has Part III at the top?

Where is the mention of Part II?
Comments from author:
Thanks for the heads up.

It should have been in chapter one
SHIELD Transport
somewhere over the Atlantic.

I just added it plus chapter 3.

Thanks again

Raf.
Review By [ColdFuzzions] • Date [3 Jul 12] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Getting to know you..." from Bobboky
Review:
Very good
Comments from author:
Thank you.
Raf
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [3 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Getting to know you..." from (Recent Donor)tchizek
Review:
Very nice take on the Avengers movie with extra slayage.

I love Xander's banter with Cap and how Cap is reacting to it. I also really like how you handled the attempted possession. Having the spell its self loose to the anti-possession wards is great but the energy had to go somewhere, having it go to power up all of leftovers from Xanders possessions, half spells and swim-team bits actually works very will. The question becomes, is the power link between Xander and the Tesseract permanent and can Xander use up his power up so he will no longer be super-Xander or is the change permanent?

Great chapter, thanks!
Comments from author:
The changes are permanent. A part of the Tesseract, or the cosmic cube as it's better known, is it's ability to grant wishes. And Xander has had a bigger slayer envy than anyone I know. He may have dealt with it, but all these occasional power ups have had there effects on his psyche. He's in the Captain America and slayer range power wise, with a few odds and ends thrown in. Like Hyena senses and water adaptation, and one who sees, and stuff like that.

Thank you for the review

Raf
Review By [(Recent Donor)tchizek] • Date [3 Jul 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "This is how it really started..." from (Recent Donor)tchizek
Review:
This is GREAT!

I can't wait to see what Loki's toy did to Xander, it did something since his eyes are still glowing...we just don't know what yet.
I love the way the two slayers are whipsawing Tony, he doesn't quite know which way to turn!
Plus great handling of Dawn!

Thanks for a great story, I will be following this one!
Comments from author:
Some answers will be revealed in the next chapter.
Thank you for the reviews.

Raf.
Review By [(Recent Donor)tchizek] • Date [2 Jul 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "This is how it really started..." from Bobboky
Review:
Very good
Comments from author:
Thank you.
Raf
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [2 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "This is how it really started..." from JediKnight
Review:
Very nice job on the story so far, but you need to double check your spelling.
Comments from author:
You're right on that.
This was my first rough draft, but I had to post it, or it would never have seen the light of day.
This fic has taken over my mind and would not let go.

If you do catch these mistakes before I do, please let me kow and I'll take care of them.

Thank you for the review.
Raf
Review By [JediKnight] • Date [2 Jul 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "This is how it really started..." from DrDamage
Review:
This is good fic :)
Comments from author:
Thank you for the review.
Raf
Review By [DrDamage] • Date [2 Jul 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "This is how it really started..." from CPTSkip
Review:
Oh, well done. Nice job with every ones' characters and some funny dialog too. I really look forward to reading more of your story. I think it is going to be a lot of fun to read.

I noticed one mistake. You wrote: "Why don't we leave little B to her work." When I think you meant: "Why don't we leave little 'D' (meaning Dawn) to her work."

I know it is not politically correct, but it looks like a humongus cat-fight shaping up between Faith and Blondie for title of Head Bitch is coming up. I put my money on Faith. Lol!
Comments from author:
Nope I meant little B.
Faith was teasing Dawn, to get a rise out of her.
She'll use Little D, but when she wants to needle her, it's going to be little B.

Bobbi will be a good match for Faith with her SHIELD training, but we'll see how Faith handles the challenge.

Thank you for the review.

More later

Raf.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [2 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "This is how it really started..." from Amberdrake
Review:
Interesting beginning. Keep going.
Comments from author:
You got it.

Thank you for the review.
Raf
Review By [Amberdrake] • Date [2 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "This is how it really started..." from superbrutal
Review:
Looks really interesting, looking forward to seeing what you have planned.
Comments from author:
Thank you.
Stick around and I hope I don't disappoint.
Raf
Review By [superbrutal] • Date [2 Jul 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "This is how it really started..." from JonnyNapalm
Review:
Great start to a fun looking story. Nice touch getting the Mockingbird in and a little bit of the by-play with Natasha.
It'll be fun watching Xan try to shout down Thor when he shows up in a minute or two....Not sure if I'm looking forward to that or to the interaction with Fury more.... Doesn't really matter though. Great start, hope you keep working on it.
Comments from author:
I always thought that Mockingbird was a great character that was under used.

I hope I can flesh her out more.
Thank you for the review
Raf
Review By [JonnyNapalm] • Date [2 Jul 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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