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Review of chapter "Chapter Nine" from Gideon
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Well that is one way to get Buffy to agree to stuff - trade her the option of making Pepper do stuff! That should help build the relationship between them too. I wonder if Buffy would take up at least semi-professional surfing too. If Elizabeth has never existed then she can be built up in a beach bunny if Buffy wants. At least surfing is something that Buffy enjoys and it will be another way to get people to underestimate her.
Horse riding is a bit obvious though, for a teenage girl, so the low price there makes me suspicious.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [23 Oct 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Nine" from (Recent Donor)tchizek
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Wonderful chapter!
Thanks for pointing out the Iron Man 3 trailer...now I have to wait until May...
My favorite snarky line this chapter: “Not for all the designer shoes on earth.”

Thanks for a great story!
Review By [(Recent Donor)tchizek] • Date [23 Oct 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Nine" from AllenPitt
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The cook does sound like an interesting person. I pity the martial arts instructor. But she could use it. She's so fast and strong, she might find she's relying on that too much, getting some polishing on the skill level could be good. Plus... she can 'quit Slaying' but will it quit her? Slayers are demon magnets. She'll have vampires & demons coming after her all her life, probably.
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [23 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Nine" from tomfo
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Gotta say, I think its a real shame Pepper didnt find Casey Ryback to try and teach Buffy to cook, that wouldve been extremely entertaining. This story continues to be great and I really hope you will have more for us soon. Thanks for writing.
Review By [tomfo] • Date [23 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Nine" from kiwi
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Really like the idea of Pepper and Buffy doing things with each other. Bonding times. :)
Review By [kiwi] • Date [23 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight" from Mayrose
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I don't think Buffy will have a good reaction to instructors. In season 5 when the council came round to test her abilities, before they would tell her about Glory, Buffy didn't do well. The reason being that Buffy is a very trial and error kind of person. She doesn't do too well with a strict set of rules; Giles figured this out early. He guided her of course, but generally let her do her own thing. You could always go for a wise master that Buffy gets along with, but that might lead to over-used-trope-land. I don't know, I think having Buffy being tutored by JARVIS and Happy, along with the possible advice of the shopgirl (maybe you could add her to the mix of people buffy gets along with?) might be enough.

Then again, I did see someone mention having Black Widow as a martial arts tutor, which I think is an *awesome* idea. I could see Buffy respecting her (though maybe clashing a little with Natasha's way of life. Natasha is all about the mission and her orders. Buffy really isn't), yet Natasha doesn't fall into the zen master stereotype usually associated with martial arts in hollywood.

About Tony....hmm. I think Buffy might have some anger towards him. He knew about her yet they never met, and I doubt he even properly knows her. The fact that her whole life was a lie, along with everything else, might come to the surface and make her blow up at him. Tony not knowing her, and having crappy social skills along with no parenting experience whatsoever, might have the wrong response to that. Plus there is the fact she took over his house (or at least the important bits; the workshop and JARVIS, though JARVIS will most likely remain Tony's, considering JARVIS is a machine, and Tony built him). I imagine Tony is not good with sharing the few things he deems important (hopefully he then realizes that Buffy fall into this category). Basically I imagine boatloads of awkwardness.
Review By [Mayrose] • Date [19 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight" from (Past Donor)FireDragon
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I imagine Tony is going to mess up a LOT at being a new father. But at least he does care for her. So hopefully it will work out in the long run.

I think Happy has a point maybe it is better that Buffy pretend everything is ok and maybe one of these days she will realize she isn't always having to pretend that she is alright.

Looking forward to more.
Review By [(Past Donor)FireDragon] • Date [18 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight" from bubble
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AAA i love this so much cant wait for the next chapter
Review By [bubble] • Date [17 Oct 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight" from Nightmarish
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**Holy crap, I’ve tried to write this review three times and my computer keeps freaking out. So be prepared, I’m making it an epic one!**

How have I not already reviewed this story? Apologies! It totally deserves one! I’m really enjoying the reading experience, and although I’m eagerly anticipating Tony’s return (nice to see a glimpse of him in chapter 8!) I’m really glad you took a slower route to get there, focusing mainly on Buffy (and Pepper :) - btw, I’m keen to see how her relationship with Buffy develops) in the beginning, while she adjusts to the Stark/Marvel world.

I’m not sure if I have a strong opinion on martial arts/other instructors, and what Buffy’s reaction would be. I can see it going several ways, and it may depend on how the idea is presented to her. One the one hand, she might be uninterested and try to drive them off like the therapist. I personally think she’d be at least a smidgeon interested even if she acts otherwise, but perhaps she’s concerned that they’ll discover her super abilities. On the other hand, I think Buffy might enjoy having someone to train and unwind with, even if she has to keep her true strength under control. So maybe she agrees cautiously. She’s obviously able to control herself when training with regular humans – she never broke Giles, after all! Butbutbut…what if the instructor wasn’t a regular human? Or maybe they are, but they know a little bit about the supernatural. Perhaps not slayers specifically, but a general awareness of the forces of darkness? Even if they’re completely normal, I think over time, an intelligent professional would be able to see that Buffy had some extraordinary talents. Of course, I’m sure anyone Pepper hires would be well paid to keep hush hush about Buffy’s identity, so maybe it’s not a stretch to say they’d be easily willing to keep her other secrets under wraps as well. Haha, I guess I do have some thoughts on this matter after all! But basically, I think you can take it any way you like and make it convincing.

I’m curious if you have any plans regarding a big reveal of Buffy’s abilities, and whether the secrets will drag on for a while (I’m kind of in this camp, to be honest) or not. A martial arts instructor who befriends Buffy and keeps her secrets (I can see someone kind and patient who Buffy opens up to, although a really gruff, rough, discipline-driven character could be a lot of fun to read!) could be one way for Buffy not to go crazy keeping her secrets for a time.

As for Buffy vs. Tony…wow, there are so many factors at play here. I think Buffy might be a little terrified when it comes to meeting her father. Not scared of him, but…unsure of herself and her role in his world. Maybe by the time he gets rescued Pepper actually convinces her to unpack, and maybe she starts to settle in, make a friend, find a niche for herself…but I can see her closing off again in a heartbeat when she finds out he’s on his way back. I think she’d be secretly hopeful, but might not admit it to herself. And she’s taken over his workshop! Will she hastily clear out? Will she be unable to stay away? Will it take some time for Tony to realize she’s been somewhat living down there, or will Pepper spill the beans?

As for Tony himself…well, his life is certainly going to be turned upside down as it is! It seems more likely that Pepper wouldn’t tell him about Buffy until after the press conference, if only because the series of events leading up to that in the movie is very fast paced. Of course you have creative license . But I really can’t see Pepper dropping that bomb on the tarmac. Maybe she tries to tell him in the car, but he’s very single-minded at that point. Who knows! Whenever he does find out, I think his reaction would be mixed. He obviously cares about Buffy – he’s kept track of her all her life, uses her birthdate for his security code, and has already thought of her at least once in the cave. (That was a nice insert scene, btw. I would really love another bit with Yinsen. Maybe Tony confides in him or maybe he doesn’t, but Yinsen would definitely have him thinking about family.) After the cave/press conference/whatever – well, it will be interesting to see how father and daughter, each probably suffering from PTSD, interact.

And god, what about Obadiah? Will Buffy’s identity get leaked with Tony’s return? How is Tony going to juggle fatherhood and suit-building simultaneously? Will Buffy get left by the wayside? Tony may care, but he’s not used to putting other people first. How long until the slayer inside gets restless and demands a little action? Is Buffy’s hand smaller than Pepper’s? Does Tony try and keep Iron Man a secret from his daughter? Does Buffy get to kick anyone’s ass??!!

So many questions. I look forward to the eventual answers! Keep up the great work, no pressure, sorry this was a novel-and-a-half :)
Review By [Nightmarish] • Date [16 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight" from eriktheviking
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A well written and interesting set of insights/opinions from Pepper and Tony for his reasons to keep going.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [15 Oct 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight" from AtotheM
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Fantastic! I love that Pepper can see thru what Buffy is doing because of her experience with Tony. I also love that Buffy is willing to be respectful of Pepper.

I can't wait for Tony to get back in the picture. :)

Also (in previous chapter, I forgot to say it) I love your reason for Buffy being a bad driver--slayer senses need a better car to work with, just a fantastic little tidbit that helps weave these worlds together. Such an awesome xover!
Review By [AtotheM] • Date [15 Oct 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight" from Keshkreature
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*sigh of contentment* I absolutely LOVE this story. I had to go out and buy Iron Man so I could watch it again, once I realized (horror) that I didn't already own it. I've been a bit torn on the idea of Buffy getting martial arts instructors, mostly because she's already so good at it. Also, as the Slayer, she's going to need minimal instruction. That being said, having a real opponent to face off against would probably be necessary to stay in top fighting shape, and the Slayer part of her is probably itching for a fight. There's still the question of finding a human that will provide a challenge for her, and the painful memories that fighting is bound to bring up (although it's probably therapeutic to get those things out). As far as her reaction to Tony, I'm really not sure. It's obvious from what we've seen so far that Tony cares about her a lot, but she's not going to be able to read him well enough to see that. At least not right away. She is very perceptive though, so it might not take her long. But she probably doesn't want to get close to someone else either, since it's going to be extra obvious with the glow-y chest that he is mortal, and could leave her. Then again, it might do her good to see that he can save himself, and seeing him trying to help others might remind her of her Calling.
Review By [Keshkreature] • Date [14 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight" from HMaxMarius
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Martial Arts Instructors?

Either the blank mask falls back into place or Buffy goes KaBOOM at Pepper... After-all, it is her martial skills that caused her world to become fire and blood and ashes and dust.

With the possible exception of Tai Chi...

Gymnastics?

Eh... Maybe some interest but she's 16/17... That's a little old to be taking it up competitively and Buffy would not appreciate being shoved into it sideways.

On the other hand... How about a competitive surfing instructor? It's something she has connected with willingly and has no connections to her past life.

Tony and Buffy?

Gasoline and Paraffin and Black Powder and TriNitroToluene...

Just add flame.

edit: And /after/ the blow-up where she rips him /several/ new *$$holes over Stark Industries' weapons programs, it will have to be Tony who pulls the stick out and works to connect with her... He can't be his blase, playboy self with her if they're going to build a relationship (not that he won't be lazy and try to let it slide that way).
Review By [HMaxMarius] • Date [14 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight" from Duquette
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This is amazingly well done, quite frankly the best characterization of Ms. Summers that I've seen in a very long time. I cant wait to read the rest.
Review By [Duquette] • Date [14 Oct 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight" from Toniboo
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still absolutely loving this story, i get so excited when i see hat its been updated!!! looking forward to your next installment!

toniboo
xox
Review By [Toniboo] • Date [14 Oct 12] • Not Rated
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