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Review of chapter "Chapter Eighteen" from Grovtech
Review:
This is another good chapter. I love the bickering between Tony and Buffy. Pepper's reaction to the schedule changes should epic! :)
Review By [Grovtech] • Date [17 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eighteen" from DarthTenebrus
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The dynamic between Buffy and Tony is coming along nicely, as other readers have pointed out.

Of course Tony's "little project" might be a later source of contention as Buffy sees more of it..the more she sees, the more she's going to want an Iron Man suit of her own.
Review By [DarthTenebrus] • Date [17 Nov 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eighteen" from CageFire
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Great to see a new chapter. Keep up the great work. :) I'll be looking forward to reading the next one. :) So buffy finds out about the arc reactor although only the basics. I'll be looking forward to seeing things develop further.
Review By [CageFire] • Date [17 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eighteen" from lateVMlover
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The presence of Lindsey really threw me for a loop. I used to wish when Angel was on the air when he left town that he'd end up in Sunnydale! Always enjoy your updates and look forward to more!
Review By [lateVMlover] • Date [17 Nov 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eighteen" from fanreaderonetwo
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edit

I may have misread this.

The question is whether her order to Jarvis was for 300,000,000 _shares_ or 300 million _dollars_ worth of shares.

.............

A good fic, _please_ continue it.


"“Nine billion dollars, Miss.”

Holy crap on a cracker. Tony had put that much in her trust fund? And then released it to her to use? He was either bat crap crazy or was placing some serious trust in her to act like an adult. And then it hit her. Their conversation in the shop. Changing her schedule. He really was givng her the freedom to do whatever it was she wanted because she'd already started acting like all responsible. “Jarvis, buy another three hundred million in SI stock under the foundation's name.”"


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300,000,000 shares for nine billion bucks......

So SI is selling for $30 at share.....


Wondering if she could wind up suspected of stock price manipulation w or w/o Tony's being thought part of the "plot". Specifically: Tony makes a public statement (SI getting out of the weapons business) guaranteed to crash the stock price, then his daughter picks up a mountain of stock dirt cheap. Then maybe Tony retracts the policy change and the price jumps, making the daughter even filthy rich_er_ than before _and_ controlling a huge chunk of SI stock of her own. Sounds like SEC and stockholder fraud lawsuit material to me.

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So SI is selling for $30 at share.....



nitpick

You need to run this section thru spellcheck again, as there was at least two typos that spellcheck should have caught.
Then there were a couple cases of misspells that produced legitimate but _wrong_ words the proofing should have caught, one was spelled BUT that clearly it was meant to be BUY.
Review By [fanreaderonetwo] • Date [17 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eighteen" from hamishog
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The interplay between Buffy and dad is really good but I am still ambivalent. Yet, to be fair, that's primarily because of my own desires and predilections. The focus is as it should be on father and daughter and how she's being forced to fit into his world but for me (and I emphasize that) BtVS has always been about the group dynamic between the Scoobies. And that's not what this story is about so it's unfair to bring it in. Except that that doesn't really satisfy me. Which in turn distracts from how well-written and constructed the story has been. It's a peculiarity of my own. And being a peculiarity of my own it's tacitly unfair for me to ask others to indulge me. Which, I will admit, has never stopped me. By removing Buffy from the more familiar surroundings of Sunnydale you showcase her personal growth as well as explore new aspects of her personality which she might have obfuscated in other circumstances. However, by removing herself so totally from her previous life she has inadvertently given the impression that the people that she once called friends were nothing more than trappings, to be discarded at need or will.
Once again, that's not the focus of the story and it's unfair to bring it up. But I do because it affects me at an unconscious level and therefore affects how I view the flow of the story. Or maybe I'm just grouchy this morning cause it's cold.
The real pleasure of this piece is the interaction between Buffy and Tony and how that forcing him to adjust his lifestyle. And his thinking. It's only a matter of time before he learns of her 'destiny' and reacting well is not an option. Pepper is already proprietory. Life is so complicated for the obscenely rich.
And maybe Lindsey will figure out earlier that the temporary advantage that W&H gives you is ultimately an illusion.
Review By [hamishog] • Date [17 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eighteen" from norgco
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Buffy and Tony seem to be getting along reasonably well all things concerned. Pepper is all 'talk to her, it isn't interacting if you don't talk' but we are after all talking about a seventeen year old girl and her middle aged father. A certain level of friction in the relationship is a given but they are not yelling, throwing things, making wild accusations... They are interacting in various tech guru ways in the workshop, give it a few years.

Yes I think buying the shares could turn into a MASSIVE legal issue. It will be very easy for Tony's various enemies to charge that he deliberately dropped the share price so his daugher could pick up shares cheap which would then go up in value once the panic stops. Given that Tony has an enemy he thinks is an old friend and who sold him out to a terrorist organisation this is not a theoretical problem.

How much worse buying the shares under the name of a phony - or easily accused of being phony - charity will make things I don't know.

I also look forward to hearing more of how SHIELD is slowly involving itself in Buffy's life without her knowledge. The marshall arts instructor was mentioned as an agent in a side note. Who is she, Google wasn't any help?

Wolfram and Hart, the Watchers Council and SHIELD are all interested in Buffy, at least two of them in a 'kill the slayer' way. That is a long term issue I assume will continue through the story which I hope to read more of soon.
Review By [norgco] • Date [17 Nov 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eighteen" from Doodle
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Excellent chapter. 4,000/10


I'm a little embarrassed to say (well, type really) I've forgotten if anything was said about who died in the Buffy part prior to Chapter 1. (Besides Joyce). Is there a list anywhere.

(I edited it a little after the name Joyce to take out extra words since it really doesn't make sense.)
Review By [Doodle] • Date [17 Nov 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eighteen" from deathgeonous
Review:
Nice update. And you forgot to post this? For shame. Well, thanks for writing this, and finally posting it, and goodbye for now.
Review By [deathgeonous] • Date [17 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eighteen" from Starfox
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Good chapter. More slow character development, and good interaction with Tony. Though I have to admit I am wondering if Buffy has completely forgotten her friends in Sunnydale.
Review By [Starfox] • Date [17 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eighteen" from Martin
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SEC might care if Buffy might have insider information but they wouldn't stop her from investing as long as she was upfront about it and likely made her declare she was buying publicly then a couple of days before she actually did. However creating a phony charitable organization to funnel her money would get her put in jail. And yes they would know who it was, they keep track of things when it is even near a billion dollars.

I like you story, but the way you have worded that makes her out as a white collar criminal, and not a smart one.
Review By [Martin] • Date [17 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eighteen" from etraytin
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Even the chapters that don't move the plot far are still really interesting, so no worries there! I liked seeing Buffy out in public for the first time. It makes me wonder what her Sunnydale people make of all this, or if they have been affected by secondhand celebrity.
Review By [etraytin] • Date [17 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eighteen" from thewrongalice
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Apparently Buffy does speak jackass...Awesome! I like the fact that the relationship between Buffy and Tony is developing, but at a 'softly, softly' rate. I especially like that Buffy seems to be getting an understanding of Tony albeit almost unwillingly, hence not killing him for changing her schedule (and apparently not waiting until he's asleep to kill him either :-)... I wonder if Lindsey is going to become a good guy here? Never really forgave AtS how the treated him...

Also not sure if he's coming back but is there a chance that Declan is going to be Buffy's Rhodey? I get that some people may see Willow/Xander like that but Declan has, at least currently, got more life experience and might provide a steadier friendship than either of them... more maturity maybe. Also have Buffy and Rhodey met since Tony came back?
Review By [thewrongalice] • Date [17 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eighteen" from northernmoon
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One of my favourite things about the way you are writing this story is that there is an intriguing mix between Buffy's perspective and the perspectives of those around her... its so interesting for her to struggle with who she is while everyone around her is trying to figure her out as well for good and bad reasons.

I'm a fan! Thanks for writing.
Review By [northernmoon] • Date [17 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eighteen" from batzulger
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Just keep Xander to a minimum.
Review By [batzulger] • Date [17 Nov 14] • Not Rated
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