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Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven" from KevinSchultz
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Hm... regarding OC's:

The way the Marvel movieverse seems to do it is to take major and minor characters based on Marvel 616, and modify them to fit the needs of a new medium. (ie, movies and comic books are two different storytelling mediums, and thus have different requirements.) I can't offhand think of any major or minor characters that are in the movies that aren't in the comics.

(OK, Darcy from Thor. That's it. Who honestly I like more in fandom than the movie version - but mainly because she gets a larger speaking role in most fanfic than she does in the movies.)

That being said, it would stretch credubility of the story if suddenly a bunch of characters from (say) B:tVS were to suddenly start showing up willy-nilly; similarly, unless the characters are directly associated with Iron Man, they probably shouldn't be there. So in that sense, keeping the crossover elements to a minimum is probably a good thing.

With that ramble out of the way, I'd agree with the other posters - OC's are fine if they're done well. But if there's a canon character that can reasonably fill the narrative role (Wesley, if you need the "book smart but street-foolish Watcher", or the Mandarin if you need a quasi-mystical-but-really-technological supervillian), then I'd say go with that.

But as a guess, you're talking about support characters - either people Buffy might have to go to school with, or administrative assistants, or corporate executives, or the like. For those, yeah - you probably need OC's, simply because there aren't all that many in either fandom what would work without straining coincidence.
Review By [KevinSchultz] • Date [28 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven" from (Past Donor)pinkhairedharry
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i have no problem with OC's.

great chapter.
Review By [(Past Donor)pinkhairedharry] • Date [28 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven" from (Recent Donor)ConstanceTruggle
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First, your proposed OCs. For me, as long as they don't suddenly Mary Sue their way through, OCs are fine. Because it's hard to write a story without adding additional characters that aren't canon, provided they don't suddenly jump into the foreground. What I mean is, as long as they aren't exceedingly important in their own right, then they're fine. Because you've got great focus as it is right now, with Pepper and Buffy and Jarvis (and the what, once? of Tony), but introducing new characters is kind of how one would go about moving the story along.

As for this chapter, it was great! I love that Buffy finally realized the things she'd known before but hadn't understood. Pepper, though she was only peripheral this time, has also realized perhaps that Buffy needed to find her own thing to shake her out of her depression. Because once Buffy 'woke up' to the world around her, she learned all sorts of things and started taking an active role in her own life. I really *really* can't wait until she meets Tony. Not *too* much longer, too. Also, *LOVED* the finding of the Legacy file. Ha! Thanks for a fabulous update!

CT.
Review By [(Recent Donor)ConstanceTruggle] • Date [28 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven" from carmsfic
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I've been a big fan of your work for a long time now so when I saw you had a new story posted I was very happy. I love what you have posted so far and I can't wait to see what else you might have planned. There are so many elements that are being hinted at that I'm excited to see how everything will gel together. Keep up the phenomenal job and I look forward to seeing your future posts.
Review By [carmsfic] • Date [28 Nov 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven" from Xayian
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I think perhaps it depends on how much impact the OCs are going to have. As long as they don't take away from the main characters and add to the development of the main characters, I'm cool with it.

Basically, if it benefits the story how can OCs be bad?
Review By [Xayian] • Date [28 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven" from ZippySaboteur
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I'm not the biggest fan of OCs and would prefer someone tied to the marvel universe. Like shield sneaking in someone like Carol Danvers to be one of BUffy's tutors, as I don't see Carol Danvers appearing in the cinematic universe, but could be worked in as non-ms marvel or pre-ms marvel. But that's just my preference. I wont stop reading because you use ocs, you're a good writer and I believe you can pull of OCs better than most fanfiction ocs i've read, but it's just a pet peeve considering how massive the marvel universe is and the number of characters you can call on in new alt-universe ways makes it hard not to go "blegh" in my head, but whatever you decide to do I am looking forward to more and doubt I'll be disappointed.
Review By [ZippySaboteur] • Date [28 Nov 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven" from RevDorothyL
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Great chapter, with Buffy figuring out (and accepting and making her own amendments to) Pepper's educational program for her. It's great to see Buffy gaining self-confidence bout her not-inconsiderable mental abilities.

As for the OCs or not, if the OCs are what works best in your view, go ahead with them!
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [27 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven" from (Past Donor)FireDragon
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Question: are these oc's going to be minor rolls like Happy or big ones like Willow and Xander did on BTVS? Either way I will try to keep reading and enjoy it. but sometimes I have a hard time reading oc's then other times it works out well I think you are a good enough writer that you wont loose my interest just because some OC you added. Please no Mary sues. I don't think I need to worry too much about that though. Looking forward to Tony being freed I keep thinking that it must be coming soon. Wasn't he captured for about a month?
Review By [(Past Donor)FireDragon] • Date [27 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven" from kittenpoker
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I think it's going to be something new and different with four OCs (even if two are based on BtVS cannon), but I also trust that you are more than skilled enough to introduce us to the characters in a way that enhances the story instead of frustrating and pissing everyone off. With that said, I support the OC introduction, as long as you will introduce more Marvel characters later. No matter what, It's your tale, you're being kind enough to share it with us, so please write it the way you imagined it!!! This is one of my all time favorite stories, but I do have to say that this chapter was not quite up to par. Please don't be offended, it truly was a good chapter, but you've spoiled us with excellent chapters before. In comparison, this was a little...rushed. Not as polished as you've been; not quite reaching the wonderfully high standard of your story so far. Please don't take offense! I hope your holidays are happy, and that you continue to dazzle with this fantastic crossover!!!!!!!!
Review By [kittenpoker] • Date [27 Nov 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven" from EricThorsen
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In all honesty, if you can keep this story interesting and avoid the super-powered Mary Sue or Harry Stu, oc's shouldn't be a problem. There are plenty of characters from the Marvel universe to bring in, including Black Widow and Hawkeye, but if you feel that your universe needs new characters, then, by all means, bring in new characters.

In my opinion, oc's are only a problem when they serve no other purpose than to be oc's.
Review By [EricThorsen] • Date [27 Nov 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven" from (Recent Donor)tammin
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I personally don't mind as you have done an outstanding with this plot thread. I am looking forward to seeing what happens when Tony comes back and how both of them deal with the fallout.
Review By [(Recent Donor)tammin] • Date [27 Nov 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven" from HonorLove
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Personally, I'm willing to trust you with the OCs. Especially if the universe-characters would only share a name with their counterparts. My main problem with OCs is when writers don't write them well/believable. You're doing a great job so far, so my two cents says go with what you already have. Plus...anything that gets us to Tony and Buffy meeting sooner is of the good!
Review By [HonorLove] • Date [27 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven" from HMaxMarius
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As another author once said about fanfiction: The instant you put pen to paper, you are AU. As a fanfic writer you can be 'canon compliant' but you can never be 'canon'.

With that said, this is YOUR story. As such, you use the characters that your story requires. Let your writing and the story carry the reader. (Something that you have done an EXCELLENT job of so far!)

Do I want to see more Buffy canon characters in the story? Sure. Do I have a right to require you to use them? No.

Don't break your story by trying to live up to reader's false expectations regarding the inclusion or exclusion of certain elements. Go where your story takes you. So far it's been a hell of a ride!

(wanders off humming Bob Seger's 'Roll Me Away' while imagining Buffy on the Indian)

hmm
Review By [HMaxMarius] • Date [27 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven" from Sinangeled
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Awesome chapter! As for the OCs, I think they sound fine. The only time they bother me is when they are utterly crackish or Mary Sues, which obviously isn't going to be an issue here! Keep them in :)
Review By [Sinangeled] • Date [27 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven" from (Current Donor)wizathogwarts
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To answer your question, you've written eleven awesome chapters and you've done it by following your own instincts. Why would you want to change now?
I'm guessing that you need the characters for your plot because existing Marvel characters wouldn't fit in without altering the plot.
This is a very valid reason for OCs as long as they're not Mary Sues.
Looking forwarded to reading more.
Review By [(Current Donor)wizathogwarts] • Date [27 Nov 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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