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Review of chapter "2" from Bobboky
Review:
Very good
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review.
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [12 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "2" from ianquest
Review:
Um. Interesting, with lots of action, but there's a couple of things I had to query.

I'm guessing this Traxler is a 'movie' cop, where the law is whatever the police want it to be? Yes, there's wide potential for abuse by law enforcement and the US appears to be rapidly turning into a fascist authoritarian state, with enormously broad powers given to law enforcement and 'rights' almost a thing of the past. Even so, a cop who cuffs an unconscious victim of a serial killer, refuses to allow them medical attention, drags them into a police station and interrogates them for the 'crime' of throwing a table at someone shooting up a nightclub? It would take a reasonably competent law student about fifteen minutes to put Traxler's career into a nosedive. Plus “And afterwards missy is facing some hard time for her part in this, that’s for damn sure.” What part in this? Being chased by a maniac? Even a US judge would have a hard time justifying that!

Also, the bit where Xander runs across the street towards a truck racing past at high speed. Not only does he manage to catch this high-velocity vehicle, he does so unnoticed by the killing machine driving it, and he then manages to throw explosives into the exhaust (in 18-wheelers, they've invariably been vertical and high above the ground on every one I've seen). Is this comic-book physics, perhaps?

These are relatively minor things from the perspective of the story, but a bit of work would have prevented them being an issue at all. For example, Faith could have been taken into protective custody rather than being interrogated, and Xander could have thrown a block of C4 (much more likely than an archaic stick of dynamite, a la Wile E. Coyote!) into the trailer hitch area of the truck from the safety and concealment of a car it was passing.

Otherwise, an interesting addition to a fairly original story. You did a good job of joining the universes and maintaining characterisation, although by this point you'd expect that Faith would have figured out that when someone yells "Down" and throws her to the ground, it's because they've spotted danger, rather than her swelling up with outraged indignation every time...

Keep up the good work, and I look forward to seeing more in this universe!
Comments from author:
The truck wasn't going that fast. However you're right, I utterly cocked up the cop interaction. I wanted to get Faith into the police station to duplicate that scene where Arnie shoots it up, but I used a pretty horrible justification and motivation to do it.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [ianquest] • Date [12 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "2" from moringstar
Review:
Keep up the good work. Can't wait to see xander slap down the council.
Comments from author:
Oh the Council will get theirs eventually.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [moringstar] • Date [12 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "2" from (Recent Donor)tchizek
Review:
Very good cross, nicely done!
Comments from author:
Glad you enjoyed it.

Thanks.
Review By [(Recent Donor)tchizek] • Date [12 Sep 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "33. 2" from demonichellfire
Review:
any plans for Highlander
Comments from author:
Oh yes, both in-cannon and my original Immortals.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [demonichellfire] • Date [9 Sep 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "33. 2" from DofEire
Review:
If I haven't mentioned this before, I am just loving the heck out of this story. :)
Comments from author:
Glad you're enjoying it, thanks for the review.
Review By [DofEire] • Date [8 Sep 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "33. 2" from CageFire
Review:
Nice new chapters, keep up the good work. :)
Comments from author:
Glad you liked them, thanks for the review.
Review By [CageFire] • Date [8 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "33. 2" from Bobboky
Review:
very good
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review.
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [8 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "33. 2" from (Recent Donor)tchizek
Review:
Okay wow, very exciting and stress filled chapters.
I had to switch stories several times you had me so stressed.

But it was great, so good I couldn't keep but going back to see what happened next!

Thanks for a great story!
Comments from author:
Lol, Faith got herself in some trouble there didn't she? And the next story, well they're going to wish it was just Obie....

Thanks for the review.
Review By [(Recent Donor)tchizek] • Date [8 Sep 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "33. 2" from Hecatonchires
Review:
I'm unclear if he wanted Casey as a girl to torture and kill, or as bait for Faith. I thought his type was dark hair, casey's blondeness implying Faith was the real target, but she was outside the age range (12-16?) and fully physically developed.

Also, can I ask that when you give credit for some characters, you mention the media - book/comic/game/tv/movie/etc. I remember con air was a movie, but renegades could be anything I kinda want to know more about Reno :)
Comments from author:
Obie is a greedy bastard, he wanted them both. :D Casey because she's the right age for him, and Faith because in my verse, not only is killing a Slayer major status points for a vampire, a Slayer also has the best blood, taste wise.

I hope that clears that up.

Reno Raines was a character played by Lorenzo Lamas in a TV show called Renegade.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [Hecatonchires] • Date [8 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "33. 2" from OlBear
Review:
Once again I must congratulate you on your wonderful story. I can only hope that while Xander, Faith and Tara roam around the world destroying demons and forming the Brotherhood you don't forget to show what's happening in Sunnydale.
Comments from author:
Really glad you're enjoying it, however Sunnydale, apart from the occasional Giles cameo, won't be involved. Just not that interested
in Buffy.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [OlBear] • Date [8 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "31" from CageFire
Review:
Nice new chapter, keep up the good work. :)
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review.
Review By [CageFire] • Date [5 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Mithras Chronicles Chapter 1" from WolfWriter
Review:
Doom is in for a disappointment....Faith isn't about to dump Xander for a two bit jerk like him.

I don't care if he is the ruler of a nation; he got it by usurpation. That means his rule isn't legitimate; even though his people adore him (and fear him even more.)

If he threatens Xander, all bets are off, and she will kick his armored behind from here to eternity.

C'n we watch?
Comments from author:
I think you're vastly under-estimating old Vic as his friends of which I am one, call him. :D

Thanks for the review.
Review By [WolfWriter] • Date [5 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "31" from Bobboky
Review:
Very good
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review.
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [5 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "31" from (Recent Donor)tchizek
Review:
Yup, I thought the amulet was the trap.
Good chase scene.
Great fight scenes.
Great interaction between X/F.
Great traps.

Great chapters!
Comments from author:
The amulet is a trap, just not this story's. :D

Thanks for the review.
Review By [(Recent Donor)tchizek] • Date [5 Sep 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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