Review of chapter "South Station - Track #9" from AravilarFaenya
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First I have to say that this is an excellent peek into other things that occur in the Blue Belle 'verse.
Second I vote for giving Faith a proper Bostonian accent when you merge it into Blue Belle.
Comments from author:
So far you're the only one... but then again I kinda agree with you. I might write up both versions for the merge and see if people cringe at the accented version.
Review By [AravilarFaenya] • Date [2 Aug 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "South Station - Track #9" from chaosmancer
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both with also getting their numbers/email addresses
Comments from author:
I wonder if they would have separate numbers and emails or just share? O_o
Review By [chaosmancer] • Date [2 Aug 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "South Station - Track #9" from tchizek
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Wonderful! This gives more depth to all the characters, I especially like the inner monologue Tara has before agreeing to let the girls "learn" TK magic from her.
To answer your questions; 1) I like the way you have been writing Faith so far, I read her with a Boston accent anyway and having it written just distracts me. 2) Welll I would lean toward having the pillow fight end up with kisses and snuggles. With Tara giving the hickeys, Faith is just too obvious.
Great chapter!
Comments from author:
Yeah, like I've mentioned to the others, the only reason I'm pondering making Faith properly non-rhotic is because I've felt awkward writing a few bits of slang (and avoided a few others entirely) because they just don't look right when you use proper English.
Review By [tchizek] • Date [2 Aug 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "South Station - Track #9" from MarcusRowland
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OK, that's one of Xanders dreams taken care of, hot chicks having pillow fights. I hope Tara shares the memory with him (her) some time.
Comments from author:
I wonder if the two will ever meet. I mean, with this Faith having her own Scooby (possibly Scoobies someday) and a connection to the Frosts and X-Men... will Kakistos ever kill Diana, prompting Faith to run to Sunnydale?
Review By [MarcusRowland] • Date [2 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "South Station - Track #9" from Eureka
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:P Unless there is an underclass Boston accent then nope. Although I can see her possibly having an accent when she is excited or such.
Comments from author:
...you've never heard the average Bostonian, have you? O_o
Review By [Eureka] • Date [2 Aug 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "South Station - Track #9" from MrRigger
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No, I'm thinking you should leave Faith's accent as is. Phonetic accents can be good if you're doing it for every accent, but if you're only going to do it for one person, especially a person who will likely get a lot of lines, I would avoid doing any phonetic accent writing unless you're using it to point something out, such as the "pahk tha cah" example.
Comments from author:
Well, as I pointed out to someone else, some of the slang only works when done non-rhotically and so I feel kinda awkward trying to write it out in "proper" English. But you're probably right. :)
Review By [MrRigger] • Date [2 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "South Station - Track #9" from Katrina
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1. Keep the idea of the rhotic, but mention it rather than try and spell it out all the time. If people forget that she has an accent, that's their issue.
2. Both, different sisters. It seems to me the sisters are still individuals and capable of being attracted to different people for different reasons. They just might "share," what they gain/learn/experience. If it ends up a party of seven because it turns out that sharing is caring, well, that works for me. :)
Finally, as per usual, enjoying the bits you're sharing with us. Thank you. :)
Comments from author:
Wonder if Tara should get two then, just to show up Faith... ;)
Review of chapter "South Station - Track #9" from MistofRainbows
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Tara should leave a mark because... you expect Faith to. :)
You could always have Faith slip back into the accent when she's stressed. It's not really hard to read either way.
Comments from author:
The only reason I'm pondering a fully non-rhotic Faith is because some of Boston's slang requires it to be written properly.
That and it's hilarious.
Review By [MistofRainbows] • Date [1 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "South Station - Track #9" from Jaylynn
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*snickers* For some reason I pick Tara, just because I can see Faith complaining about her getting more action than her. *shrugs* Either way is good though. As for the accent, the way you have it is fine.
Comments from author:
I've just been sorta faltering on the accent front because there are some bits of slang that you can't use without writing in full-on accent because in Bostonian, they manage to make words rhyme that should never sound at all similar.
Gawkablawka: a traffic jam caused by idiots slowing down to stare at something on the side of the road, be it cops pulling someone over, a wreck, or human billboards.
Review of chapter "South Station - Track #9" from Harry
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I think we need to see how Tara ended up with Faith and Emma. And maybe, JUST MAYBE, we can see Emma taking Tara shopping. I smell a all white outfit for the White Witch of this household! White Bustier anyone?
Comments from author:
Not many places are open in the middle of the night on the day before Christmas. Also, Tara's sixteen or so here. It'd be kinda weird to do that to her.
Review By [Harry] • Date [1 Aug 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "ZEN Japanese Grill & Sushi Bar" from tchizek
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Very good story, different take on Faith and Tara!
Comments from author:
We'll find out more about the new version of Tara in Chapter 3...
Review By [tchizek] • Date [31 Jul 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "ZEN Japanese Grill & Sushi Bar" from skychan
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Well now that we see Faith is ~generally~ focused on just the pair she nipped begins the question of why those two, and how will she maintain the ability to tell them apart. And of course what could make a group of teenage telepaths blush just by thinking about it. They're of the age I would have expected, as is commented on, to have already seen imaginings of just about everything.
Comments from author:
Well, her "damsels" are obviously the easiest two to flirt with because she already has an in with them: she helped them get their stolen purses back. Use them to secure a foothold and then work her way outward from there. ;)
Review By [skychan] • Date [29 Jul 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "ZEN Japanese Grill & Sushi Bar" from Markelo
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My favorite Slayer always have been Faith. Faith's more feisty than Buffy, Faith's more sexy than Buffy. Buffy's like Diet Coke to Faith's Coke Cola, and Buffy was a necrophiliac and Faith wasn't.
Comments from author:
Yeah. Faith might be a little... overly friendly... but at least she's not a necrophiliac.
Review By [Markelo] • Date [27 Jul 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "ZEN Japanese Grill & Sushi Bar" from Roth
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I'm enjoying the living hell out of this and the title gets the Hockey Night in Canada theme in my head. The original one... the one they let rights for lapse... damn CBC idiots... okay so technically not the original one but still.
Comments from author:
Was the idea. We watch the CBC broadcast on NHL Network when it's in-season, and so I was like... Hockey Night in Canada. Hockey Night in Boston. Faith kicking ass. Hockey Knight in Boston. BOOYAH!
Review of chapter "ZEN Japanese Grill & Sushi Bar" from Katrina
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Yay Tara! Excellent. Thank you.
Comments from author:
Well, it's something that bothered me about Faith. She knew details about Buffy when they met. How did she not know about the Scoobies or, since I assume she logically would of, why didn't she have Scoobies? She's not exactly the type to go "Yes, Missus Dormer, I'll follow all your rules without asking questions no matter what".
Review By [Katrina] • Date [26 Jul 12] • Not Rated