Good start. This was well written and kept my interest throughout. I laughed at Dawn's reaction to Daniel, sometimes I forget what he was like the first couple seasons compared to the later years of the series.

I'll be watching this and see where you take it.

Hey there, and thank you!
Hope to have more posted soon.

Ooh! Neato! I really really like it! Heh, I was a little worried when I read your author's note at the beginning with all the revision stuff, but I thought this was pretty well written. Hope you write more soon! Dawn's POV is neat!

Yep, I was kind of afraid I'd scare people off by laying out the details and differences up front like that--I find that a little offputting in stories myself, actually. But there IS something to be said for letting people know what they're getting into before asking them to invest their time in reading something new.

I'm glad you liked it.
More is on the way!

This is the second story I've read, where "The Key" interacts with "The Gate system" as an extension of 'herself'...

I admit that I've always liked your style .... but I miss your stories based on "Virtue of a Warrior".

I hope to see more (of your stories).

Mr. Cardona
Who has, "Virtue of a Warrior" printed in book format, because he loves to feel the weight of a book in his hands

---This is the second story I've read, where "The Key" interacts with "The Gate system" as an extension of 'herself'---

Well, all I can say to that is: "Simpsons did it!!!"
Because seriously, with tens of THOUSANDS of crossover stories out there now, it would be pretty hard to find something that isn't at least vaguely close to what others have done before.

That Dark!Faith stuff is still bouncing around, and is likely to show up in some form, eventually.
(Awfully darn flattering that you printed out all 230,000 words of that Faith novel)

Thank you for commenting.

After reading this and some of the comments, I say 'bah' to those who want to see more scoobies. I would like to hear what everyone's reaction was eventually - maybe as an interlude or an epilogue. Something to write when your muse doesn't want to cooperate.

Otherwise, keep up the great work.

Thanks.
I might do something along the lines of what you suggest--have some sort of brief encounter many chapters later on, but the Sunnydale crowd just isn't what this story is about.

VERY nice setup and setting, as well as Dawn's new power. I'm looking forward to seeing if it still works away from the Gate itself, since the power she's using to do it seems to be originating from the gate. Also, her descriptions of the Gate's power and how it feels and acts would give Carter nerdgasams for YEARS.

I also hope you skip back to the Scoobies, especially if you decide to have Buffy resurrected still (though it's apparently later than she was in cannon). Something like this seems to be perfect for Tara to break away from Willow, since as S6 showed she ended up gaining some backbone and started thinking for herself.

Overall, this was a fantastically written story and a unusual idea of how to get Dawn to the SGC. Looking forward to another installment!

Thank you so much for a really kind review!

The points you raise concerning the gate will most DEFINITELY be addressed, and fairly soon at that.

The Scoobies, on the other hand... I'm sorry, but don't hold your breath. I really want to focus on Dawn and her interactions with the SG:1 crew, so I doubt we'll see much, if any of the Sunnydale people. This is a different universe, and Dawn is starting to think she likes it here better than there.

Thank you again for the review. My plan is to have the next chapter posted in exactly one week; sooner if possible.

I liked this, and hope you choose to continue it. The imagery in particular is striking; you've made us feel what it might be like to be on the night shift and the whole thing with the ghostly appearance...it's quite different.

Of course, the SGC has to be posted at all times, not just because of security concerns, but because it might actually be daytime on some of the other worlds in the middle of the night on Earth. Imagine *that* jet lag.

keep it up and post more soon.

I sort of tried to imply that the night shift guys do have things to do--offworld teams would be dialing in every few hours to report, even if they tried to schedule actual departures and arrivals during the day (Colorado time). Given that Kinsey was there just a few weeks earlier, and actually managed to shut them down briefly, I figure they're trying to minimize costs by keeping just a bare-bones crew there overnight.
Of course, eventually, there will be just too much going on to ever suspend operations unless there's an emergency.
Hmm....
Okay, I love reviewers who leave comments like that. You just gave me an idea for something a few chapters away.
Thanks!

I like, thank you

Thank YOU.

Good stuff so far. Looking forward to more!

Thanks!
Chapter two is underway, and should be here soonish.

I like it so far :)

I like you.
You have wisdom.
:-)

I could so picture the two witches faces as they have to tell Xander that they made Dawn vanish. It's been two years so he's either married or no longer with Anya. I could picture even Giles returning to express his concern over Willow over using magic.

I could also see Tara thinking that they were wrong and the key was actually a major part of Dawn and when it was no longer there or bound too tightly it destroyed her.

It seems a good start to the story and I take it you're going to have her stay in that universe for a while at least, i could see her having quite a bit of fun and Goa'uld are a lot like demons.

The growing process looks like its going to be painful for everyone. Nicely done.

Thank you Thank you.

::Offers respectful salute::

I *was* prepared to skip this story and possibly level a charge of Willow-bashing, but if Dawn's been robbing Sunnydale blind for 2 years straight, that would test anyone's patience.

Tracking this now.

Nope, not Willow-bashing.
Dawn has been a right brat since Buffy died; partly from grief, partly from having an amazing piece of magick she can use and abuse; basically her 'kleptomanic' stage writ large. Something had to be done, and Willow was the only one who could do it. Well, she almost did it.

And it wasn't just Sunnydale she was robbing blind... but that's something that will be described later.

Thanks for giving it a chance.

This is a very neat story. Maybe she can (someday) learn to recharge ZPMs.... meanwhile I'm very disappointed in Tara. Then again maybe Willow has been manipulating her memory etc. Looks like she was starting to have second thoughts. interesting, also, that Xander wasn't there. he wouldn't have gone along with it, probably. Big question: new dimension, or same?
I like the Key-based powers, they make sense for her to have. Very much liked the 'they worship a Donut god' thing. She should mention that to them.

Hey.
I hope you were able to read it okay; had some formatting issues it took me a while to straighten out.

Tara was being supportive-girlfriend-girl, and really, she probably thinks it's for the best, taking away a power that Dawn is abusing. Dawn herself is probably the only one who sees that power as --herself--, and not something she happens to be able to do.

Oh, and it's a different dimension, as shown by Dawn's little drifting journey between universes.

Thank you for the reviewage!