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Review of chapter "'The Girl Nobody Wanted'" from (Recent Donor)DaveTurner
Review:
Nice to see this story back and with such an interesting chapter!

D.
Comments from author:
Thank you, sir.
More will be forthcoming.
Review By [(Recent Donor)DaveTurner] • Date [23 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'The Girl Nobody Wanted'" from TroyGuffey
Review:
Love this story.

Damn Willow for banishing Spike. Stupid Anya, letting her greed get overwhelming.

Bet Dawn wishes the monks spell had been global or infectious.
Comments from author:
Glad you're enjoying it!

It always bothered me, how comprehensive and far-reaching that spell was; if the monks were basically all-powerful, how was one minimally-powered Hellgoddess able to wipe them out?
I wanted to show that they did have limits, and couldn't effectively cover EVERYBODY that Dawn might at some point interact with.
Review By [TroyGuffey] • Date [23 Jul 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'The Girl Nobody Wanted'" from (Recent Donor)jedibuttercup
Review:
Nice to see some backstory filled in on Dawn's characterization! Looking forward to what comes next.
Comments from author:
Thanks!
I know it was a pretty heavy chapter, with all the tear-soaked flashbacks, but we really did need to see what 'this' Dawn went through, to make her into the person running wild through the SG:1 verse. A little more of that next chapter, but hopefully more balanced, with some kicking and punching and teleporting, and also the long-delayed advancement of the plot.

Thank you for commenting on this!
Review By [(Recent Donor)jedibuttercup] • Date [22 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'The Girl Nobody Wanted'" from Genuka
Review:
*wince* The journey into the past is painful. Otherwise Fantastic story!
Comments from author:
I hear ya; sometimes I take too much joy in exploring the characters' misery in exacting detail.
Starting from the middle of next chapter, things will shift back very much into action/adventure mode.
Review By [Genuka] • Date [22 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'The Girl Nobody Wanted'" from Dmitri
Review:
After a long silence... an update? Cool. Anyways, I see that the Scooby gang is falling apart, and when Faith is left taking care of Dawn... that's just an invitation to disaster. And the SG team aren't having much luck in fixing it either, if any. In any case, thanks for a new update all the same!
Comments from author:
Hey, depending on what you're looking for in a parental guardian, Faith might be great!
o_O

Things stay Dawn-centric through next chapter, but after that we'll be getting lots of SGC action.
Review By [Dmitri] • Date [22 Jul 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'The Girl Nobody Wanted'" from Oxnate
Review:
And where was that social worker after Buffy died? Seriously. She should have been making sure Dawn got adequate counseling and making sure she wasn't living alone with two 20-something women. Dawn should have been on her way to her closest relatives with the proceeds from the sale of her house within a week.
Comments from author:
I'm going to have to say that even if no one here was showing Dawn an overlarge amount of love, they still did effectively the same thing they did in the show--cover up Buffy's death and proceed as if everything was still fine.
I thought about detailing the reactivation of the Buffybot here, but this novel-in-progress is already going to be novel-sized, and throwing in more would make it too unwieldy.
So yeah, figure that Willow uses Suggestion spells or whatnot on whoever needed a little push.
Dawn had certainly absorbed Buffy's dislike of her father by this point, so she would rather have stayed in Sunnydale, with Spike, than be sent off to wherever.
But don't worry, Faith provided a fine, stable, utterly conventional environment for 16-year old Dawn. Just look at how well-adjusted she turned out!
Review By [Oxnate] • Date [22 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'The Girl Nobody Wanted'" from RevDorothyL
Review:
So glad to see another chapter of this, and even more so because it gave me a good excuse to go back and re-read the first five chapters, as well! :)

This back-story for Dawn seems all too credible, given how out of control Willow got with her magic and mind control in canon (both before and after dragging Buffy out of heaven) AND how Willow's unspoken and unacknowledged passion for Buffy might've become twisted and distorted, along with everything else about her, with no Buffy or even Giles around to reel her in. It's probably a darn good thing that in THIS version of the Buffyverse Faith apparently didn't end up turning herself in and going to prison after an abortive attempt at suicide-by-Angel/us in LA, since otherwise she might not have been available or able to take Dawn under her wing, as it were.

And given Dawn's losses -- starting with Buffy's death and even the loss of public acknowledgment of her loss due to Willow's obsession with using the Buffybot to keep the illusion of Buffy alive, and carrying on through numerous rejections and betrayals of her value as a person and her relationship to Buffy and the others -- I can definitely see how she would end up so ready and willing and even eager to steal from anyone she doesn't know and sympathize with personally.

Well done! Looking forward to reading more soon. :)
Comments from author:
Hi there ::waves::

I'm very much of the mind that Willow (both in the show and in this take) carried a profound love for Buffy, starting in mid-season one, through the whole series. And after Buffy's death, it would have been all too easy to blame Dawn for what had happened. Willow wouldn't have felt good about that, she would have known that it wasn't something the girl had TRIED to do... but emotion doesn't follow logic. And when Dawn, who, let's face it, wasn't always a very likable person (much the same as Buffy) started pulling all of this crap with acting out and disobeying the people who'd stepped up to be her guardians, I can see that blame and vague dislike snowballing to the point where things reached the point I showed in chapter one. Willow still wouldn't go so far as to kill or banish Dawn, but she very much felt justified in performing what was effectively an act of magical rape/maiming to take away Dawn's ability to defy her/shame Buffy's memory.

As for Faith.... Ah, Faith, Faith, Faith.
I love the girl to death, but she's not a good person to be entrusted with a young girl, as far as role models go. In fact, Faith is responsible for several of the issues we see Dawn carrying around when she gets to the SG:1 verse. I'm wondering about the reactions I'll get when I post that one; I'm writing it now, and doing my best to show things in a fair and compassionate way, but I can very much see a few people maybe losing their shit over it.

Buffybot? Well shit. What you talk about here would have made for a great flashback section where we see Dawn's misery compounded even further by having to see the Buffybot walk around, 'taking Buffy's place' and making it seem even more like the world is pretending that nothing happened, and that her Buffy's sacrifice isn't worthy of acknowledgement.
I really might go back and add that in to this chapter.

I'm glad everyone seems onboard with the portrayal of the various Scoobies here; none of them (save Anya) outright told Dawn to get gone, but they WERE distant enough, or creepy enough (Giles), or whatever, to make it clear that she wasn't really someone they wanted at the center of their lives, as they moved forward. And to be fair, Dawn, again--not the sweetest person, when she isnt' getting her way.

Always great to see your comments, I'll have more for you soon.
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [22 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'The Girl Nobody Wanted'" from AnFan
Review:
The Buffy verse was a very dark place. It's amazing how dark it became at the end, and I won't even go into what I've seen of the comics post season 7. You've done a really good job of capturing that in your story. So good in fact, that the only hope I see for that dimension to keep existing as something other than a true Hell dimension, is Faith's interaction with Dawn. I'm not sure that I can see Willow successfully resurrecting Buffy given what we've seen from the gang. What I can see happening, unfortunately, is Willow actually 'ending' the Slayer line by getting rid of Faith so that no other Slayer is called. Thereby bringing about the beginning of the end of any hope for that dimension. Of course, given that there is only one key (or is there) that means that someone interfered with the timeline so that the canon series could not come about. That's got to have made someone unhappy. Maybe enough to start moving assets away from that dimension? Could it be that Willow is being used to shift Heroes away from a failing effort? Maybe there is more to Dawn's escape than her just reaching a deeper aspect of her powers? That small amount of the Key's power that Giles captured in the quartz could actually be used by either side in the game. The demons could use it to bring in their players from somewhere else, and the Powers could use it to shift either Heroes or tools out of a lost game.

Wow, this chapter gave me some fuel for some wonderful speculation. Love it when a story does that :)

Thanks for the update. I'm happy to see something new on this story.
Comments from author:
::Reads Review::

O_O
Whoa. Your mind goes to strange, grim, and deep places, AnFan.

In my version at least, there IS only one Key, in the whole Multiverse of which the Buffyverse and Stargate Verse are a part. At the moment, there is no Functioning Slayer, because Faith is very much doing her own thing, which in no way involves fighting monsters or obeying the Watchers--we'll see a little of that in the upcoming chapter.
The idea of this Buffyverse sliding downhill until it actually becomes a hell dimension.... Hm, interesting.
That's certainly not within the scope of this story, but I'll admit that I'd be interested in reading it, if someone else were to tackle it.
Review By [AnFan] • Date [22 Jul 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'The Girl Nobody Wanted'" from (Current Donor)JanessaRavenwood
Review:
I was astonished to see an update here. Incredibly happy, but astonished!

Hope to see Chapter 7 soon - it's good to know this story isn't dead! :-)
Comments from author:
I toldja!
Never doubt me.
Never!
(^_^)
Review By [(Current Donor)JanessaRavenwood] • Date [22 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'The Girl Nobody Wanted'" from Labrid
Review:
*does a silly dance* yay an update to one of my favorite stories on this site
Comments from author:
(^_^)
Review By [Labrid] • Date [22 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'The Girl Nobody Wanted'" from MarcusRowland
Review:
I don't know why I haven't noticed this before, but I'm enjoying it a lot, looking forward to more.
Comments from author:
Thank you, kind sir!
Review By [MarcusRowland] • Date [22 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'The Girl Nobody Wanted'" from carrytoomuch
Review:
Been waiting for this update! It may seem harsh they way some of the characters treated Dawn. But I still remember in the show when they left the 'chipped' vampire none of them liked, to babysit her. Not a huge stretch.
Please keep it coming.
Comments from author:
Happy to give you what you wanted!
Nobody but Anya really gave Dawn hate, just... well, they're moving on with their lives now that Buffy is gone. Unfortunately, I see shades of the same thing in my own life. It's a shame, but it happens.
But at least she's found her way to a place where better things can happen.
Review By [carrytoomuch] • Date [22 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'The Girl Nobody Wanted'" from CageFire
Review:
Nice to see a new chapter. Keep up the good work. I wasn't really expecting a flashback chapter, but it's okay I guess.
Comments from author:
Nice enthusiasm!
(^_^)

Next chapter will have a bit of flashback stuff too, but also a pretty nifty action section and some advancement of the plot, which will give it a more balanced feel than this part.
Review By [CageFire] • Date [22 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'The Girl Nobody Wanted'" from AllenPitt
Review:
Thanks for the retrospective. It really fleshed out the backstory, and made it clearer how Dawn ended up in SGC-land. Now I'm kind of hoping Spike shows up again someday. Maybe he's in the Pegasus galaxy or something. If not, at least he tried to be a friend to Dawn, more than anybody else did. Did Dawn try Angel at all? Just wondering...
Damn. Dawn really needs a friend. Or friends. I sure hope you get her with SG-1 at some point, though I don't see how you'll manage it.
* In a weird way, I hope Willow eventually manages to resurrect Buffy. She might be surprised at how Buffy reacts to the things they've all done in the meantime...
Comments from author:
I'm glad you liked it.
Gah, now I'm actually picturing Spike appearing on some backwater world in Pegasus, and having adventures where he fights the Wraith. O_O
Nope, no Angel involved; she must have been influenced by Spike's opinion of him.
Dawn and the Stargate crew will join up, trust me. Next chapter will end with Dawn's course aimed straight at the SGC.

Wow, Buffy showing back up a couple of years later, assuming she got past her apathy issues from the resurrection spell, would indeed be a bit miffed at the treatment of Dawn.
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [22 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'Webs and Lairs'" from Spica
Review:
This story definitely needs continuing. Maybe even soon? ^_^
Comments from author:
Very, VERY soon.
Seriously. Like, today.
^_^

EDIT: Annnnnd, there you go.
Review By [Spica] • Date [18 Jul 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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