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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from VillageOrchid
Review:
Is this a non magic world AU, or a Buffy just wasn't called AU? I like your extrapolation of her personality and potential.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [10 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from (Current Donor)Blackswordzero
Review:
Great story!
Review By [(Current Donor)Blackswordzero] • Date [13 Sep 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from PATM
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No mystical influence here I'm guessing since she needed an inverted bucket to mount the horse, interesting and looking forward to more.
Review By [PATM] • Date [11 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from bradsan
Review:
Glad you updated even it was short and not a full chapter. Can't wait for more.

And yes school is important, so I won't complain about the few updates doesn't mean I will like it but well you have no choice.

I only hope you will try to finish this good story and won't abandon it like so many auteur's do.

Love it and good writing.
Review By [bradsan] • Date [11 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from RevDorothyL
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Thanks for the 'free preview' of the full chapter to come! Glad you're not skimping in your school work in order to update for us (speaking as a college professor!)
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [11 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from AllenPitt
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SG-1 is an active team, involved with all sorts of things. Missing a meeting isn't the end of the world. After all, it's to meet a new team member, not getting a new commanding officer. As an elite unit they rightly get cut a lot of slack, probably.
Anyway--Buffy Summers, who never went to Sunnydale, and wasn't "called" as a slayer until she's ... 21 or so? 22? is interesting.
The Council will do their usual thing and ID her as the new slayer, then seek to acquire her. That could get messy. Sacred duty or not, she's a serving officer in the Air Force.
So-AF won't let her go, she won't want to go, but the Council is very powerful and determined. Quite a collision coming up. And honestly, she is needed to do slayer-stuff, or vampires/demons will run out of control. Not sure if there's a good solution here.
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [11 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from Voldemort
Review:
I've read your story and I like it.

I hope you will have time to continue it.
Review By [Voldemort] • Date [11 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from bradsan
Review:
two chapters and you already have me addicted. It's a good start and can't wait for more. It's a refreshing story which doesn't look like others and I hope you will update soon.

About some reviews. It's your story and you can make the characters act how you think it would fit in your story. I'll give the advice I give some other writers.

Read your reviews and enjoy the positive ones. The reviews who have some negative aspects, well read them and learn from them use when useful but again it's your story and you have the storyline in your head not the readers and reviewers.

For me I love it. I like the Buffy you write more then the Buffy who let her friends decide what's best for her and never noticed that behind the Slayer there is also a human involved who has a right to make mistakes and is perfectly capable of making decisions of her own. And she let it happen because she hate it when they are mad at her. So to me this Buffy is to very refreshing.

Keep writing and I will enjoy reading.
Review By [bradsan] • Date [11 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from kaekae
Review:
this is completely AU - so I can't comment on characterization. Except this, so far she doesn't seem like Buffy, she is someone else who has the same name.
"She also had the cap on her head, hiding her hair and eyes from view." I'm pretty sure that someone in dress uniform would never wear their cap inside - esp. in front of a general. I think that is a huge breech of decorum.
Review By [kaekae] • Date [7 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from (Recent Donor)SlayerandWereLeopard
Review:
Sad! *sniff* but great update :)

Does buffy have slayer powers in this?
Comments from author:
You'll see. ;)
Review By [(Recent Donor)SlayerandWereLeopard] • Date [7 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from Ironfelix
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I do not know if you were ever in the military but being late to a meeting with the base co not cool. Then when you finally show up almost 2 hours late it's just a slap on the wrist and a awe shucks don't worry about it. What happens when Buffy meets with the mystery General about how her meeting went and she says what meeting SG1 never showed not a good start. I love SG1 but some times they are they are written as Mary Sues. Well all for now. Caio
Review By [Ironfelix] • Date [7 Aug 12] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from RevDorothyL
Review:
Looking forward to more of this!
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [7 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from CrimsonAvenger
Review:
I wanna thank you for putting such respect towards the military in your story so far. It really touches home. Also I really like the way this story is written. I am hoping you mention slayer stuff soon. In my opinion a different childhood shouldn't mean that she wasn't still destined for slayerdom. Again Thank You.
Review By [CrimsonAvenger] • Date [7 Aug 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from Oxnate
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This doesn't make much sense. They wouldn't have scheduled the meeting on that day if she would have had to leave to catch a plane for a funeral early in the afternoon. MAYBE a meeting at 0800... but likely no.

Then there's Sam not hearing someone fall and knock himself unconscious outside her door. Sorry, Sam could be focused, but even a simple knock could break her out of it and the commotion caused by an unconscious SF outsider her door and then the medics when he's found would certainly break her focus. Sorry, but I would cut the whole SCG scene, have Buffy go to the funeral (Also, she's not going to have to go to her knees for a 13 year old boy-he's likely to be as tall as her unless you're making Buffy taller for some reason) and then come back to meet the team. Likely the funeral would happen before she would get set up in CO, so it would make more sense that way too.
Review By [Oxnate] • Date [7 Aug 12] • Rating [6 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from AtotheM
Review:
Hm..

Interesting, so are you planning to make her a slayer at any point?
Review By [AtotheM] • Date [7 Aug 12] • Not Rated
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