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Review of chapter "By The Work Of His Hands (Post IM3)" from Eureka
Review:
Great chapter! Loved how it cleared up a few things from his verse. No to see how JARVIS and Tony take finding out that JARVIS might as well be his son! well and Pepper! lol
Review By [Eureka] • Date [14 Jul 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "By The Work Of His Hands (Post IM3)" from bradsan
Review:
Good as always. Well it would explain a lot of things that Tony did and to me it doesn't sound strange. I never understood why he didn't think more off it. Well sometimes you don't want to know things because than you have to think about and handle it. Handling things when you aren't ready or can't talk about it to someone you thrust can give a burden . So Buffy telling him was a good job because he was ready.

Now Jarvis. I hope you will show a bit about his reaction and Tony's when he discovers that Jarvis is in fact his child.

I really love the interactions between Buffy and Tony.
Review By [bradsan] • Date [13 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "By The Work Of His Hands (Post IM3)" from RevDorothyL
Review:
This makes SO much sense! Thanks for providing a BtVS-universe answer to a Marvel-'verse conundrum! :)
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [12 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "By The Work Of His Hands (Post IM3)" from CageFire
Review:
Another good chapter. Keep up the good work. :)
Review By [CageFire] • Date [12 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "By The Work Of His Hands (Post IM3)" from ecsnorway
Review:
Oooh. ---eeenteresting--- ending. Me likey.
Review By [ecsnorway] • Date [12 Jul 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "By The Work Of His Hands (Post IM3)" from MarcusRowland
Review:
This explains quite a lot - especially if the power was inherited from Howard. I wonder if Stark weapons had a reputation for being state of the art but almost impossible to fix if they went wrong?

The talk with JARVIS would be interesting - provided he doesn't go the Moloch route or something, or create lots of soul backups a la Voldemort.
Comments from author:
Along those lines, I had the interesting idea that the reason everybody else's attempt at the Super Soldier Serum went wrong (in the MCU, anyway) isn't because they were so far off on the formula; it's that nobody else had that exact Vita Ray machine Stark built for Steve......

Jarvis is love; and this is my fun universe, so no Moloch here. :-)
Review By [MarcusRowland] • Date [12 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Dragon Pepper and the Iron Assistant (Post IM3)" from serenityselena
Review:
interesting chapter :)
Review By [serenityselena] • Date [10 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Dragon Pepper and the Iron Assistant (Post IM3)" from Vashti
Review:
Excellent post-movie chapter! The interaction between all the characters its very nice. What would the world do with Dragon Pepper? Although if she can manage not to break, bend or otherwise melt Tony at his most aggravating I think she'll get a handle on her new abilities quickly enough.
Review By [Vashti] • Date [26 Jun 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Dragon Pepper and the Iron Assistant (Post IM3)" from (Past Donor)exiled
Review:
Very good! Thank you sharing!
Review By [(Past Donor)exiled] • Date [25 Jun 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Dragon Pepper and the Iron Assistant (Post IM3)" from ShyBob
Review:
Liking what you've done with Pepper (mmm...Buffy and Pepper sparring). I was irked that they just de-powered everyone at the end of IM3. I agree she'd make a kick-ass secret associate to the Avengers.
Review By [ShyBob] • Date [24 Jun 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Dragon Pepper and the Iron Assistant (Post IM3)" from RaeBear
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oh I just loved this! It sucked me in, I was supposed to be working or doing family stuff. Please write more. Thank you.
Review By [RaeBear] • Date [23 Jun 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Dragon Pepper and the Iron Assistant (Post IM3)" from RevDorothyL
Review:
I'm very glad to see more of this. :)
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [23 Jun 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Dragon Pepper and the Iron Assistant (Post IM3)" from Freefall
Review:
While this story flirted with being great, it never really got there.
The format really worked against it--all filler/interludes and not much else. What I take away from this is that you were trying to show us the essential bits of a story, without all the noise and chaos that makes up 70% of all modern action movies, but somehow it didn't quite work. I wonder if it's because we didn't see any of the peril that the quiet moments you showed us didn't quite gel? Maybe. Maybe if you cut out the intense bonding moments, the quiet bits that should have all kinds of heart no longer feel earned?
Either way, that was how this felt--moments of heart without actual heart.
It was made worse by the dialogue, which felt very forced. Yes, Tony is quippy, and Buffy likes a good quip too, but you really shouldn't try to have them speak in nothing BUT quips that are combo-chained together in page-long runs. By the third or fourth chapter, it really felt so artificial that I had a tough time just getting through it. Buffy, Tony, Natasha: everyone was working so hard to be clever and cryptic and awesome in every word they said that they all ended up just sounding like raging assholes (which is a serious danger at all times with someone like Tony, who IS a raging asshole much of the time, but usually his charm redeems him. This time... not so much).

You don't need me to tell you that you're an immensely talented writer, so I won't, but this one felt flat. Don't let a challenge, or marathon, or whatever it is that prompts you to write a story channel you into a format that works against the proper telling of the story.
Comments from author:
I appreciate you taking the time to give me this well-thought-out opinion.

That said: (1) Judging by hit count, reviews, etcetera, I get several times the attention for this fic than everything else I've written in the last year, so I'd guess most of the people who click on the story disagree with you about the fun factor and characterizations; and (2) Sometimes I just want to write a lot of froth celebrating characters I love. I didn't *have* an intense story to tell; the movies filled that need for me. Without the challenge, I wouldn't have created this universe at all.

I can't be 'on' all the time; I work full-time, I have family responsibilities, and I have ADHD. Writing things like this keeps me energized for the tougher stuff; it makes a fun place to relax my writing muscles between more serious-minded stuff. I'm sorry it felt false to you, but I'm sure I'll write something else you like eventually.
Review By [Freefall] • Date [23 Jun 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Dragon Pepper and the Iron Assistant (Post IM3)" from Orion
Review:
This was a lot of fun to read. Thank you for writing and sharing it with us.
Review By [Orion] • Date [23 Jun 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Dragon Pepper and the Iron Assistant (Post IM3)" from bradsan
Review:
Oww that must hurt Physical and Mentally. "LOL". Underestimating Pepper you would think Buffy should know better. It took Buffy by surprise. Well lesson learned. Sometimes you need that even without knowing. Buffy won't be sloppy again in the near future.

Loved Peppers talk to Buffy. She needs that.

Great update again as always. Had fun reading it. Hope there will be more.
Review By [bradsan] • Date [23 Jun 13] • Not Rated
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