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Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from DieselDriver
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"no really, only in case of need"... Very much reminiscent of Doctor Who. Worth a good laugh.

One thing though, lot's of word errors such as "we're" instead of "were" in one spot. couple of others that I noticed.

But the story is good. Thanks for posting.
Comments from author:
My beta dropped off the face of the earth while I posted this, and while I caught as many errors as I could find, I definitely didn't catch them all. Thanks for mentioning it, I'll fix it.

And the thing with the cube is a plot point I really like, but it probably won't turn up for ages.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [28 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-Seven" from pezgirl
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"I'm surprised you're not there with her." said Jack, then burst out laughing as Daniel spewed omelette clear across the room and did a very creditable impression of a tomato.

*Snorts* That was great

Love the story
Review By [pezgirl] • Date [27 Jan 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty" from djhardim
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I think it safe to say that Samantha Carter has Top Secret clearance.

You might find this helpful

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/List_of_U.S._security_clearance_terms

"For access to information at a given classification level, individuals must have been granted access by the sponsoring government organization at that or a higher classification level, and have a need to know the information. The government also supports access to Sensitive Compartmented Information (SCI) and special access programs (SAPs) in which access is determined by need-to-know."

It's been a while since I read this story, but was Carter read into the Initiative program?
Comments from author:
Yes, she does, but as you say she didn't need to know about the Initiative until now. Perhaps I phrased it wrongly, but that's what I meant. Forrest doesn't know her, and so he can assume that she doesn't have clearance. However, given that she isn't going to reveal the Stargate to him, what she said would be the easiest way out.

Does that make sense? I'm kind of confusing myself here.
Review By [djhardim] • Date [20 Jan 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-Three" from Difdi
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> and said lightning would be very dangerous to any human who might happen to pass by.

Only if you don't build it to Tesla's specifications. Tesla, Edison and the companies that eventually became Westinghouse and General Electric were competitors at one point, with different ideas about how electricity should be marketed and distributed to the American people.

It was the G.E./Westinghouse version that won, due to companies having more money and more lawyers and more lobbying groups than lone geniuses. Electricity as the U.S. uses it today is alternating current distributed at 60 Hz. This is the same frequency as the human brain and nervous system use, so even tiny amounts of electricity can disrupt nerve signals, stop hearts, burn out nerve pathways, or fry the brain.

Tesla's equipment ran on a different frequency. If you're building one of Tesla's gadgets using Tesla's own theories, it would only be 60 Hz if you failed to build it properly. While Tesla's experimental coils did make some impressive thunder and throw off impressive-looking lightning, the average human could survive a couple megavolts of electricity from Tesla's equipment and walk away with only a minor burn.
Comments from author:
I know that Tesla built it with high voltage but low current. However, in order to generate the highest wattage, I need both current and voltage to be high. I did mention this when Sam and Willow were tossing ideas around.

Thank you, though.
Review By [Difdi] • Date [26 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-Three" from CageFire
Review:
Nice new chapter, keep up the excellent work. :)
Review By [CageFire] • Date [26 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-Two" from (Recent Donor)DeepBlueJoy
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Despite some persistent past tense-present tense switching issues and a few other problems, you've created one heck of a story and you have done significant and insightful character development. I have been enthralled, and that doesn't happen as often as I'd like. I am dying to see what comes next.

Peace,

Blue
Review By [(Recent Donor)DeepBlueJoy] • Date [11 Dec 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-Two" from Genuka
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Ouch. At least Buffy can read invisible tracings. I can't do that very well...
Comments from author:
Only Slayers can.
Review By [Genuka] • Date [9 Dec 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-One" from Genuka
Review:
Good way of repairing their relationship. Wonder how they picked up on the fact that he was bluffing?
Comments from author:
Thank you.

See if you can guess how they knew. It's possible, I've even left a couple of others of examples.

If you can't, you'll find out soon enough. But until then - no spoilers for you!
Review By [Genuka] • Date [7 Dec 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty" from Genuka
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Hello brother? Oh that isn't good...
Review By [Genuka] • Date [25 Nov 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty" from Genuka
Review:
Hello brother? Oh that isn't good...
Review By [Genuka] • Date [25 Nov 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty" from Valandar
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"With all due respect, Major, this is a military operation, and you're Airforce. You have no jurisdiction here." said Forrest bluntly.

That line... there is SO MUCH wrong with that line. 1 ) The Air Force -IS- military, 2 ) Even if he said "Army operation", he'd be utterly wrong, 3 ) 'Jurisdiction' is a legal term, not a military one, just for starters. That entire line and response really doesn't make much sense at all.

Edit: Why not a line that makes Sam's mention of clearance make sense?

"With all due respect, Major, this facility is classified Top Secret, and unless you have sufficient clearance, you've just broken the law," said Forrest bluntly.
Comments from author:
In that case, what would? I'm looking for some reasonable reason that would get the gang out of there, and if that doesn't work, what would?

Although I'll change to Military to Army, I'll leave it as it is unless you can come up with something, alright?

Edit: Hmm, good point. I'll do it. Thanks.
Review By [Valandar] • Date [25 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty-Nine" from Genuka
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*snicker* I can just see that happening.
Review By [Genuka] • Date [18 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty-Eight" from CageFire
Review:
Nice new chapter. :)
Review By [CageFire] • Date [17 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty-Seven" from Genuka
Review:
Interesting tactic. More please!
Comments from author:
There will be more, just as soon as I figure out what I want to do with Hailey.
Review By [Genuka] • Date [4 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty-Six" from PATM
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Sam putting Haley into the initiative is appalling, appalling I say!
Comments from author:
Why?
Review By [PATM] • Date [29 Oct 12] • Not Rated
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