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Review of chapter "Chapter Five" from DesitaniaF
I'm sad her friend is dead, but love how the story is coming along. Is this a Pathfinder or DnD setting? and if DnD which set of rules are you using?
Comments from author:
This is the Pathfinder setting, which is called Golarion. She is in the country called Ustalav, which is the gothic horror region of the setting. Thanks for reviewing!
Review By [DesitaniaF] • Date [24 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Five" from war
Poor Buffy all alone again.

Good story looking forward to your next chapter.
Comments from author:
Thanks. She usually has it rough -- one of my favorite things about her is how much she goes through, and yet she still gets back up again. She'll be meeting people in Ravengro, however, so she won't stay alone. Thanks again!
Review By [war] • Date [24 Sep 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from becuzitswrong
That was awesome! I love Buffy Xovers with D&D! And the setting was great. I can see that Buffy is going to face tougher and tougher mobs as time goes by and her knowledge, skill, and weapons increase. Maybe join a group of adventurers. Damn I am enjoying this.
Comments from author:
Thank you for reviewing! I've read everything you've written, so it feels great that you like my work. I hope you enjoy my future chapters as well.
Review By [becuzitswrong] • Date [22 Sep 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from (Current Donor)kedrann
Silverware... reminds me of a scene in Hellsing where Walter, the butler, warned the freshly turned Victoria about that point.

Thank you for writing this.
Comments from author:
You know, I'm a big anime fan but for whatever reason I've never gotten around to watching Hellsing.
Thanks for the review!
Review By [(Current Donor)kedrann] • Date [22 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from MistofRainbows
Yeah... I was thinking about her using real silver and shaking my head... though honestly silver was probably the best and safest thing to use as silverware at that time... :)

Hopefully she can recover her bracelets :) and maybe loot the place :) I figure the silverware has got to be worth something.
Comments from author:
Thank you. Don't worry about her stuff -- she'll have a few days to rest up and heal before even thinking about moving on, so she has plenty of time to recover her equipment. Regardless of what its made of we call it silverware for a reason -- it was just the traditional material if you could afford it. For most D&D vampires, the appearance of class would be more important than the small risk some human could turn the dinner items against them. Of course, if they were really careful, they wouldn't have invited a slayer to dinner!
Review By [MistofRainbows] • Date [21 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from JustJesting
Nice! Buffy finally breaking the thrall and a well written fight scene. This was fun. D&D vampires are rather nasty, but sometimes pretty stupid. Considering vampire cliches, I don't think she had much choice about using silver - ever read 'Carpe Jugulum' by Terry Pratchett? You'll have to give your victims a fighting chance. And where would we end up if evil overlords actually followed all the rules on the list...

Thanks for writing
Just in Jest
Comments from author:
Thank you! I enjoyed writing that fight scene quite a bit. A battle against vampires, in a dress, armed with spoons and forks, while avoiding a group of mind controlled innocents and being blasted with famous invocation magics by a sorcerer? That was fun to imagine.

Yeah, anything but silver just didn't have the right look in my head for the dinner scene. I've never read much Pratchett, just the first book of Discworld. And yeah, if the bad guys followed the evil overlord list too closely, our plucky heroes would be in a lot of trouble!
Review By [JustJesting] • Date [21 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from DesitaniaF
she could have gone for gold, I think. no way gold could be any worse to eat off of than silver, and less likely to have lead content. even more extravagant, as well. I love how your story is going, and how you described the spells accurately enough that I knew what they were without you having to resort to "she cast magic missile on Buffy" because that kills the immersion. Keep up the good work!
Comments from author:
Gold would work, but silver cutlery has a certain look that says 'elegance' while gold just seems a bit 'gaudy'. Still, having real silver made for a fun fight, so even if it wasn't what I thought she would have on the table, I would have been tempted to use it.

Spells are a very important part of D&D, so I tried hard to make the magic feel right. Calling out something as mechanical in text as the name of the spell (especially since Buffy would have no way of knowing it) would definitely break verisimilitude. Doing a proper job with some spell schools, like invocation, I think I have a handle on, but its going to be tricky doing some other types in later chapters, although I do have ideas already. Thank you for reviewing, and I hope I keep you entertained throughout the rest of the story.
Review By [DesitaniaF] • Date [21 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from ShalaDakiri
Good to see Buffy throw off the domination so she can finally take care of pervy vamp.

Yeah, I agree about the silver. I actually did something similar once (or at least tried) when my party came up against some wererats. I played a thief and had nicked the house silverware before we explored up stairs in the house.
Comments from author:
Yeah, I was actually writing the dinner scene early on in my writeup of the last chapter and used the term silverware and it hit me that I knew how I wanted the fight to go down in the next chapter:)

Thanks for the review.
Review By [ShalaDakiri] • Date [21 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from war
Good story looking forward to your next chapter.
Comments from author:
Thank you, it'll be out monday.
Review By [war] • Date [21 Sep 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from grd
Buffy's revenge is not enough. Love her use of the silverware. Hope she can upgrade her weaponry and defenses next time she beats on vamps. Her new "Watcher" may be able to help with that.
Comments from author:
Well, as I said in my author's notes, this isn't the last time Annika will be appearing. But I think the humiliation of having to flee someone in a formal dress armed with nothing but silverware has to be pretty painful. Thanks for reviewing!
Review By [grd] • Date [21 Sep 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from borgrabbit
Haiku comment:

Storms on horizon
Mouse fingers stooping eagle
A good day to die

Interesting chapter.
Comments from author:
Thank you.
Review By [borgrabbit] • Date [20 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from (Current Donor)kedrann
Nice chapter. It really shows how morally ambiguous (at best) Enchantment magic is and why if I play wizard, it almost always ends up on my opposed schools.

In my current campaign, I had a 'grey' use of Dominate. One of the PC is a rather amoral (welll... to say it frankly, I had her shift to CE recently) enchantress who has a tendency to dominate the barbarian "just in case he gets out of control". Let's say that the barbarian had to be convinced by the rest of the party not to slaughter her once he realized.

Buffy will have to be cunning to slay those vampires... but she'll adapt.

Thank you for writing this.
Comments from author:
Thank you. Yeah, I'm not fond of enchantment either -- my all time favorite D&D character I've ever played was a wizard that was invocation focused. Many gamers these days seem to roll their eyes at it, as doing some damage is less 'effective' than some of the fancy things you can do with your spell selections, but blowing stuff up is FUN. And isn't that the point? Magics like enchantment tend to be a saving throw away from intant defeat or no effect -- like save or die, but torturous, and likely to backfire.
Review By [(Current Donor)kedrann] • Date [18 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from grd
Eager for Buffy to get some payback soon.
Comments from author:
Yup -- I've always thought being mind controlled and still aware would have to be just about the worst thing imaginable. Buffy will definitely be looking for a chance for payback.

Thank you for the review!
Review By [grd] • Date [18 Sep 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from DaBear
Still going strong. Great update.

So is this the setup for the favor as to why she was invited to Ravengro, ala the first book of the AP? If so how many years before? (if that is not giving to much info away of course)
Comments from author:
Yup -- and nice to see someone who knows the AP reading it! Not too long before, actually. I'm tweaking some things to make it stand alone (I'm only writing the first volume of the AP) but in a few more chapters that part of the story will begin.

Thanks for the review! They're addictive:)
Review By [DaBear] • Date [17 Sep 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from (Current Donor)kedrann
Sincomakti indeed... as a long time Call of Cthulhu player, I feel rather ashamed not to have seen this until I read your note at the end of the chapter.

As another reviewer pointed, it's true that Buffy has only limited knowledge and she makes by without a guide for now. As an old D&D grognard and proud geek, I tend to forget that all the small bits of knowledge about various myths and creatures I gathered during a quarter century of playing are not known by most people...

Well, thanks for writing this and hoping to see the next chapter in the near future.
Comments from author:
I thought the name was really strange when I first saw it -- it just didn't seem to fit the overall milieu of Ustalav. Then it hit me, cue eye roll.

Yeah, D&D gives you so much random, strangely useful knowledge. She knows how to get by -- a season 6 Buffy is not only experienced, but she survived most of the season without Giles to help her with research, but she's still not used to being alone, and everything in Golarion is a little different than she's used to.

Thanks for the review! I'm still writing away, and tomorrow will see the next chapter come out. In a few minutes though I'm off to run a 4e D&D game -- my party is at 18th and exploring the Tomb of Horrors. I'm sure my players will be grateful for the good mood reading your new chapter and then your review have put me in.
Review By [(Current Donor)kedrann] • Date [16 Sep 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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