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Review of chapter "Episode 14: You Can't Stop Everything" from (Recent Donor)tchizek
Review:
Oh dear, bad news...good lesson for Xander but bad news.
Review By [(Recent Donor)tchizek] • Date [10 Feb 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Episode 14: You Can't Stop Everything" from (Current Donor)Ironbear
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Cool. A new Iron Coin installment is always a nifty thing to see. ;)

And, day-um. Had to happen eventually, that Xander would get a glimpse of something too late to do anything useful about it, but man - what a hell of a time and thing for that to happen on.

Here's to hoping he, Amy, and Cordelia can manage to keep Faith from going completely over the edge like she did in canon. Gods know that Buffy wasn't up to the task in our Sunnydale...

And please, please have someone sit on Wes or deck his idiotic arse before he can call in the Council goon squad this time.

Cheers.
Review By [(Current Donor)Ironbear] • Date [9 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Episode 14: You Can't Stop Everything" from mojtaba
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please dont let the situation become FUBAR like what happened in Canon....I mean really nobody has ever heard of collateral damage...i mean its not good that a person died but the way everyone reacted was idiotic....
Review By [mojtaba] • Date [8 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Episode 13: Consequential Sisterhood" from Morgomir
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Great chapters. Keep up the good work.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [2 Jan 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Episode 13: Consequential Sisterhood" from CageFire
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Nice chapter. I read it a few days ago, but my internet line apparently rusted out and I haven't had internet for the last few days. They just ran a new line, so now I have over 100 emails to get caught up with. I'll have to get caught up with my youtube subscription another time though since I have to work in a few hours. :( Still, it's back up which I'm grateful for. It's surprising how dependent on the internet we are, or at least how I am. It's annoying when you want to look something up, but can't. So used to instant answers. Not to mention the loss of entertainment, and some programs/games don't even start without an internet connection anymore.
Review By [CageFire] • Date [26 Dec 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Episode 13: Consequential Sisterhood" from (Recent Donor)tchizek
Review:
Great chapter!

Tom.
Comments from author:
Glad you liked it!
Review By [(Recent Donor)tchizek] • Date [22 Dec 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Episode 13: Consequential Sisterhood" from Hyperion
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Another great chapter, and glad to see this continuing.

I like how Buffy is being cautious in regards to the recent events with Amy, and still somewhat cautious about Xander, but also not being dismissive of them. It's nice to see Amy continuing to be involved with the Scooby Gang as well. If she survives the coming conflict against the Mayor and doesn't go full evil as a result, having her around will be a big help.

I'm also looking forward to seeing how things go with Cordelia now that she has a bit of warning about her parents and their troubles with the IRS. Now that she's talked with Willow, even if she can't prevent things from going downhill for her parents, perhaps with the assistance of Willow and a bit of magical help, maybe instead of being completely screwed money wise, perhaps they can find a way of hiding some money somewhere so even of Cordelia's parents still go to jail, Cordy herself will still have at least a fews tens of thousands or a few hundred thousand dollars to work with and not be stuck in a roach infested apartment in LA nearly starving at times.

If things go in a similar enough direction where Angel moves to LA and starts a private detective agency, perhaps Cordelia could loan him some money even down the line.
Comments from author:
As usual, I'm quite glad to see that I've got you thinking with this latest chapter, and also as usual, I can't spoil by telling how right or wrong any of your guesses may be.

Its true that there is a lot of potentiality here though.

I'm glad you liked the chapter!
Review By [Hyperion] • Date [22 Dec 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Episode 13: Consequential Sisterhood" from (Current Donor)Ironbear
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"'Hey, you were the one you told me you had your hair dyed pink when you were five.' Xander pointed out. “'So now we're going to find the pictures to prove it, one way or the other.'"

*ROFLMAO!* That line is damned near worth the price of admission. ;) So Cordy had pink hair as a kid? On purpose? Heh. I'm tempted to find the youngest looking pic of her that I can get ahold of, and take it into photoshop to see how she'd look.

Followed by, "Oh crap." I see the coin didn't give Xander a head's up on the IRS mess in time for him to warn Cordy. Ah well. At least she's being proactive in lining up Willow to look into it. Maybe between them they can mitigate the damage somehow.

ETA: If I thought I was good enough in photoshop to just select the hair and color it decently, I'd do it and send you a copy. Alas, that's getting a bit beyond my image manipulation skills. I'm surprised she didn't hunt down all of the photos and burn them. ;)
Comments from author:
Fate didn't need to make Cordelia's dad a tax-cheat. He did that all on his own. :P

I'm glad you liked that line. Took me a while to come up with something funny that would get them into the office.
Review By [(Current Donor)Ironbear] • Date [22 Dec 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Episode 11: Helpless, not Hopeless" from (Recent Donor)Hawklan
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quite the good story so far, thank you for sharing this with us.
Review By [(Recent Donor)Hawklan] • Date [7 Dec 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Episode 12: Motherhood is a Bitch" from (Current Donor)Ironbear
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Wow. That was pretty intense. Good chapter.

Of course, now I'm going to have to wait to see if Xander and Cordelia are all right and who went "crack!", dammit. ;)
Review By [(Current Donor)Ironbear] • Date [25 Nov 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Episode 12: Motherhood is a Bitch" from Hyperion
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Another outstanding chapter and things get more and more interesting.

Nice to see Amy again and good to hear that you have plans for her as the story progresses. I don't know if it was personal issues with the actress or what, but of all the people Buffy and the Scooby Gang had to deal with over the years, I'm surprised they didn't try to have Amy Madison involved more with them after first encountering her. Even if she wasn't a permanent Scooby Gang member, having that one extra person here or there could have made quite a difference dealing with a number of demons or vampires or other big bad characters.

Reading the latest chapter, I'm guessing that The Mayor has eyes on bringing her over to his side in the near future, with her mother being an expendable means to an end in that regard. Given that in canon by seasons 6 and 7 Amy was bordering on going evil, if not already evil, it would be a sad but not unlikely thing to happen to her. On the other hand, the Scoobies in general, and Faith in particular have now been involved in keeping her from getting killed several times now very recently, so while The Mayor might be able to tempt her, I think she wouldn't necessarily be completely loyal to him like Faith was in the canon season 3.

Of course unlike Faith who went full bad girl and ended up in a coma and then jail before being somewhat redeemed, another option unfortunately(one I personally don't like but it's your story if you choose it) is that Amy falls under the influence of The Mayor somewhat, but ultimately chooses to support Buffy and Faith, only to be killed off by The Mayor as a result. A sad ending for a great character, but unfortunately, "Buffy" and "Angel" where definitely not shy shows as far as killing off characters.
Comments from author:
Well, I can't provide you any spoilers ( :P ) but I'm glad that I've got you thinking about things.

Thanks for the review!
Review By [Hyperion] • Date [17 Nov 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Episode 12: Motherhood is a Bitch" from CageFire
Review:
Interesting new chapter, keep up the good work. :)
Comments from author:
Glad you like it, and I intend to. Thanks for the review!
Review By [CageFire] • Date [14 Nov 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Episode 12: Motherhood is a Bitch" from JJDudeman
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Brownie points for doing more with Amy's character development than the show ever did - if you'd have stopped BEFORE Amy visited Rack I'd have said it was a great setup for her canon fate of becoming power/darkness obsessed. Even though I'd want her to go in a different direction and possibly avoid that fate at all, but you've taken it farther...
I always have a bit of trouble when characters make such a blatant 'deal with the devil' like you have Amy do here, they know SO much better how it just makes things worse - at least you set up her motivation for such idiocy, which goes a long way.
Well, you've taken this to an interesting level, now - Amy could go in so many different directions, especially when you consider the varieties of emotional/psychological issues that COULD be added as well, not that you have to. Curious where to go from here for her and Faith, nice stuff worked in with her, girl's got so far to go to get through her issues. Question: Did they ever address if they were gonna kill Catherine? I realised at the end of the fight at Amy's house Faith might have had to do it and no doubt that would have been the 'wrong' choice - but seriously, did they have any clue what to do with her besides that? That's Almost unbelievably short-sighted of them not to address that for that last fight.
Still loving your mayor. Especially the Snickerdoodles crack!
Comments from author:
They never talked about it - that is going to be an issue in the future, yes. And I think you'll be surprised by my plans for Amy's characterization as we go forward - I didn't actually intend to, but as I was writing this chapter I grew quite fond of where Amy was developing, so you'll see more of her, I'm sure.

And if there's one thing that [i]all[/i] the scoobies are at times (even the ones I like the most), its short-sighted. I don't think a single Scooby hasn't been short-sighted on multiple occassions, over the course of the show.

And I'm glad you like the Mayor. He's a lot of fun to write.
Review By [JJDudeman] • Date [14 Nov 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Episode 11: Helpless, not Hopeless" from (Recent Donor)nerfherder
Review:
Nice use of the archetypes! Great conversations, nice flogging of the Xan-man! Keep it coming!?!
Comments from author:
Of course. Glad you liked it.

Flogging of the Xan-man?
Review By [(Recent Donor)nerfherder] • Date [22 Oct 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Episode 11: Helpless, not Hopeless" from KrisB
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I'm mixed on Giles tormenting Travers like that. The main reason is that i'd rather him not know exactly what was coming to him when he made it back home. With him being this informed, he is liable to actually politically survive in some form which is far worse. O.k. the test is taken care of, but he is still around for awhile.

I want to see Xander actually start using the coin on random folks like TV stars and politicans. My main reason is that he should be bored abit about coming up blank on his friend alot and want to test limits and see if anyone on TV triggers the coin or any one in government that he remotely knows. That would give you a valid reason for testing the coin out on listed city council, police, mayor, and who ever else he thinks of.

He has mainly been using the coin to try to stop things happening. There should be things that show up that he doesn't care about happening or that are rather o.k. or good. Not all of Fate should be bad.

There was a part of me that giggled when Xander declared war on Fate. If anyone were to figure out how to ascend enough to beat the crap out of that type of entity, it would be Ranma. Xander would only do it by utter accident.

Why hasn't Xander tried to ask Giles two questions. What entity is behind prophesy. What entity would you think of as actually enforcing/allowing free will and freedom of choice and action? That should be enough hints and clues for Giles to make up his own names and determine what is going on with Xander. If Xander really wanted to get Giles attention, "Giles, the entity behind writing all those hints of the future wants Buffy dead and has tried to kill her several times. The master, the portal and several other times were basically hits on her!"

You know if Fate really wanted to contain Xander he should give Xander a coin that basically is of events that Xander should really want to happen or bad things would happen if not. Xander is getting in the habit of disrupting everything he view of Fate, but that might not be the best idea. You know it would actually be more balanced if Fate gave Cordy a coin to balance out Xanders. If he had any sense, he'd know Cordy is likely one of the few that would liable to tame and channel Xander.
Comments from author:
Xander hasn't only seen a small handful of things from the Coin - yes, Fate is not all bad, but so far, in the context of his friends, he's only /seen/ bad.

Why would Xander need to test its limits. The Jester told him the limits. He does have better things to do with his time.

It wouldn't even be by Utter Accident. The difference in power level between Xander and one of the Forces of Fate (such as the librarian) is like the difference in power level between an ant and a black hole.

Why? Because A: Xander's not you. He doesn't have the benefit of stepping outside his own story, as it were, to think about it like that. And B: Because that's not actually accurate. Fate doesn't write every prophecy. Fate takes advantage of existing circumstance to effect maximum change with minimal writing in people's books, to stick with an analogy that is not really that good. They aren't the only ones that do prophecy or whatever. There's all manner of other powers out there - the PTB, the various deific beings, etc - And Chaos doesn't stand for Free Will, except insofar as creating Chaos. Saying they enforce/allow free will is completely misunderstanding their role, insofar as they have a 'role'

Why would it be balanced? Why would Fate give Cordelia a coin? And moreover, if I wanted a balance, then I would have had there be a balance from the beginning.

There are not all inherently terrible ideas that you have, though they are in several cases not compatible with my unwritten headcanon about Fate, Chaos, etc (unwritten in that its not in the fic itself, and so I reserve the right to alter it around as I write the story), but they are definitely not ideas that fit with the particular story I want to tell.
Review By [KrisB] • Date [22 Oct 13] • Not Rated
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