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Review of chapter "Chapter 5" from Mcspender
Wow, things got really ugly in the "Aerial Strike" if Andorra had to use the self destruct to get at all the ghosts in the ship :S.
So Andorra had a vision of how things were in the Past, the question is, who opened the gates in her brain, so to speak: the PTB?.

Cool chapter, see ya!!!.

By the way, near the end of the chapter, you changed the name of the ship into Ariel Strike.
Comments from author:
Fixed it. Thanks!
Not quite self destruct. The outside of the ship stood still while the inside jumped into hyperspace. Think of it as a rapid flush system.
You know the thing about using enchanted molecules to create artificial genes? They just don't stay put. They have a mind of their own.
But hey, as long as you get points for the hunt.

Next chapter soon!
Review By [Mcspender] • Date [14 Oct 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from DarthTenebrus
Saw a fic on this site about Illyria at the end of the alley with Angel and Co. against the Senior Partners. In the fic Cthulhu appears and wipes out the dark armies of the Partners in a most disgusting manner, in one fell stroke. Then the Big Squid Head sees Illyria and just harrumphs, spins on his heel and walks off. She gets kinda honked off and says something along the lines of "some Old Ones just never change"; turns out Cthulhu was her boyfriend in the Great Long Ago...and cheated on her with Shub-Niggurath..

Sharing it here cuz I thought that was funny... :P
Comments from author:
Ha! : )
Review By [DarthTenebrus] • Date [14 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from DarthTenebrus
I agree with McSpender here, your origin tale is like nothing I had ever heard before. Also love the descriptive phrase at the end which you used for Andorra. "Haunter in the Dark" comes straight out of Lovecraft, does it not? Was it not used to describe Yog-Sothoth?

Would be interesting to find out that some of the Old Ones taken from Earth by the Engineers were in fact the Great Old Ones from the Mythos. Ah, here's an idea...

They were not removed all to a single dimension. Another exists that they would have made their way to, where Cthulhu now waits,dead but dreaming, until the stars come right....

Your thoughts?
Comments from author:
The hunt for Messiah will definitely have lovecraftian overtones.
So make the elder signs and sleep tight.
Review By [DarthTenebrus] • Date [14 Oct 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from Mcspender
Wow, very cool origin myth, congratulations =D!.
So the great old ones and the Engineers were basically conned out of the planet by the Wolf, the Ram and the Hart?.
Well, this prove what they say about cons: You can not con an honest person xD!.
Andorra and her ghost busters squads; let's see what surprises lay in the "Aerial Strike".
Cool chapter, see ya!!.
Comments from author:
Thanks pal!
The Wolf Ram and Hart have been pulling strings in the background for a long time. But at least they were brutally killed by a Predator. : )
The "Aerial Strike" is the biggest haunted house in the galaxy.
Let's see what kind of score Andorra can rack up without a planet killer by her side.

Next chapter soon!

Well they've finally gotten around to creating life with artificial genes. Looks like the Great Old Ones are on their way.
Review By [Mcspender] • Date [14 Oct 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from DarthTenebrus
Nice chap, bit short but good cliffhanger. Could fill it in with a couple of chaps for a slow build, this went just a little quick...unless you plan on devoting a separate chapter to each Great Old One and tying it all together...

Good effort , though, it does flow rather well...
Comments from author:
just moving the pawns into place.
Review By [DarthTenebrus] • Date [11 Oct 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from Mcspender
And in their quest of getting the straight facts, both the Fang crew and the Scoobies have lost the patience of hear a good story, full of symbolism and a cool set of metaphors. I really don't think they have novels by Gabriel Garcia Marquez in their book-stands :P.
And talking about getting facts, good thing Buffy could show the truth to Willow's parents.
Any chance to see an Andorra with her version of Morty's Armour vs Mesektet match?.
Cool chapter, see ya!!.
Comments from author:
Hey thanks, I didn't know I was so deep. : )
It's amazing how the mind works.
Now Andorra has her own hunt to perform. It just might be a little larger than Mesektet. But it would be cool to see how a Predator fares against a full out supernatural being. Oh wait, there's Buffy. I really would like to see how Iron Man fares against Mesektet.

Up next a little story I like to call "So how did the world get so f**ked up?"
Review By [Mcspender] • Date [11 Oct 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "chapter 2" from DarthTenebrus
Oh, how DARE they interrupt her confession! Dumbass Xenomorphs....

So Illyria just went straight for her, hmm? I hope this is a slow build to an epic situation; the Old Ones are nothing but epic in their scope and grandeur. Something like this needs at leasst thirty chapters before a shattering climax, with numerous side plots that tie well into each other.

The Aliens, the Yautja, Angel, Gunn, Wolfram and Hart, Los Angeles, Sunnydale....

Willow's memory, her parents, Giles, the Scoobies....

Illyria, the Great Old Ones....

the list goes on, but each one should have their own side plot in this epic tale of yours...

Hope that helped. *BUUUUURRRRRPPPPP* Oh, Escusem- me, Dunno howthesse Yautja make their beer, damn good.....
Comments from author:
We're just at the very beginning. Illyria's attack was just a faint breeze of the oncomming storm. More stuff to come and yes, it will be epic and cosmic.
Review By [DarthTenebrus] • Date [9 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter 2" from Mcspender
A lot of people are gonna go to the WR & H building for answers, and I think not all of those answers are gonna be very good. Ilirya once again is going through the old road, and I think Buffy will be very happy to beat her back through that old road again.
Cool chapter, see ya!!.
Comments from author:
The WR & H building is brand new and zombie free. They can always claim they were just lucky. Anyone looking the building at the moment of impact is dead.
Ilirya still thinks she's in charge. We'll see. : )
Review By [Mcspender] • Date [8 Oct 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 1" from Mcspender
So, the Smurf of Death is going after the bald tall guys?. Good luck, she's gonna need a looot of it!.
I think the Preds are gonna be very important in this, specially Andorra.
Cool chapter, see ya!!!.
Comments from author:
Hey, we all want to meet our creator. The problem here is that Illyria knows exactly who her creator is. These Engineers are not quite the same one's in Prometheus.
And I still want to know where I can get some of that Predator beer.

Next chapter soon!
Review By [Mcspender] • Date [7 Oct 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 1" from DarthTenebrus
Good start, already dreading the events to come. Bring on the Old Ones!

As for the Engineers, is this also a crossover with "Prometheus"?


No, I couldn't possibly claim telepathy as one of my talents, but thanks for the compliment bro...

And yes, I think I have read "At the Mountains of Madness", or at least I've read "The Call of Cthulu". Yeah, I think I know which Old Ones you're talking about here. Reminds me of a funny thing I saw, it was a shirt that read "Cthulu for President -- the Stars Will Come Right.." had a funny looking version of Cthulu with the squid head and flimsy stubby wings standing behind a podium...thought that was cool
Comments from author:
Are you a telepath? You are correct. This story is heavy influenced by "Prometheus". The Old Ones are a mystery. Since they are "not of nature" where did they come from? What existed before the Old Ones? More importantly, why didn't they, after living for millions of years, just build space ships and leave the Earth? It all comes back to Messiah.

Go back and read "At the mountains of Madness" by H.P. Lovecraft. You'll see what I mean.

Next chapter soon!
Review By [DarthTenebrus] • Date [7 Oct 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 1" from eriktheviking
A well written and intriguing set-up for future conflict. And Andorra is quite amusing as the younger, higher ranking, sister.

Two typos I picked up:

The old queen took her last breath and died. Illyria was relived. (relieved?)

“Now my rein (reign) can start.” Illyria thought.

Looking forward to more, thanks.
Comments from author:
Got it. Thanks!
Now where can I get some of that Predator beer?
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [7 Oct 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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