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Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from SmacksKiller
Review:
I'll be honest: when I first saw the title, I feared it would just be some lame copy of Spark of Genius by Michealsuave but I can happily say I was wrong. You went for a much darker approach and I can't wait to see how you'll continue this.
Great Job!
Review By [SmacksKiller] • Date [28 Jan 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Zaxxon
Review:
So Xander became a Heterodyne, and Janus banished him to "this" other universe.... which I don't recognize. The only "Stone" I know of in the DC Comics Universe, is Victor Stone, aka Cyborg.

Admittedly, I'm not up-to-date on my comics, but my google search didn't yield any results either.

Besides, this doesn't seem to be in keeping with the DC style, more the Image/Wildstorm style. But I'm not aware how/if the two got put together.
Review By [Zaxxon] • Date [6 Jan 13] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from sajuuk
Review:
please
write more of this good story
make us like to read more of this story
by
Review By [sajuuk] • Date [18 Dec 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Bluesnowman
Review:
I Completely love it.
Comments from author:
Thank you, I'm glad. I have a new story posted, hope you like it.
Review By [Bluesnowman] • Date [7 Dec 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Michaelsuave
Review:
Great story thus far, I look forward to his total domination of his enemies. Have you thought about him using the power of his voice to dominate the guards and the director?
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review and yes, I have thought about using the voice on the guards but I don't know if I will.
Sorry for taking so long to comment your review. I've been working on a new story. If you read it please let me know what you think.
Review By [Michaelsuave] • Date [16 Nov 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from OdinMage
Review:
Another awesome chapter, I like where this is going, and I'm kind of hoping for something with a Xander a bit darker than he is in "A Spark of Genius". I really hope you update soon!
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review. I have a new story up if you want to check it out.
Review By [OdinMage] • Date [11 Nov 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from thsunami
Review:
okay now i am really am getting interested, lets see where it goes.
Comments from author:
Thanks for reviewing, I'm glad you like it.
Review By [thsunami] • Date [11 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from juansiete
Review:
interesting, keep writing
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review.
Review By [juansiete] • Date [3 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from prehensileclaw
Review:
Definitely getting better. Thanks for continuing this.
Comments from author:
You are welcome. Thanks for the review.
Review By [prehensileclaw] • Date [3 Nov 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Jiopaba
Review:
It's alright...

It feels weird at this point though. Like there's some large chunk of material missing at some point. Xander thinks about "the first time he was hit with the stun collar" and refers to his first night here... but we established in the same chapter that his first night there was last night and he wasn't conscious for it. He was just unstrapped from the bed minutes ago, but he's already getting used to having a stun collar used on him?

Where did the stun collar come from? When was it introduced at all? And when did Xander find out he was the son of Agatha and Gilgamesh? I...

It just came out of absolutely nowhere. Twelve hours after he lands in a new world he wakes up, having been abducted, sedated, and tied down by some spooky government organization run by assholes. Two hours after that he's talking about accepting that this isn't a dream and he's really this other guy, and he's going to conquer the world.

Seriously, what the hell is going on? Was there like two full chapters of material in between a couple paragraphs that just got deleted? I've been reading the other comments and I don't understand how noone else seems confused by this.
Comments from author:
Lot's of questions and some confusion. Let's see if I can clear things up for you.

Xander has been in that facility for about two days. He spent the first day drugged out of his mind while they ran several tests trying to identify him and the nature of his meta gene. They failed to identify him for an obvious reason, he is from a parallel Earth. They failed to identify his meta gene because he doesn't have one. They have never seen a Spark before, so they don't know what to look for. That first day ended with Director Stone, late at night, trying to get answers the old fashioned way but Xander wasn't feeling up for it.

That night was the first time Stone used the stun collar on Xander. He was knocked out for hours, waking up the next morning.

Where did the stun collar come from? Stone put it around Xander's neck, of course. When Xander noticed the straps around his wrists and ankles he also noticed something constricting his neck.

Why didn't I say it was a stun collar? Because I was writing from Xander's p.o.v. and he didn't know it was a stun collar until it was activated.

How did Xander develop a resistance to the stun collar so fast? For generations, the Heterodynes have done all they could to increase their power. That includes genetic 'improvements'. He's not a metahuman but he's not exactly a normal human either.

When did Xander find out he was the 'son' of Agatha and Gilgamesh? He didn't suddenly find out. He knew who and what he was since the moment he woke up. Xander knew that whatever happened to him had changed him mind, body and soul. But he was in denial. We're talking -Sunnydale-gangs-on-PCP- level of denial. He wanted to believe his life was going back to normal. He wanted to believe he was still Xander Harris. Unfortunately denial is a luxury he doesn't have at the moment so it was time to man up.

As for conquering the world, I have no idea where you got that from. Seriously, what?

Why didn't I just spell this out in mind numbing detail instead of implying it? It's called subtext. It's the difference between telling a story and describing a series of events.

I suggest going back and reading the story more carefully while keeping in mind that so far it's just two chapters, not the whole story.

I hope that answers your questions.
Review By [Jiopaba] • Date [3 Nov 12] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Kaosreign
Review:
okay i definitely like your set up better than the other story, and i assume the metas are none other than the Royal flush gang? If they are, Nice move on your part. I will maintain a cautios outlook still with your story but i have found nothing that tells me you are ouit to mimic the other author work...again good luck to you.
Comments from author:
Thank you and you assume correctly.
Review By [Kaosreign] • Date [2 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from RafMereC
Review:
Very interesting.

Got my vote.

Raf

LOL!

Thanks for the compliment

And I was so looking forward to another chapter.

I hope you like what you read.

Lots of rough stuff I'm afraid when you write too fast and post often.

Enjoy it. I'll wait.

It's worth it so far.

Raf
Comments from author:
Thanks. I appreciate it.

P.S. : Just found your stories. If I'm late with the next chapter, you know who to blame.
Review By [RafMereC] • Date [2 Nov 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Chikageko
Review:
Ok, I'll bite.

Out of curiosity, what universe did you throw him into? Or is that set to be revealed later?
Comments from author:
Later. Xander doesn't really know, so neither do you.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [Chikageko] • Date [2 Nov 12] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Selias
Review:
I have to admit, I thought that this was just a rip-off of A Spark of Genius at first, but I like the way this is going so far. Seems more serious.
Comments from author:
Well, I'm glad I could disappoint you.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [Selias] • Date [2 Nov 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from IAMZIPPY
Review:
Interesting setup cant wait for more
Comments from author:
Neither can I. Thanks for the review.
Review By [IAMZIPPY] • Date [2 Nov 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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