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Review of chapter "Becoming, part III" from DieselDriver
It boggles my mind that you can keep 3 wonderful stories going all the time and makes me wonder if this applies to you:

“Heinlein's Rules for Writers

Rule One: You Must Write
Rule Two: Finish What Your Start
Rule Three: You Must Refrain From Rewriting, Except to Editorial Order
Rule Four: You Must Put Your Story on the Market
Rule Five: You Must Keep it on the Market until it has Sold”
― Robert A. Heinlein

I'm really glad you keep the 2nd rule so well. I plead ignorance on the others although I suspect #1 is a "moral imperative" for you.
Comments from author:
I break Rule 3 on occasion, like when I find out I have a technical error or I have messed up a subplot.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [24 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Becoming, part III" from Riniko
Really wondering why they are waiting to cast the spell now that they have the orb. Must be a mad desire to give the demons a chance to stop them again. Though I have to think just dusting them would have been so much easier. And Buffy's crazy attachment to keeping a killer around is sickening, never seems to brother her how many times he kills someone when she lets him go.
Comments from author:
The problem is that casting the spell is massively complex. People tend to remember only the little thing with Willow in the hospital bed, but go look at the first time they tried the spell. It's a lot more than playing with a cool paperweight. :D
Review By [Riniko] • Date [24 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Becoming, part II" from DieselDriver
Well, that saved them an enormous amount of trouble.

Oh you evil author:

"Comments from author:
Thanks. I'm staying on schedule, since the whole short story is finished."

Absolutely evil incarnate to make us wait like that. (no, I didn't just read about Tetsu).
Comments from author:
Well, I meant the Jack-and-Daniel-and-Hermione-in-the-Buffyverse story. I'm still writing chapters of 'Xendra'.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [12 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Becoming, part II" from SirLee
I always thought that "I can't do CPR, I don't breath" idea stupid. I mean, he _speaks_, doesn't he? That means he is moving air in and out through his vocal cords. If he is not actually extracting oxygen from it, that would make him even _better_ at CPR than a regular human.

Better excuses would be something mystical like "She's technically dead, I don't want to risk turning her into a vampire. What if saliva is enough?" or perhaps even "Vampire strength is dangerous. I could break her sternum and blow up her lungs." But the best one would be "I never learned CPR. We didn't have it in health class three hundred years ago, because it hadn't been invented yet, and after I became a vampire, well, it didn't seem like something I might need."
Comments from author:
He speaks. He can smoke cigarettes. But sometimes Joss goes with Rule of Cool / Rule of Funny / Rule of Drama just because.

And don't forget: At the end of "Becoming" Spike knocks out Dru by... putting her in a chokehold. How is that supposed to work? But it looked great.
Review By [SirLee] • Date [12 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Becoming, part II" from fredthebadger
I read the bit about the dying breath of a repentant sinner, and I was reminded of some fanon that was thought up to explain why Angel didn't use CPR on Buffy when she died the first time.

The idea was that Vampires only have one breath, their dying breath. When they breath out it leaves, but when they breath in it comes back. Supposedly it was used to suffocate some people or something like that.
Comments from author:
Fanon! The breakfast of champions! :D I remember that too, but I don't recall who came up with it.
Review By [fredthebadger] • Date [11 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Becoming, part II" from draconis
Glad they don't have to go through finding the "evil" sinner they thought they had to find, as they were reading it wrong.

Christian (Anti-vampiness Incorporated) theology stipulates that ALL humans are sinners. Every ... damn day (see? Sinning is easy!) Looking at the spell requirement "The dying breath of a truly repentant sinner.", it simply means anyone most likely of the Christian faith, who is dying, and truly repents their sins (I assume repenting in the Christian meaning of the word), would suffice. The sins don't have to be "terrible" sins from a really bad person...the wording literally means ANY sin would do as long as the sinner is truly repentant. I would think the most likely place they could easily find such a person would be any Catholic-sponsored hospital or rest home.
Comments from author:
Well thought out. I like that line of reasoning.

But if that's all it takes in the Buffyverse, then why aren't there *scads* of the things? You could (in theory) get every priest or nun on earth to make one. Plus, phouka dreamed it up, and so should get the rights to say just who is or is not truly repenting and also enough of a sinner.
Review By [draconis] • Date [10 Mar 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Becoming, part II" from (Recent Donor)JanessaRavenwood
Well, I suppose you shouldn't argue if luck actually appears to be on your side (for once). Though I do hope Joyce is insured against theft. That said, if she has video surveillance of her store, they're in trouble; any insurance investigator will certainly review it, even if she doesn't.

Possible simple solution - ask how much she wants for it?
Comments from author:
Yeah, given that Jenny was prepared to pay a ridiculous amount to the guy in the magic shop, she probably can afford a few bucks for a paperweight no one wants.
Review By [(Recent Donor)JanessaRavenwood] • Date [10 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Becoming, part II" from lunalurker
Oh my. I didn't know either of them was the french maid outfit type. o.0
You just never know some people.
The experiment continues to amuse. Thanks for writing. :)
Comments from author:
You can just never know what Giles is likely to get up to when he drops the 'stuffy' act. :D
Review By [lunalurker] • Date [10 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Becoming, part I" from SilverWave
Cheer :-)
Comments from author:
Hey, thanks for reading!
Review By [SilverWave] • Date [9 Mar 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Becoming, part I" from hamishog
Poor Oz, we hardly knew ye. But his going out was very well written, as was Angelus' meeting with the not-a-chakram. I love that name. And I love the fact that you've managed to tilt the balance without Xander becoming Superman, or Woman, or whatever. And I'm a big fan of the Xander/Willow pairing. Always have. I've added yours to the 2 or 3 fics I'm following. I'm enjoying it so far.
Comments from author:
Thanks! I update this story every other Monday.

And Oz was Joss Whedon's original intended 'important' death for season 2, but the Oz/Willow pairing was so popular he decided to kill Jenny instead. Then he went and got rid of Oz anyway, two seasons later.
Review By [hamishog] • Date [5 Mar 14] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Becoming, part I" from CageFire
Another nice chapter, keep up the good work. :)
Comments from author:
Thanks. I'm staying on schedule, since the whole short story is finished.
Review By [CageFire] • Date [3 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Becoming, part I" from SirLee
Senko has already sorta-pointed it, but...

Buffy was not really that far off the mark, y'know. Another meaning of "obelisk" is... the little cross or dagger-shaped mark used to link to a footnote when you have already used an asterisk. Also, Asterix and Obelix were named after the typographical asterisk and the obelisk respectively. (I cut my reading teeth on Carl Barks duck comics and Asterix. I understand Asterix never hit it big on the U.S., but I hear good things about the British translations). Wikipedia even tells me that "obelisk" is derived from "obelus," which means "roasting spit" (which the typograpic mark resembles).

I haven't seen the original episode, but I was a bit thrown by the mention of "opening" the obelisk. I mean, those are usually solid rock (except for the very large ones, such as the Washington Monument).
Comments from author:
Yeah, it's not so much an obelisk as an obelisk-shaped tomb for a petrified demon. Acathla has been turned to stone thanks to a blessed sword thrust into his chest. The worthy being can (in theory) remove the sword, revive Acathla, and cause the world to be sucked into a hell dimension.

This leads to one of my favorite moments of "Becoming" where Angelus does the rites and tries to awaken Acathla. Nothing happens. Spike, in a really annoying sing-song voice chants, "Someone isn't worthy, someone isn't worthy!"
Review By [SirLee] • Date [25 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Becoming, part I" from Amberdrake
"Spike threw the rolled-up newspaper and caught Angelus right in the hairgel. GOOOOOAALL! “Page seventeen. Rare find being examined in Sunnydale museum. Duh.”"

LMAO!! I think I'm on your works as I've also finally gotten around to the Whatley-verse.

Imagine what the show would have been like if Spike had been the Vampire With A Soul(tm) and Angelus showed up with Dru. Because I'm pretty sure the combination of Spike, Xander , and Cordelia would create a perfect storm of snark that would have driven Captain Hairgel bonkers.

Response response: Well Evil Spike is way cooler than Not-so-evil Spike. But the trade off is no Xander-Spike team-up to take on the Broodmeister. And when that ep of Angel ran I had both the East and West Coast feeds off the dish so I got to watch it twice. :) That was television gold.
Comments from author:
I loved Spike so much more as a villain. My fave is still his first appearance on 'Angel' when he stands on a rooftop making fun of Angel's rescue of a girl. That was so funny I could hardly breathe.
Review By [Amberdrake] • Date [25 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Becoming, part I" from DieselDriver
I'm going to have to read this over intro to end, when it's done. You're doing 3 projects that I know of, there's a couple of others that are nearly as good as you are that I follow and one I'm reading over because it's so good that I actually thought you wrote it till I checked. Unfortunately I don't think he's ever going to finish it. Bummer. I like the Alex stuff best then cross something?... Updates on this are far enough apart that I lose track. You must know I have a very poor memory by now... Probably alzheimer's since my dad has it too. If so, I can look forward to reading a lot of old books again for the first time in my future. Bleh.
Comments from author:
If everyone had a memory like me... well, the world would be a very, very strange place. And I wouldn't win at Trivial Pursuit. :D

What you said about Alzheimer's reminds me. Years ago, there was an article in "The Journal of Irreproducible Results" on the inheritance pattern of death. They concluded it was autosomal recessive. :D And if your family has a history of death, you have a 1-in-4 chance of communicating the trait to your kids. So pick a spouse who doesn't have a history of death in his/her family, and most importantly, don't pick a spouse who has already expressed the gene. (Buffy would benefit from this advice, don't you think?)
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [25 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Becoming, part I" from (Recent Donor)JanessaRavenwood
Well, darn. I guess the Scoobies got a bit more lead time on this one than in canon, at least.

EDIT: Yes, but the remaining 3 members of the Scourge of Europe are out of town, aren't they? The time for them to drive back must give the Scoobies at least another day before they're back on the scene.
Comments from author:
Actually, they didn't. This is the same amount of leadtime they got in canon, and for the same reason: Giles was consulted by the museum.

How is a museum curator not noticing that the top expert for a thousand miles is a high school librarian? That makes a sense that is... not.
Review By [(Recent Donor)JanessaRavenwood] • Date [24 Feb 14] • Not Rated
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