Review of chapter "Bad Eggs, part III" from Zorgdub
Review:
Ah! Once again continuously hitting "refresh" pays off!
"Apocalypsers" hehe, I like Xander neologisms. Buffy's Rosenmom is also a nice one. Xander's wiggins-meter is pretty good. Things usually go "bump" in the night, I like seeing that they can go "grr" too. Reminds me of the Mutant Enemey sort-of-jingle. I watch the entire ending credit just to listen to that. A bezoar is a sort of stone that comes from a digestive system (I think it's relatively common with goats). On the other hand a *mother* bezoard sounds less mundane.
Comments from author:
Sometimes the neologisms flow, and sometimes they refuse to emerge. So it's hit-or-miss. But I decided to stick with the terminology from the canon episode, and the mother monster is called a 'bezoar' even though everyone now knows (thanks to Harry Potter) that it's a concretion that forms in GI tracts, usually of ruminants, although even people can get them (usually from chewing on hair or fuzzy stuff or inedible stuff that shreds), and was once believed to be a magical antidote for poisons. Instead, I decided to use the word 'bezoar' as a Chekov's Gun to be fired off in a couple chapters.
Review By [Zorgdub] • Date [22 Apr 13] • Not Rated
I think you put slightly too much effort into naming all the eggs. Funny though.
Comments from author:
I put too much effort into everything that's useless. :-) :-) I'm obsessive-compulsive. It should be pretty obvious from the level of detail that shows up in everything I write. (It's most blatant in my Phase stories.)
Willow is sure taking that egg seriously! And it seems like Xander had a slayer type prophetic dream! Very disturbing. And I'm afraid that he is correct. Babies do end up making their parents very tired. Eggs however, usually do not...
Comments from author:
Willow is going a little overboard with her egg. And Xander's dream sure seemed meaningful if you've watched the episode. As for making mommies and daddies tired, eggs full of creepy tentacle-y baby bezoar sure do. :-)
Review By [Gideon] • Date [8 Apr 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Bad Eggs, part II" from Zorgdub
Review:
Doing it with Willow is *really* changing the way Xander is living through that egg thing. That means that the story is not following the episode anywhere near as closely as it did for the previous ones, and this is an appreciated change of pace.
Comments from author:
We're far enough into the story that I won't be covering the episodes that unfold exactly as in canon, unless there's important Xander storyline that wasn't covered in the original episode.
Review By [Zorgdub] • Date [8 Apr 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Egg-zactly. If you re-watch the episode, you'll see that even that first night, the baby bezoars are getting at least a few tentacles out of the eggs and doing something bad to the 'moms', then re-sealing themselves in the eggs.
Review of chapter "Bad Eggs, part II" from VillageOrchid
Review:
Good chapter.
Comments from author:
Thanks. It's just expository, and the reader knows far more about what is going on that Xander does.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [8 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Bad Eggs, part II" from HMaxMarius
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There isn't a thing wrong with Turkey sausage! (Turkey Bacon and Turkey Pepperoni on the other hand just don't come out right.) But if you want something tasty, try Ostrich Sausage!
Oh well, at least you passed on having Xander do a Mr. Burns... =D
Comments from author:
Oh, don't expect Xander to pass up the opportunity to do bad pop-culture puns and jokes. This is the guy who said: "Does anyone feel like they've been Keyser Soze'd?" and "We're gonna need a bigger boat."
Review By [HMaxMarius] • Date [8 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Yeah when your principal penalises you for breathing you know you have a problem!
Comments from author:
Snyder has to hate Xander more than anyone else in the whole city right now. Of course, that's not good for Xander, but it might make things a little easier for Buffy.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [25 Mar 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Bad Eggs, part I" from VillageOrchid
Review:
Good insights. Also a Xander who actually wants Willow is an interesting twist to his Xena memories. I like how you still have him being mostly Xander.
Comments from author:
He's basically 95% Xander, just with some freaky memories added onto his own.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [25 Mar 13] • Not Rated
Glad that you skipped Ted if it went mostly as canon. Brief summary was perfect.
Comments from author:
I plan on doing that pretty regularly. Only episodes which advance *my* plot need to be delved into. That's why I only touched on Ford's visit after Halloween.