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Review of chapter "A Summer Interlude, part X" from (Current Donor)Starfox
Good chapter. I like Xendra's meandering thoughts, and Joyce fighting through her rationality-induced delusion. Well done! And I loved Xendra's side-project of teaching Willow so she can "innocently" get closer to her.
Comments from author:
Yeah, teenage boys think about side projects like that a *lot*. :D
Review By [(Current Donor)Starfox] • Date [22 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A Summer Interlude, part IX" from lastjuan
>>That's not the only anachronism in there! If you find the other two, I'll award you a No-Prize! (Marvel Comics doesn't seem to be handing them out anymore, so I'll just swipe a couple of theirs. :D )

So far, I had found:

-Chapter 21: "Terrorists would be selling out al Qaeda right and left, just to get care packages of cookies from Joyce." Although the organization probably existed in 1998, it's doubtful (at least to me) that a teenager would have heard from them.

-Chapter 37: “Hmm, Chalkboard Tourette’s Syndrome. Sounds like a job for House M.D.” House was premiered in 2004: .

-Chapter 48: “Right. Xendra Giles, granddaughter of the current Baron Haightwood, is totally not going to start with the dialogue right out of ‘The O.C.’ or anything.” The O.C. was premiered in 2003: .

-Chapter 50: "Xendra put in, “We are talking a group of men who consider William Shakespeare to be a little too hipster." *hipster* sounds too much actual for 1998, don't you think so?

How many are real?
Comments from author:
Whoops. When I wrote that, I was talking about 'The League of Extraordinary Women' having continuity issues with 'The Secret Return of Alex Mack'. So the issue is things I wrote in tLoEW that don't mesh with what is in tSRoAM.

I've put tons of anachronisms in 'Xendra' just so I could make smart-alecky comments. Ditto for other stories where I wanted more humor.
Review By [lastjuan] • Date [16 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A Summer Interlude, part VI" from RedCalypso
Isn't Giles playing with fire passing Xander off as his niece? All it would take is for one of the Council members to call the real Xendra's parents and congratulate them on having such a resourceful daughter for what she's accomplished on the Hellmouth and the whole thing would blow up.
Comments from author:
Giles does have a niece named Xendra. All the Council has to do is notice that she's still in England. Unless Giles has called his brother and explained he has a Potential working with his Slayer and it is under this ruse, so they just need to play along if anyone asks. Or unless...
Review By [RedCalypso] • Date [16 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A Summer Interlude, part IX" from Dragan
Merchant Ivory...there goes Nepherandus's dimensional doppelganger. ;)

Edit: Heheh Yeeaup!
Comments from author:
When I steal, I steal the good stuff. That's a Bek line.
Review By [Dragan] • Date [9 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A Summer Interlude, part IX" from DieselDriver
Wahahahaha... Theory of Gravity. LOL. They don't have a clue how it works. They see it, they've got a couple of fairly good ideas how to work with it, but the biggie, "how does it work?" (emulates Homer Simpson) "Doh, everyone knows that gravity sucks."

As for a magic spell, to change Xendra back to Xander working perfectly... Xander/Xendra and Magic? Working perfectly?

What could possibly go wrong? I mean, How hard could it be? This ought to be easy. It's a piece of Cake. Hey, Watch me do this!

(Homer again... "Doh")

Edit after reading Draconis' review: Wouldn't an appropriate name for a group of vampires be a "Fang"? as in "A Fang of Vampires"?

And another edit after reading DCarson's review: The idea of a trip wire is ok, but how about implanting a bomb with a radio transmitter (powered by movement like the old self winding watches) and detonating it when the fledge is amongst more vamps? Or just a transmitter and a listening device to get forewarned of any plans, plus a bottle of holy water and a plunger of some sort to break the bottle if need be.

Edit after your reply. Ok, a clot of Vampires is good. I like it. How about a bunch of "clots" being a "hemo" as in a dozen eggs being a dozen (oh yeah that's not circular) and a dozen dozen being a gross, a dozen Vamps is a Clot and a dozen Clots is a Hemo. Above and beyond that a dozen Hemos could be a Fistula.
Comments from author:
I still think a 'sparkle' of vampires is excellent for the Buffyverse. Imagine telling Spike to his face to 'get out of here and take your whole sparkle of vamps with you'. He'd be furious.

Oh wait, Vampire!Harmony would love the idea of a sparkle of vamps. Okay, a group of vamps is a 'clot'. :D
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [9 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A Summer Interlude, part IX" from DavidEmpey
Yeah, like Harmne I was saddened by Oz's death, although I liked his final gesture of drinking the holy water so he wouldn't rise. (Or am I remembering some other story?)

Xendra is excellent! I like the use of sensible tactics against the vamps. I guess you have to do that when you aren't a Slayer. [Although I think Xendra is arguably actually stronger than Buffy was in S1.] Just don't repeat yourself, Xen!

I'm not sure whether I hope the gender-change-back spell works or not. Xendra is certainly a much better combatant that Xander would ever likely be. And of course it's problems that make a story interesting. But still; poor Xander. No fun at all being the wrong sex. Maybe they can work something out where he could be Xander most of the time but change to Xendra in emergencies.

I'm looking forward to the return of Buffy, especially if Xendra has to stay femaie. Buffy coming unexpectedly face-to-face with Xendra should be hilarious.

Anyhow, keep calm and carry on!
Comments from author:
Yep, if you are a Slayer possessed of terrifying speed and strength and regeneration, sensible tactics are a waste of time and ruin your night, because you still have that Slayer urge you need to work off. If you are not a Slayer, you are massively out of your league against even a fledgling.
Review By [DavidEmpey] • Date [9 Sep 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "A Summer Interlude, part IX" from Harmne
I love when I get updates for this story! It's one of the very best YAHFs out there and it makes me laugh out loud occasionally. It's all just to totally Xander's luck - especially inconveniently changing back into a teen-version of Xena in the boy's locker room shower! OMG! Being assaulted by Angelus was bizarre and horrifying (and I'm a little surprised there wasn't more in there about Xander coping or pretending it wasn't him or something). I *LOVE* when Xander gets to channel both Giles and Cordelia and do his bitchy British chick impression! So far the only thing I haven't really loved was Oz getting killed off. I liked Oz; I kind of still miss Oz... I can't wait for more, though! This is really a cool and interesting 're-imagining' of what could have happened! Looking forward to the next update!
Comments from author:
Thanks. I update every other Monday at noon my time, if you want to mark in your Daytimer. :D

I appreciate the review. I also like recommendations, if you feel like it.

As for Oz, did you know he was scheduled for a brutal demise? Joss Whedon was originally going to kill off Oz, but the fans liked the Oz/Willow relationship so much he decided to keep Oz and kill off someone else instead. Hence the brutal death of Jenny Calendar.
Review By [Harmne] • Date [8 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A Summer Interlude, part IX" from grd
I love intelligent vamp hunters. The prestake method was priceless, heck heart removal would work too. The Scoobies in this tale rock!
Comments from author:
I've done heart removal in a different story. But Slayers would rather Slay than sit around.
Review By [grd] • Date [8 Sep 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "A Summer Interlude, part IX" from VillageOrchid
There have been so many plot changes that as reader I can't be sure where you are going with this. But we know the characters and some of the potential big bads on the horizon. I'm glad that Xander gets to have an opportunity to not be the him that he hates and become a person that he admires or idealizes, regardless if the gender change is permanent.
Comments from author:
If you were sure where I was going with this, I would be scratching my head. :D
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [8 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A Summer Interlude, part IX" from (Current Donor)Starfox
Good chapter. Nice touch with Willow's POV using female pronouns for Xendra and the general POV male ones. Good action scene, and a funny infiltration for a great plan. Cordy's snark is also fitting in well.
Comments from author:
Thanks. But don't assume they are off the hook yet.
Review By [(Current Donor)Starfox] • Date [8 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A Summer Interlude, part IX" from raxadian
Maybe is just because they are big and easy to get?
Comments from author:
Right. You need space for your minions. You need to be able to come and go, and not run into any inconvenient wards from people moving in. If only you could find a deserted furniture warehouse so you've got the beds and such...
Review By [raxadian] • Date [8 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A Summer Interlude, part IX" from Vianca
Ted and the book demon their robot bodies.
Early power armor.
Knight Sabers from Bubblegum Crisis, but who would be the fourth female member?
Why those suits?
The power packs on the back, can you think of another design were you can fit that book demon it's powerplant???

Don't know were you're going with the story (yet), so I can only wait till the next chapters.
But I lover the butterflies, keep them coming.

I would suggest that they check the modern (sport) weapons, like bows & crossbows.
There might be something that they could use, in there.
Certain crossbows have a bolt magazine, in order to hold a couple of bolts in it and feed them into the firing system.
Meaning rapid fire of four or five bolts.

Blow-darts combined with a air-gun/air-rifle might also be interesting to look into.
Comments from author:
There are lots of modern weapons that no one seems to think about. This could turn out to be important.
Review By [Vianca] • Date [8 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A Summer Interlude, part IX" from ChefJackButler
Nicely moving along, though I have lost track on exactly where the Xander-Willow relationship is. It seems to have seriously cooled and turned away from the "they love each other" aspect into "well, they like each other, but..." aspect. Hmmm...

As for the transformation itself, Xander seems to have got over the shock of sudden femininity pretty quickly. Mostly he seems concerned with the externals and the peripherals.
Comments from author:
Well, he's still Xander. Just with a few benefits (like improved strength and speed and swordsmanship, and not having to be at home) and nuisances (like Willow is freaked over the Xendra thing- and PMS).
Review By [ChefJackButler] • Date [8 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A Summer Interlude, part IX" from hamishog
For one thing - deserted warehouses are deserted. That means no security. And because they are, or were, businesses vampires don't need permission to enter. Not to mention that most of them have offices and it's probably much easier to steal power and cable unobtrusively in a business district than a residential one.
The hit by the way was perfect as was the preliminary. By eliminating as many variables as possible you give yourself greater control over a situation. Very dynamic. Very Art of War.
And can I say that I find Xander (whatever his gender) and Willow to be an adorable couple.
Comments from author:
And 'deserted warehouses' in Sunnydale come with special accessories, like convenient access to underground tunnels, a handy Hellmouth for faster and easier fledgling manufacture, and Willy's Alibi Room!
Review By [hamishog] • Date [8 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A Summer Interlude, part VIII" from bookalicious
I was reluctant to read this, since most of the 'gender-bended Xander' stories I've read are kind of crap. Either they don't deal well with the 'suddenly a girl' aspect or the 'what happened to Xander' aspect. You've redeemed the genre. Thanks a lot. You deserve a virtual fudge cake.
Comments from author:
Mmm... fudge cake... Thanks! I understand your reluctance, because not every YAHF is a good story. A couple are *excellent* and some are okay. But some are not. On the other hand, Super!Xander can make for an amusing one-shot or a wacky concept.
Review By [bookalicious] • Date [8 Sep 14] • Not Rated
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