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Review of chapter "Chapter Three." from kalibex
Review:
Sennsing just a leeeetle bit of foreshadowing, here...
Comments from author:
Foreshadowing? Me? No never...

MAW-HA-HA!

Cheers,
D.
Review By [kalibex] • Date [13 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three." from AllenPitt
Review:
I'm not sure there's any case against Buffy/Faith. The mayor himself at the time said they wouldn't pursue it due to lack of evidence. And if HE wasn't willing to push it...there definitely was no evidence. Even in the show, Faith only went up for it due to making a 'full confession' presumably on that one too. Other than that...back in Sunnydale, sure, the Council tried to abduct, Sunnydale PD wanted to 'question', but honestly they had nothing on her at all.
The real problem would be showing Buffy & Faith knew each other back then. Crap. If Munch ever sees a picture of Buffy & mentions it to Faith, that could cause problems. Willow is happy, which means things are going to go wrong. She's built a great life, but it's built on lies. That isn't really healthy......
Meanwhile, Death Wish-ness by a slayer. That's going to be interesting.
Comments from author:
Buffy and Faith teenage tearaways will come back to haunt them!

Cheers,
D.
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [13 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two." from djhardim
Review:
Here's a link to the sequel to _Death Wish_ - _Death Sentence_.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Death_Sentence_(novel)

In 2007, a film based on the novel (though a completely different storyline) was made, starring Kevin Bacon and directed by James Wan.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Death_Sentence_(2007_film)
Comments from author:
Cheers,
D.
Review By [djhardim] • Date [13 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two." from PATM
Review:
A little more serious than your previous stories in this series. Having already finished this story it galls me to point out that an elderly man would more likely to be attacked on his way out of a check cashing store, during daylight hours. Also, if she can't kill humans per protocols stripping them of clothing vital to saving face and give them such a pinch! I'm not guessing how this is going but a previous military connection adds some evil demon buildup.
Comments from author:
Serious yes.

The night time mugging, well that's mainly to fit in with the plot...after all a slayer is more likely to be wondering the streets at night than during the day.

The other stuff...we'll have to wait and see.

Cheers,
D.
Review By [PATM] • Date [12 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two." from Rich
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I like this so far. It's interesting to see Kennedy working in her natural habitat; she seems much less annoying here (of course, she's also older).

Coincidentally, I once commented about the "Deathwish" series on a different forum. The first Deathwish film closely follows the original book, except for renaming the character from Benjamin to Kersey. After, the first book, the filmmakers and the author (Brian Garfield) went in different directions.

Garfield wrote a sequel in which the hero resumes his vigilante activities in Chicago, only to find that he's inspired a copycat. Benjamin/Kersey is a very moral man, and scrupulous about avoiding any chance of "collateral damage"; the copycat isn't. Eventually, civilians start getting caught in the crossfire; the hunter is actually doing more harm than the criminals he hunts. In the end the hero has hunt down the imitator that he himself inspired.

I'd agree that Zoe has a right to justice, but the precedent she sets might effect others besides herself. Your point about vengeance being a slippery slope is well taken.
Comments from author:
Y'know I never knew DW was a book, maybe I'll try and find it...its probably on Amazon somewhere.

I remember watching the sequel to Death Wish but it wasn't a patch on the first film, I don't actually remember much about it so it can't have caught my imagination.

Glad you're enjoying the fic,
D.
Review By [Rich] • Date [12 Dec 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two." from djhardim
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Another theory, a person in a neighborhood at a higher elevation was trying out his new gun in his own backyard. He missed the target. The bullet struck Tara, killing her.

Edit: When the person discovered what he had done, he sold his house and got out of Sunnydale. He eventually settled down in Las Vegas and later committed a crime. A ballistics match to the gun tied him to the Sunnydale murder. Willow finds out.

Possible CSI crossover.
Comments from author:
Could be, but this explanation doesn't have to may xover opportunities!

Cheers,
D.
Review By [djhardim] • Date [12 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two." from Greywizard
Review:
I'm liking this more with each chapter! :-)

I also agree with the other reviewers who are saying that there's absolutely nothing wrong with taking out the perps responsible for these crimes. For Buffy or Willow to try to insist otherwise makes them two-faced hypocrites, since at that time Buffy was trying to kill Faith simply to save her boyfriend, who wasn't even human.

Blood calls to blood; blood calls for blood. It's just that simple.

Or to put it in New Testament terms, 'Do unto others as you would have done unto you.'
Comments from author:
Thanks.

There was also something about; an eye for an eye, a tooth for a tooth, which I think was supposed to limit vengeance.

Vengeance is a slippery slope, what was the name of that film with the guy with the base ball bat, Falling Down? That started out as sort of vengeance but quickly turned into something else.

Cheers,
D.
Review By [Greywizard] • Date [11 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two." from Gideon
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A sad situation for a young girl to find herself in :( At least she has some friends that will help her, no matter what it takes. Hopefully she can keep them in mind.

I was a bit confused by the first paragraph or two though. It sounds like Zoe paid someone to kill her family!
"
“How are you supposed to feel when you’ve had your family raped and murdered,” Zoe shot back.

The anger and pain in the girl’s voice made Olivia pause for a moment, Zoe Kersey was hurting that was for sure, who wouldn’t be in her situation? But there was something else there, something that made Olivia feel uneasy; she’d seen it in the eyes of other family members who’d had their relatives brutally murdered and it never ended well."

Instead of saying she "had their relatives brutally murdered" perhaps you could say her "relatives had been brutally murdered"
Comments from author:
Hmm, I know what you mean but it didn't seem too off to me. After all the way people speak is different o the way its writen and you can get the wrong idea from what they're saying...or something like that.

Anyway I shall bear it in mind for next time.

Cheers,
D.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [11 Dec 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two." from (Recent Donor)JanessaRavenwood
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She's not as anonymous as she might think - if she called 911 on her cell phone, they know who she is. If payphones were still around, that would be anonymous - otherwise, forget it, caller ID will nab you.
Comments from author:
Actually I did think of this...but only after I had posted the chapter. Darn, I'm getting old and can't keep up with modern tech!

Cheers,
D.
Review By [(Recent Donor)JanessaRavenwood] • Date [11 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two." from Mcspender
Review:
So Richard was killed in action. Too bad, I think it would have been very cool to see Zoe and him teaming up to punish the killers.
The lighter owner, there's three probable outcomes about the owner: that he was a member of the demon killing unit and turned to crime after being discharged, or a demon killed the owner and keep it as a trophy, or the most probable one, it was lost or pawned.

Nice to see Zoe going all Batgirl on those perps; I mean, what was she supposed to do, let those guys kill the poor old man?.
Kick their butts Zoe!!.

Cool chapter, see ya!!.
Comments from author:
Exactly, what was she supposed to do?

I stands o reason that with more slayers around they're more likely to encounter purely human crime so what do they do? No one (and I include myself here) seems to address this point in their fics.

Cheers,
D.
Review By [Mcspender] • Date [11 Dec 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two." from Ltlconf
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Howdy Dave!


This is looking to be interesting and good job on the questioning scene. You showed Benson's biggest strength as a SVU investigator: her ability to empathize with the victims, holding on to her patience, getting them to talk, and giving them realistic hope.

Stabler is very correct on the special forces being a small (and insular) community. They do all seem to know each other, at least by reputation.

I can't see Zoe as evil for seeking retribution. I never bought into the the whole Slayer don't kill humans BS, mainly as Buffy ignored it, bent it, broke it "accidentally" (a LOT more than Faith ever did to her once), or got around it multiple times in the series (seriously, her on-screen human body count is pretty high) but has plot armor so she's never called on it. And lets admit it: she tried to murder Faith one way or another to save her boyfriend, no other reason. The whole "she had to be stopped" was thought up post murder attempt and never even mentioned in "Graduation" Pt.1.
So it seems all very circumstantial: aka, writer fiat.

As more the morality of it all, I share Dave's reasoning: Civilization is a social contract nothing more. If the contract is obviously ineffective, then you may well have the right to act on your own. If a group of thugs continue to terrorize and kill in a community and the Law can't or won't act, you tell me what the hell are the people affected supposed to do? The Social Contract has been violated, the Law is not or unable to act, this means the people affected (in my book) have a right to protect themselves... or avenge those who no longer can... and give the criminals punishment. I admit, its a fine and easily abused line, but one that man has walked from the beginning.


The Cracker!
Comments from author:
Thanks, this fic like the film its crossed with seems to be bringing out some interesting comments.

On a slightly different note, I heard on the news the other day NY celebrated a huge drop in crime recently...I knew this was going to be a problem when I started this fic as the crime rates were way high when the film was made. I also found it interesting watching the film and recognising places later used in things like Law & Order and seeing how much they've changed...for the better!

Cheers,
D.
Review By [Ltlconf] • Date [11 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two." from BrownFinderth
Review:
NICE TO SEE KENNEDY GET INVOLVED IN A NICE WAY!!
Comments from author:
I've always liked Kennedy, she'll pop up in this series from time o time. She might even get her own spin-off story at some point.

Cheers,
D.
Review By [BrownFinderth] • Date [11 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two." from eriktheviking
Review:
A well written emotional response from Zoe and a nice touch of mystery with the lighter and her father's history.
Comments from author:
Thank-you.

D.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [11 Dec 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Xovervore
Review:
Some nasty evildoers here. I imagine that Zoe's vampire report will be rather delayed. In the detectives' speculations about the origin of the lighter they missed one obvious possibility - that it was stolen - which is possibly how Faith will get involved, as either it is hers or belongs to a soldier and she is investigating its loss/discovery.
Comments from author:
Thank-you for your review.
D.
Review By [Xovervore] • Date [10 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Recent Donor)JanessaRavenwood
Review:
I personally have no problem with Zoe seeking lethal vengeance.

The slayers' policy of "don't kill humans" is terribly racist, or species-ist if you will, as it essentially amounts to "only humans have or deserve civil rights." Zoe has a case of perfectly legitimate vengeance here - so I'm rooting for her. If you're going to play judge, jury, and executioner on a nightly basis, at least be equal in your dispensing of vigilante justice. I say she should go all "Death Wish" on the perps here - a movie I daresay you might have seen again recently. :-)

Seriously, for all the whining critics had against the original Death Wish film, he was clearly the hero. If the police and courts fail to deliver justice, I'm a firm believer in their not getting to complain about the victims seeking "private justice."

Go, Zoe, go...and make them *suffer* first.

In the immortal words of Frank Castle: "In certain extreme situations, the law is inadequate. In order to shame its inadequacy, it is necessary to act outside the law. To pursue...natural justice. This is not vengeance. Revenge is not a valid motive, it's an emotional response. No, not vengeance. Punishment." I don't agree about revenge not being a valid motive (certainly it is), but he's certainly got the gist of it.
Comments from author:
There's an old saying that I think applies here; If you don't get public justice you get private vengeance.

What I think the film was trying to say was, its down to people to make civilisation work. If you ignore wrong doing and say its someone elses problem, it going to become your problem very soon!

I first saw Death Wise when I was in my late teens or early twenties, at the time I was very much on Kersey's side. But now I'm older I'm not so sure, but then I say, what else could he do? Its a bit like Willow killing Warren Meers, what chance did she have of SPD catching him for Tara's murder? None.

Actually I don't think Warren killed Tara the angles are all wrong. I think someone was out to kill Willow and hit Tara by mistake, but thats a different xover!

Cheers,
D.
Review By [(Recent Donor)JanessaRavenwood] • Date [9 Dec 12] • Not Rated
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