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Review of chapter "Part 03: First Contact" from Delkatar
Review:
Great story! Any chance for new chapters?
Review By [Delkatar] • Date [18 Jun 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Part 03: First Contact" from Swagster
Review:
I'd love to see more!!!
Review By [Swagster] • Date [31 Mar 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Part 02: Through the Gate" from FinalGuardian
Review:
The story's great, your standard 'Ship of the line' fic. The only thing I can even think of to complaint about is that the dialogue is a little overly formal/wooden; using "I am", and "we shall" instead of "I'm" or "we'll".
Review By [FinalGuardian] • Date [5 Mar 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Part 03: First Contact" from evilreader
Review:
More pls
Review By [evilreader] • Date [27 Jul 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Part 03: First Contact" from Morgomir
Review:
Great chapter. Keep up the good work.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [26 Jul 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Part 03: First Contact" from removedauthor
Review:
I think the idea for your story was brilliant. And I look for word to the next chapter.

On a side note I was wondering if I could barrow the ship that you designed?
Comments from author:
Which ship the new Consular Class or the Pelta Class?
Review By [removedauthor] • Date [14 Jul 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Part 03: First Contact" from AbscondingCascade
Review:
Nice to see this back, though I do have a question, can the cloning systems clone a Force Sensitive and the clone be sane? Or can you splice in Force Sensitivity into an existing clone line and have Force Sensitive Clones? As while they would take longer to train in the Force more Force users to help would be useful.

Now in thanks ~ http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_UUlO_1xu-s
Review By [AbscondingCascade] • Date [14 Jul 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Part 03: First Contact" from (Recent Donor)tchizek
Review:
Great chapter! I actually thought that the boarding action was fairly accurate. Opposed boarding is complex and difficult, SGCs normal split up and take the bridge and engineering only works when the opponent is incompetent and/or surprised. Against Jedi and Clone Troopers on a ship with a working security system? No chance at all.

Tom
Review By [(Recent Donor)tchizek] • Date [14 Jul 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Part 03: First Contact" from Vianca
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Maybe you're having troubles because your forgetting things?
Everybody with a telescope can see the ship in space, considering it's parking place.
Shouldn't that have been part of the whole talks?

I do hope that they have the plans for the first gen Venators & maybe more, like a Tector or Imperator.
I really hope that they have the plans for the Harrower aboard, as well as the Tie-Fighter.
I bet the first load of clones will be devided in medical, engineers, pilots & grunts.
Why do I get a feeling certain people from Sunnydale might find thenseld cloned?
Yes, I'm talking about the smarter ones here, like Willow & Jenny.

Will R2-D2 get orders to hack the hell out of Earth's computer network, in order to find out everything they can about these Earthers and their technology, since it clearly ain't standaard & they know how to travel tby FTL.
Makes one wonder if they are even Earthers and not some alien race that looks human, using Earths lack of stellar know how to quitely take over the whole planet.
Might be a Star Trek plot, but still one that Xander & Co has to keep in mind, reality can be weirder then fiction, afteral.

A DHD could be a nice upgrade for the bridge, when they have updated their starmaps, in order to quickly plot a general destination for Hyperspace travel.
In Star Wars, Hyperspace and Subspace are two different mediums.
Subspace is known, but not really played with.
Just as anti-matter is usealy just used for bombs.

I really never liked how Egiria(?) ended up, I realy expected atleast more from Carter, after Jolinar.
But I found the Tok'ra very dumb in that episode, it's a fracking queen, at the very least find out her name and if she would like to help their cause.
Could always trow her back.

Suggest you let Xander look into the cloning tech, for one.
They need to find a way to replace their blaster gas, for one, since it's all a organic wast material.
And without those gasses, they can't use most of their weapons or even cool their hyperdrive.
Thus, untill that logistical problem is solved, I suggest a carefull lockdown on it's use, in order to keep these gasses around as long as possible.
And make sure that the same goes for Bacta &Kolto.
Untill they can find ways to replace these organic products, their uses should be limited as much as possible.

Who else in Sunnydale retains atleast usefull knowledge of the character he or she, dressed up as?
Tony Stark & Janice Em (Iron Man and Macross/Robotech) could help with power and weapon systems.
Someone dressed as the Major from Ghost in the Shell would be able to bring in a whole new tech-tree, that includes andriode bodies.
Anybody dressed as lets say a Colonial, Cylon, Borg or so?
That might have resolted into other ships, even if they disappeared when the spell ended.
The three shows that support each other with their tech tree's are Star Wars, Star Trek & Andromeda.
Farscape might fit to this as well.
One reason is their FTL-drives, then there is the other tech differents.
Yeah, checking Sunnydale in order to see if somebody is either still transformed or else still remembers things from his or her costume is a must.
Rommie & Seven alone would give quite the tech boost.

Q40 from Babylon-5, is a super-condensator.
So I wouldn't be suprised if it was used in the Stargates and so.
I wouldn't be suprised to know that it's what stored the power for the main weapon of the Death Star.
Right now, Xander &Co are underpowered, even with the ship,
But you got to watch out for over a year (or so) from now, so that you don't turn it into Mary Sue country.
Bit of a shame about the SGC date in the timeline.
No easy way to slowely build up their forces and encounter the hostile aliens all on their own.
The ship could land & the force can blanket memory, easy to bring-up the crew lvl's while checking if somebody is remembering something usefull from their costumes.

Fuel is also a problem they have to watch out for, since they don't have fuel production yet.
Heck, if they were still in the early episodes of SGC, then there was a starship parked behind Mars or so.
Suggest they try to keep one of the SGC boarding crafts & were is the NID one?
Review By [Vianca] • Date [14 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Part 01: The Chaos Begins" from fanreaderonetwo
Review:
Good start on the story but..........


nitpick

"In one of the numerous higher planes a figure, _being of unimaginative power_ stood observing a small ball of light as it displayed what was now happening on board the Resolute."

I think what you meant to say was "a being of unimaginable power".
Review By [fanreaderonetwo] • Date [14 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Part 03: First Contact" from Raider
Review:
very well done sir.

I rather liked this.
Review By [Raider] • Date [14 Jul 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Part 03: First Contact" from Bluesnowman
Review:
wonderful chapter
Review By [Bluesnowman] • Date [14 Jul 13] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Part 03: First Contact" from Bill
Review:
Very well done!
Review By [Bill] • Date [13 Jul 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Part 03: First Contact" from AlecMcDowell
Review:
Yeah not surprised they got sent packing. Really it's only thanks to Xander and the troopers actually being from Earth that they're getting any kind of chance I'm thinking. Though it's not really a great sign that the leaders of the planet were so willing to steal the ship. Getting a bit confused by the timeline though, the mention of Klorel in an earlier chapter suggests early, but then he died in canon before Anubis and the defense platform... and if they had the platform that suggests they might be on Atlantis already too. Glad to see Xander's easy use of the force here as well- a single Jedi is a big deal but it's not a game-changer when you're dealing with galactic enemies like the goa'uld and wraith so it's not a bad idea to keep him powered up in my opinion. Can't wait for more of this.
Comments from author:
/sigh/

This Stargate is a completely different reality then what we know, therefore instead of a combined attack from Klorel and Aphohis its only Klorel with three Ha'taks and supporting forces. The platform mentioned is not the Antarctic Outpost, but a similar weapon platform to the Lantia Lagrange Defense Satellites in Atlantis or rather an earlier variant of it anyways.

As for the Council ordering the capture of the Resolute, well they were scared due to the earlier attack therefore it does make some sense for them to do that. Not really a good idea but still something I can see.

Xander's Force Skills are not as powerful as some other Jedi. Right now the only thing he can right now is plucking thoughts from people's head and some minor other tricks. And yes there be no other Jedi in this story.
Review By [AlecMcDowell] • Date [13 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Part 03: First Contact" from Bobboky
Review:
Nice work. A bit rushed but well done
Comments from author:
Yeah I noticed tried to streamline it but still came out not how I wanted it to. /shrug/
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [13 Jul 13] • Not Rated
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