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Review of chapter "Jeff "Joker" Moreau" from Orchamus
Review:
Ah Faith, already making waves, good for her. Gotta say, good point about the setup, always thought it a bit wonky.
Comments from author:
I actually had someone on FF.Net drop like, a bloody fucking essay in a review about how he would have set the ship up. Some of it will be used. Most of it won't. Other things came from my mind.
Review By [Orchamus] • Date [2 Jan 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Dr. Karin Chakwas" from Orchamus
Review:
Nice New Year chappy, have a good one, I'm drunk and goin to sleep.
Comments from author:
I shoulda gotten drunk on New Years Eve. Oh well. Get drunk tonight instead.
Review By [Orchamus] • Date [1 Jan 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Dr. Karin Chakwas" from Cmiller
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Heh... love Dr. Chakwas. Can't wait for more.
Comments from author:
And there is more. :)
Review By [Cmiller] • Date [1 Jan 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Veetor'Nara" from (Recent Donor)nerfherder
Review:
Good first taste. Keep up the good work! :-)
Comments from author:
Working on it. The next few installments are all pretty rapid fire (centered around her boarding the SR-2) so I'm working them up as one to ensure good flow.
Review By [(Recent Donor)nerfherder] • Date [28 Dec 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Veetor'Nara" from Orchamus
Review:
Huh, about how I thought it would go. Actually really looking forward to Faith an Aria meeting, gods that ought to be good.
Comments from author:
"Don't fuck with Aria."
"Why not? You're wicked hot."
"..."
Review By [Orchamus] • Date [25 Dec 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Veetor'Nara" from Cmiller
Review:
heh, what a twist!!!! I kinda W-I-S-H that was an option in game. More please.
Comments from author:
Well, I get why it's not. People woulda bitched if she was an onboard NPC that left after a bit, and it makes no sense given her character to abandon her mission as of Freedom's Progress.
Review By [Cmiller] • Date [25 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Miranda Lawson" from skychan
Review:
Sorry I only just finished ME1 last night so I'm going to have to give this story a pass till I finish 2.
Comments from author:
Well, Chapters 1 - 5 cover ME2's first two missions, so it won't take you long to catch up. Chapter 6 and 8 are unique, while Chapter 7 deals with the acquisition of Kasumi (which you can do immediately after Freedom's Progress).
Review By [skychan] • Date [24 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Miranda Lawson" from Cmiller
Review:
I's totally think that was awesome and I've an idea on when Faith should confront Miranda about the slip ups you should have it after omega and maybe have Faith ask mordin check the entire ship for bugs while she and Miranda goes to get archangel(Garrus) and also will we get flashbacks to the duel wish moments?

EDIT: Wasn't expecting a show down but I figured that TIM(The Illusive Man) would have even Bugged Miranda's office so that Faith wouldn't want TIM to know about the duel Wishes thing when she goes to talk with Miranda about them.
Comments from author:
Miranda's role in things isn't at all malicious; quite the opposite. So the big showdown you're hoping for probably won't happen. As for the wishes, I'm not quite sure how to do Faith's yet because I'm not a fan of flashbacks but Miranda's will be easy enough to show.
Review By [Cmiller] • Date [24 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Miranda Lawson" from Orchamus
Review:
Heh, amusing as hell, though Miranda seeming to know something is rather curious. Loved the Tali interaction, some love in the future for the Talimancers perhaps?
Comments from author:
Sadly, Tali's not an asari and so she doesn't have a chance with Faith Shepard...
Review By [Orchamus] • Date [24 Dec 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Miranda Lawson" from CrystalBlaze
Review:
Miranda is getting a load of Faith talk all over her. By the time the Dark Spectre is done with her, she'll be trying to vaguely remember a sane universe.. and failing.
Comments from author:
She may also end up wishing she was an asari...
Review By [CrystalBlaze] • Date [24 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Miranda Lawson" from (Recent Donor)tammin
Review:
Nice Miracle Max reference. I liked this chapter and I totally agree that Faith would have chosen be a Vanguard. I am waiting to see what Miranda wished for and how that meshed with Faith's wish.
Comments from author:
I'm going to have to see if I still have the material from when I was pondering adding another story or two to Perfection/The Justicar way back when. It had the actual flashback to the moment in question, complete with wish.
Review By [(Recent Donor)tammin] • Date [24 Dec 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Miranda Lawson" from Markelo
Review:
I love the Princess Bride line at the end. It made me ROTFLMAO!
Comments from author:
I love that movie more than any straight man should.
Review By [Markelo] • Date [24 Dec 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Jacob Taylor" from TinMan
Review:
This is an interesting beginning to the story. Not much more then a basic introduction to the idea, but that's exactly as it should be.

The tense seemed fine to me, no major issues.

I'm wondering how long it'll be until things are explained? You won't want to reveal all too soon, but some part of it will need to be explained relatively quickly.
Comments from author:
Give or take, Chapter 7. We'll start to get hints through the next few, but Chapter 7 will definitively lay out what the hell is going on.
Review By [TinMan] • Date [23 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Jacob Taylor" from (Recent Donor)deitarionSSokolow
Review:
I liked the concept... until you mentioned thermal clips.

I just can't stand ME2 and ME3. They're like bad fanfics. The technological changes like thermal clips introduced to make them more "mainstream" make no sense, the gameplay has been dumbed down, the story is far less imaginative than what was foreshadowed in #1, the ME2 plot basically throws out the events of ME1 and rewrites, and they're just, generally, very sloppy sequels.

They're not bad as games... but they're terrible as Mass Effect sequels. (ME1 was a nuanced sci-fi novel. ME2 and ME3 are basically superhero comic books.)

EDIT: Point. I really should have been more clear. I don't hate ME2 blindly... I was just very hopeful that you were going to work your authorial magic until I saw you needlessly mention an implementation detail that was on my "stupid things" list.

EDIT: I suppose that's fair. It IS your story... but it still makes no sense in the context of the original Mass Effect and grates on my nerves. It's a thinly-disguised excuse to jerry-rig ammo clips and reloading onto a technology that is beyond needing them just so EA could make the game more like the big-sellers like Call of Duty.

(Note: In case you were unaware, my "like bad fanfics" comment is more than just a simile. EA's PC release of the original Mass Effect is a faithful port of the Microsoft Games release for XBox prior to Bioware being acquired by EA. After acquiring Bioware, EA brought in new writers for ME2 and ME3 and completely changed the creative direction of the project to bring it into line with their "make it more mainstream" approach to their acquisitions.)
Comments from author:
You know, considering the summary mentions a ME2-originating character as well as an ME2 plot point, you could have saved yourself the trouble of reading something based on a property you hate...

EDIT: It's a piece of dialogue from a character who had most of his stuff taken verbatim. I don't see a need to change it mostly because it does differentiate the weaponry of the Citadel races from the Collectors, Protheans, maybe the rachni and/or inusannon...
Review By [(Recent Donor)deitarionSSokolow] • Date [22 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Jacob Taylor" from (Current Donor)MaxGSandeman
Review:
I don't know anything about ME but it seems like Faith will be in constant action.
Will there be a back story? She's been out of it for a while.
Comments from author:
The summary for the story lays out the basic premise in two sentences, but I'll be bridging the gap between 2013 and 2185 through Faith's thoughts and conversations over the course of the story.
Review By [(Current Donor)MaxGSandeman] • Date [21 Dec 12] • Not Rated
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