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Review of chapter "Isn't This The ENTERPRISE's Job?" from LordSchmodder
Review:
Oh! This is a nice one. And I like that you put Willow in charge.
Comments from author:
Thanks LordSchmodder. Xander seems to get all the lovin' on the Halloween fics... (or at least 90%...) Since Willow got gipped even on the original Halloween, it's cool to have her be the one that gets the power-up.
Review By [LordSchmodder] • Date [6 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Isn't This The ENTERPRISE's Job?" from CPTSkip
Review:
I'm really enjoying your story. Nice to see Willow in charge for once.
Comments from author:
Thanks CPTSkip!

Yeah, the challenge called for her to be the captain, but aside from that, she seriously got gipped on the whole Halloween thing... Xander got soldierboy memories... Buffy got 'native' french help... Willow got to stare longingly at walls and wish she could step through them... bummer!
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [6 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Isn't This The ENTERPRISE's Job?" from TaraLi
Review:
In re your discussion of the Prime Directive:

Even that is a bit of a retcon, as ST:TNG greatly broadened the scope of the Prime Directive from the original series. In ST:TOS, the Prime Directive only applied to cultures confined to planetary surfaces, or solar systems. Upon reaching the ability to build a warp drive (or other FTL drive, though we never saw any evidence of such for certain), or in theory to at least be able to access subspace for communications, the Prime Directive no longer applied. This was because the Prime Directive was the result of experiences with aboriginal cultures being subsumed by (theoretically) more mature cultures. Cultures able to reach the stars were presumed mature enough to face the existence of other cultures like themselves without being culturally overwhelmed.
Comments from author:
*nods* I would definitely agree that the Prime Directive was limited to that scope in the original series.

Next Generation did move to a broader interpretation where even space-faring cultures were included in the 'non-interference' policy.

My intention with the commentary was to establish that the particular first contact situation fell apart because the Federation side had the hubris to approach a warrior culture in a manner that can best be described as 'cultural stupidity'. The implication being that Willow is not in a position to judge because her own history has moments equally as bad, if not worse.

Thanks for reviewing and I hope you continue to enjoy the story!
Review By [TaraLi] • Date [6 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Isn't This The ENTERPRISE's Job?" from DarthTenebrus
Review:
Well researched and well written. The Prometheus crew is about to get its baptism by fire, and Willow is coming into her own as Captain Rosenberg.

Assuming that some elements of BtVS remain dominant in their lives, how will they handle supernatural threats such as Glorificus? And how will Willow react when her magickal abilities begin to assert themselves? I cannot imagine that the Scoobies will remain youthful much longer if the Buffyverse timeline remains intact as they have to deal with a Willow who is both a Starship captain and an UNBELIEVABLY POWERFUL magick user.

And by extension, as you've blended the STOL verse, the Stargate verse and the Buffyverse so seamlessly, how do you imagine Captain Willow the Superwitch will help the SGC deal with the threat of the Ori?

I can see how this might get pretty dark as the timeline progresses ... at least Willow won't turn into a Sith from Warren killing Tara, as he's in her crew and under her authority.
Comments from author:
=D

Well... fire there shall be :)

The existence of the BtVS show converted to holoprograms means that Buffy, Xander and Willow do have some advance knowledge... which will play in future stories ;)

I haven't decided yet if Willow is going to keep up with her magical studies or not. If she does, she certainly won't end up quite as powerful as she won't be doing an energy suck on the Hellmouth to get there.

And Warren... well, he /is/ still Warren :p
Review By [DarthTenebrus] • Date [6 Feb 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Isn't This The ENTERPRISE's Job?" from AndreaMaine
Review:
I can't wait to read the next chapter and the results of the first battle between this Prometheus and Apophis' Ha'Taks. Also in Star Trek On Line the Federation of that universe after the end of the Dominion War went through a major fleet rebuilding and many earlier designs were upgraded to late 24th and early 25th century technology. This included the NX Cruisers like the UES Enterprise. In the STOL verse the NX ships were reclassified as Escorts. Also the Federation began building Kirk era Miranda, Soyuz, Constitution, and Excelsior-Class Cruisers along with more up to date ships.

Currently as Captain Nedylene Vrinn I command the Defiant-Class Tactical Escort USS Eilistraee. It does very good against everything except Romulan battleships, Borg Cubes, and Borg Command and Control ships. I've been thinking of the ships in the Prometheus design libraries the NX-Class Escorts could be the first ships to be built followed by Miranda-Class Light Cruisers, Constitution-Class Cruisers, Stargazer-Class Heavy Cruisers, Galaxy-Class Exploration Cruisers, and Sovereign-Class Assault Cruisers. Then there are various Science Vessels of several classes, plus many classes of Escorts.
Review By [AndreaMaine] • Date [6 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Dusting the Annoying Bite of Reality" from BarbarossaRotbart
Review:
Interesting story, but ...
... the ECH had been established in STV in 1999 (season 6 episode 4 "Tinker Tenor Doctor Spy"), nearly two years after the Halloween episode of BtVS.
... Trills are not similiar to Goa'uld. Host and Symbiont form one (and only one) personality and do not communicate with eachother like the Goa'uld. No, the host simply gets all the knowledge, memories, skills etc. of the symbiont (and this includes all the knowledge, memories, skills etc. of all previous hosts).
... why were Giles, Jenny and Joyce in Star Trek uniforms?
... the Star Wars quasi-crossover was IMHO absolute unnecessary. It would have been more fun, if Jonothan had lost his Force powers.

BTW it would have been fun if Q was behind Janus.
Comments from author:
I appreciate your opinion Barb, but I will point out that this is my story and there are reasons for things to have been done the way they are...

1) Okay... In case you didn't notice, they were taken over by personalities from an alternate dimension that were much further down the timeline, as in post Voyager. Therefore the appearance or not prior to Halloween is moot. I will also point out that they are from an AU Star Trek universe as the PROMETHEUS is clearly NOT the vectored attack ship the Doctor visited during the series.

2) I beg to differ on the Trill. Reference the episode where the Dax symbiote spawned off all of their past hosts. I will also point out that Ezri would never have been so timid on her arrival at DS-9 if what you said was true. Trill symbionts are not 'extra brains' that get stuffed in, they are sentient beings. Just because TV for simplicity chose not to show conversations between the symbiont and the host doesn't mean they don't occur.

3) Joyce is explained in story, and I apologize for not making clear that Jenny wanted to get in the spirit of the season and dragged Giles along.

4) You may feel it unnecessary, however you are not the author and have no idea how I intend for it to play out and what role it plays in the over-all storyline.

There is always the possiblilty that Q could appear, but who is to say that Q /isn't/ Janus? ;)
Review By [BarbarossaRotbart] • Date [6 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Isn't This The ENTERPRISE's Job?" from Wormbait
Review:
Very nice story, I'm really enjoying it.

Nice to see the whole gang getting some screen time in a halloween fic (and not just uber same-old same-old Xander). I also like that Willow didn't just instatly divulge everything, instead working out a story that answers all that currently needs to be answered and nothing more. Although the lightsabers might raise a few questions. I suppose they could just say they saw the movies and thought it looked cool.

Well done and thanks for sharing, I look forward to more.
Comments from author:
Oh... the lightsabers are going to come back and bite them in the backside :)

If you read Willow's comments carefully, you will note that at no time does she admit to actually being from an alternate universe. In fact, they specifically state that this is their 'Home Universe' :) They let the SGC make all kinds of assumptions and simply choose not to /blatantly/ correct them ;)

And yes, the challenge did specify that Willow be the Captain, so no 'uber'Xander... although he did get his own share... but as I said to another reviewer, this is Willow's story primarily. Xander will probably get more love in a future tale, though I think Buffy and Dawn are up first :)
Review By [Wormbait] • Date [5 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Isn't This The ENTERPRISE's Job?" from Rich
Review:
Excellent !! This is very well thought out - and I'm not saying that just because you read my mind and gave Buffy a lightsaber (if anybody else has a weapon, of course the Slayer will want one too).

You've set up an interesting group dynamic here; Buffy and Giles, who dominated the original group, are in subordinate positions in this new reality; Jonathon and Andrew, who were basically comic relief in the show, are turning into valuable members of the team . So far, though, it seems to work just fine.

The Goauld are in for a BIG surprise.
Comments from author:
Thanks Rich!

Yeah... initially it was kind of a throw-away that Buffy would insist one having on in exchange for authorizing Johno's :) (Then she had to go and use the darn thing... oh oops, that's the next chapter ;) )

I'm a little worried that Buffy is a bit subsumed by her alternate persona... then again, this first story is more Willow's story anyway. I've got plans for a Buffy-centric story that will follow this one.

Jonathan and Andrew are fun characters. Andrew in particular has the memories of being a highly competent enlisted member of Starfleet... but he is also a teen spaz and has to overcome that to be effective... In a way I'm almost playing him as the Chekov character in the JJAbrams Star Trek reboot.

Hmmm... Goauld... I think that the readers will be very pleased with the next chapter in that case :)
Review By [Rich] • Date [5 Feb 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Isn't This The ENTERPRISE's Job?" from cjcold
Review:
Brilliant chapter.

I love the way both the Prometheus crew and SGC are truly working together. Nice job with each side briefing the other on whats going on.

Nice idea to bring Mitchell into the story a bit early. I like the drone torpedo idea.

More soon please.
Comments from author:
Thanks! and the exciting part is yet to be posted!

*nods* I figured that with the solid waste about to be hitting the rotational air handler both sides would take a 'mission first' attitude.

Check the names of the Groom Lake/Area-51 personnel ;) If you're familiar with SG-1 and Atlantis, they should ring some bells. (PROMETHEUS/X-303, DAEDALUS, ODYSSEY, APOLLO)

And the Torpedo-Fighter is a natural outgrowth of the OMEGA class capabilities. If their communications are virtually impossible to jam, then one of the big risks of drone operations is minimized. Combine that with Holodeck technology for a control interface and you get the best of manned and drone systems.
Review By [cjcold] • Date [5 Feb 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Isn't This The ENTERPRISE's Job?" from (Current Donor)Katrina
Review:
So good! I look forward to the updates on this one every time. Nicely done.
Comments from author:
Thank you! As indicated in other review comments, I already have the next chapter drafted... just waiting on the Beta to have time to get it back to me.

As things are working out this story is following the hour long episode format of five acts and a teaser :) so there will be two more chapters of this one, the battle and the aftermath. Then I'll need to decide which plot-bunny will be episode two :)
Review By [(Current Donor)Katrina] • Date [5 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Isn't This The ENTERPRISE's Job?" from GenoBeast
Review:
It is good you had Willow state exactly what she intends to do with her starship and the fact her crew was not going to blindly follow one nation merely because of the situation, that they intended to recruit from all the nations eventually because it was a United Earth Starship. Now the NID would have a difficult time using world play to excuse their inevitable actions against the Prometheus crew.
Comments from author:
Yep... doesn't mean the NID isn't going to try though...

Protecting that blue marble is far more important than petty squabbles between dust specks on said marble.
Review By [GenoBeast] • Date [5 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Isn't This The ENTERPRISE's Job?" from Chargone
Review:
Very nice. Useful jedi is useful. Too out of it to make this review more useful. Onward!
Comments from author:
Yeah, when I realized what abilities I had given to Mr. Levinson, I figured it would behoove me to make use of them. We haven't seen the last of Padawan Levinson... (I figure that since he went to Halloween as Jacen Solo, he's not a Knight yet.)

Thank you for reviewing and onward indeed... just waiting for my beta to have time to finish up with the 28 pages I haven't gotten back yet. =D

hmm
Review By [Chargone] • Date [5 Feb 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Dusting the Annoying Bite of Reality" from Oddshot
Review:
I am truly enjoying this story and hope that you update soon , I am tracking most if not all of the responses to the Ship of the Line Challenge & am find them all most interesting but also so different to each other, some one shots others with ongoing development .

Even if your story is not officially a Ship of the Line story to me it meets the spirit of the Challenge .


Hope for more updates ASAP so I have more to read .
Comments from author:
No worries there Oddshot! I have 50 pages in the pipeline right now. Not sure if they're coming as 1 or 2 chapters yet though. In either case, my Beta still has the last 28... and I need at least the first six to ten of those back from him to make the two chapter split. I figure I should be able to get things up by the end of the weekend.

Yeah, ship of the line specified Xander... and since I picked up 4242 that specified Willow as the Captain, I figured I'd put SotL as a secondary.

I'm still planning to wrap this particular story up with the next chapter after the 50 pages (whether it come as one or two), but I discovered that Plot Bunnies are related to tribbles... and accidentally spilled a box of cereal on one...

So far my Plot Bunny Farm includes:
*Buffy dealing with Angel and her changes/simultaneous to Sam Carter's possession by Jolinar.
*A Dawn story (dealing more with the whole 'what do we know, what can we do' aspect of the command crew's experiences with the Vampire Slayer holoprogram...)
*The Recruiting Trail... or A Conning We Will Go
*FedTek Enterprises (May cross with the SG episode where the Asgard borrow SG-1 and the X-303)
*SOVEREIGN OMEGA

Anyway... that's what's in the queue.
Review By [Oddshot] • Date [30 Jan 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Dusting the Annoying Bite of Reality" from BlueEyedJedi
Review:
It just occurred to me, it was pointed that the ship has hundreds of years of future entertainment. Does it also have a listing of future history? Like the current crisis that may well destroy our civilization. I am speaking of course of the bankruptcy of 'Hostess Foods' and the DEATH of the TWINKIE. When Xander discovers this possible future event, won't he entreat Willow to do something to save us all. Won't Willow do so to not only save us from the nightmare, but also mainly because Xander is her best friend.

I like how Willow is developing her own style of command. Picard & Janeway part of the mix, but in the end the style is Willow's own.

So, the SGC is calling for help. I can hardly wait for the response, I think it will be one that the SGC likes. Maybe Earth will even join the Federation. I Know the Russians will want a Checkov on board, even as Japan will favor a Sulu there as well. As for China, (Sulu is Japanese) I can't think of a Starfleet equivalent. Now in the case of the French, Picard may have been born there, but he has a more British sensiblity, as such he can't be considered one of the 'CHEESE EATING SURRENDER MONKEY', Picard is a fluke.

So Cordelia is a member of the Command Staff sans title or position. I suggest she be in charge of dealing with arrogant despots like the Goa'uld of worse Senator Kinsey. Cordie will put them in their place, on the floor groveling for mercy.

I can hardly wait for the next chapter. TTFN
Comments from author:
Hi BlueEyedJedi! Thanks for the review.

Yes, their records contain /a/ future history, but as the next chapter will make clear, there are already divergences. In fact, the Buffy Fiction will be far more accurate than the historical record for the time. On the other hand, I see absolutely no problem with Xander buying a bunch of twinkies and having them scanned into the replicator database for his personal consumption. ;) Something for a future story!

Yeah, Willow is her own Captain... wait until you see her lay down the law in the next chapter. ;)

Earth can't join the Federation as it does not exist in the SGC universe (explanation in next chapter) and this story is set at the end of year one of SG-1 so the international aspects still have to grow. Wills is going to jump-start it a bit, but it is still going to grow organically and not occur 'whole cloth' as some stories do it.

Yeah... I've been avoiding Kinsey in this story because I'm not sure how to write him yet... but he will play in future stories. And while Giles will be point on negotiations... Queen C doing the smackdown on him does intrigue.

Currently I have about 25-27 pages of the next chapter drafted... 22 went off to the beta a couple days ago and the battle is pretty much all that is left to write... (yeah, 28 pages leading up to the battle and all of it has to be there!) Not sure how long the battle will be page wise... but I'm off work tomorrow and it is supposed to snow, so, lots of hot cider, hot chocolate and computer time! =D

hmm
Review By [BlueEyedJedi] • Date [24 Jan 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Dusting the Annoying Bite of Reality" from Raider
Review:
very nicely done sir, very nicely done.
Comments from author:
My thanks! More is coming soon (first 22 pages of the next chapter are in the beta's hands while I write the balance).
Review By [Raider] • Date [23 Jan 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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