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Review of chapter "Only Ship in the Quadrant" from RevDorothyL
Review:
I got misty-eyed when the Bridge crew started to sing the "StarBlazers" theme song (which signaled the start of so many adventure-filled Saturday mornings for me in the late 1970s and early '80s!), and even more so at the comparison of the 'Prometheus' herself to the Chosen One, the One Girl in All the World who (with her trusty crew and allies) turns back the darkness and slays the demons. :)

Excellently done!
Comments from author:
*passes RevDorothyL a box of tissues*

=D Just love it when something I write manages to evoke a good emotional response!

There were two scenes I was thinking of when I had the crew begin singing... The movie 'Hunt for Red October', and a scene from the Yamato reboot 'Yamato: 2199' where the crew of (the Starblazers ship Paladin (Yukikaze???) commanded by Alex Wildstar(??? Kodai)) begins singing as they stage their delaying action to allow Captain Okita's Battleship to retreat from the disastrous battle of Pluto.
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [9 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Only Ship in the Quadrant" from djhardim
Review:
For those not aware, there was a live action version of "Space Battleship Yamato" released back in 2010 in Japan.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Space_Battleship_Yamato_(2010_film)

Apparently there have been attempts to make a Hollywood version too.

http://www.joblo.com/movie-news/an-american-live-action-star-blazers-movie-from-usual-suspects-writer-chris-mcquarrie
Comments from author:
Oh! Great info there!

Wasn't aware of the American effort... though I've heard rumblings about bringing the Japanese Live Action Yamato over. Of course, the lead actor has a 'no dub' clause in his contract, so he'd have to do any English voice work if a redub were done.
Review By [djhardim] • Date [9 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Only Ship in the Quadrant" from (Moderator)acs
Review:
One of the best YAHFs I've read in recent memory.

Looking forward to more.
Comments from author:
Thank you. I think the biggest problem with most YAHFs is that they tend to focus on changing what happened to Xander. While many of them are good, I find the best ones are the ones where the focus is on changing one of the other characters.
Review By [(Moderator)acs] • Date [9 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Only Ship in the Quadrant" from AlphaBeta
Review:
Exallently done! Jack, Jack, Jack; I just don't know what to say. And again, wow. Had me pulled in the entire time. Really looking forward to the next chapter. Please don't keep us waiting to long!
Comments from author:
Thank you.

Yeah... I actually think Jack is torn between Buffy and Willow... after-all Buffy did toss him a 'big honkin personal ray gun' while Willow snarked at the snake on almost his level... then punched him in the nose... HARD.

Final chapter of this story is in work... I'm a little hung up on the opening scene, though I've got some of the later ones fleshed out a bit.
Review By [AlphaBeta] • Date [9 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Only Ship in the Quadrant" from cjcold
Review:
Great chapter.

Really liked the tactics employed for the battle.

Nice save of SG-1, though I think I would have liked for their charges to destroy at least Klorels ship.

Really liked seeing Mitchell's pov, I like that the immersion was so complete that the pilots forgot they were piloting drones remotely.

Nice job on the cloaked tel'tac, looks like the snakes got away as usual. So hard to kill them. Though with the slow hyperdrive on a telt'ac and the speed of the rumors of their defeat with the Jaffa released by stargate back to Chulak, some other Goa'uld will likely take over Apophis' territory.

Really loved Buffy's theft of the Stargate. Should also be a nice Ace in Captain Rosenberg's arguments for informing other Earth nations since she could just cut America out with the capture of her own Stargate.

Look forward to the post battle talks. Analysis of the sensor reading from the battle as well as the wreckage should be interesting. Starfleets strength was always understanding their enemy and coming up with ways to block them just like you showed with the Shields being adjusted using data from the first hit the Ha'taks landed. With more time to refine the data I am looking forward to what starfleet will be able to do.
I would suggest that you have someone think of the amount of Naqudah that might be salvaged form the Ha'taks wreckage. The Goa'uld do afterall use the stuff in the hull of the ship and other systems.

More soon please.
Comments from author:
I did consider it... but then I realized that Earth doesn't have the tech-base for 25th century Star Trek technology... but having a pair of wrecked Ha'tak to reverse engineer with the crew of the PROMETHEUS' help... :) Maybe the X-303 program gets advanced a year...

Naquadah wasn't used as a hull material... after-all it's explosive ;) You're thinking of what Sam called 'Trinium Alloy' However Naquadah is the fuel for their drive and power systems. (Hint... the ships didn't go boom =D )

Yeah, while I wanted Apophis and Klorel to escape, I didn't want it to be too easy... Unseen in the story, they ringed back to Klorel's ship intending to use the gate to escape... only to find it gone... thus the Tel'tak.
Review By [cjcold] • Date [9 Feb 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Only Ship in the Quadrant" from (Current Donor)Katrina
Review:
So very awesome.
Comments from author:
Glad you liked it :)

I wanted the fight to be realistic... and even though the PROMETHEUS could have wiped the floor with Apophis' ships, Federation Rules of Engagement and Captain Rosenberg's training, combined with SG-1's presence on one of the Ha'tak's kind of forced a more even matchup.

Future engagements will almost certainly go differently :)
Review By [(Current Donor)Katrina] • Date [9 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Only Ship in the Quadrant" from AndreaMaine
Review:
I think that Kit's mother and Carlos' uncle were the best choice. I think Col. O'Neill has lust for the Prometheus, not CAPT. Rosenberg.
Comments from author:
Maybe both... after-all, she is the Captain ;)
Review By [AndreaMaine] • Date [9 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Isn't This The ENTERPRISE's Job?" from AlphaBeta
Review:
Loving the story. Hope to see the next update soon! When I was reading this, I just got the vibe from when I watched Best of Both Worlds.
Comments from author:
=D Now THAT sir is a compliment!

And I'm just waiting on my betas... of course the longer they take, the more changes I make :p (and the longer it gets)
Review By [AlphaBeta] • Date [8 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Isn't This The ENTERPRISE's Job?" from markuop
Review:
Great Story so Far. And now my take on Willow's next words.

After Pressing the All-call on that chair she says so the ship can hear

"This is the Captian speaking. In about an little over an hour an agressive enemie force will attempt to attack and enslave our world. We are the tip of the sword and we will repel this agressor. It may be true that we are the only combat ship that has the chance of repelling this attack, we will repel the attack and serve notice that earth is not a plaything to be enslaved. When history records the actions this day, the name of this ship will join others including the Defiant, Voyager, and Enterprise, who have taken a stand aganist the darkness, and we will succeed."

Willow pauses and in a Picard like statement states "All Hands, Battlestations"

I hope you like it.
Comments from author:
Hmmm... a little too Picard for Wills... but nice... and I kinda forgot to have her make a shipwide address *blush* Good thing the battle chapter hasn't been posted yet. More ideas percolate. =D new scenes ensue!

Okay, you are officially responsible for over a page of growth to the next chapter! :P
Review By [markuop] • Date [8 Feb 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Isn't This The ENTERPRISE's Job?" from DarthTenebrus
Review:
Next words from Willow --

"Red Alert, sound General Quarters. All hands to battle stations!"

Edit/Reply -- Ohhhh....she will....she WILL.....
Comments from author:
Funnily enough... She actually doesn't say it ;p
Review By [DarthTenebrus] • Date [7 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Isn't This The ENTERPRISE's Job?" from RevDorothyL
Review:
Excellent choice, choosing to delete/ignore the TCW (which was a major drag on the first three seasons of 'Enterprise', I thought)!

I loved this chapter so very much, and especially the opportunity provided for Cam to get in on some of the flying action in space even as a 'mere' rookie, while Gen. Hammond gets to enjoy flying his command flag from Willow's version of the 'Prometheus' in this first near-earth space battle (no need for 'ramming speed' in a desperate attempt to buy time for others this time, as in the X-303 Prometheus' battle against the forces of Anubis in late season 7 SG1 canon!).

Can't wait to see what the next part of this story holds in store.

Oh, and how pleased (and extremely envious) am I that Buffy gets BOTH a phaser AND a working lightsaber with which to kick invading Goa'uld butt (and presumably also demon butt, once the current crisis is past and Hellmouth patrols must once more be scheduled)? Love it, love it, love it!
Comments from author:
Yeah, one of my pet-peeves with Enterprise was that they completely screwed up the accepted Klingon/Earth history.

=D I hope the battle lives up to everyone's expectations. I'm rather pleased with what I have written, just waiting for the feedback so I can clean up what I need to.

I figure that a Lightsaber should have three ways of impacting demons, 1) It's a sword ;) 2) It's an energy weapon (flambe') 3) In Britain Jedi is a religion, so it is a 'holy artifact' =D
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [6 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Isn't This The ENTERPRISE's Job?" from mousemt
Review:
Excellent. Hope to see more soon.
Comments from author:
Next chapter's all written, just waiting on my beta reader to have an opportunity to finish their pass and get it back to me.

Glad you're enjoying! Finger's crossed work will let up a bit on ReadsaLot and I'll get those 28 pages back from them this week!
Review By [mousemt] • Date [6 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Isn't This The ENTERPRISE's Job?" from LordSchmodder
Review:
Oh! This is a nice one. And I like that you put Willow in charge.
Comments from author:
Thanks LordSchmodder. Xander seems to get all the lovin' on the Halloween fics... (or at least 90%...) Since Willow got gipped even on the original Halloween, it's cool to have her be the one that gets the power-up.
Review By [LordSchmodder] • Date [6 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Isn't This The ENTERPRISE's Job?" from CPTSkip
Review:
I'm really enjoying your story. Nice to see Willow in charge for once.
Comments from author:
Thanks CPTSkip!

Yeah, the challenge called for her to be the captain, but aside from that, she seriously got gipped on the whole Halloween thing... Xander got soldierboy memories... Buffy got 'native' french help... Willow got to stare longingly at walls and wish she could step through them... bummer!
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [6 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Isn't This The ENTERPRISE's Job?" from TaraLi
Review:
In re your discussion of the Prime Directive:

Even that is a bit of a retcon, as ST:TNG greatly broadened the scope of the Prime Directive from the original series. In ST:TOS, the Prime Directive only applied to cultures confined to planetary surfaces, or solar systems. Upon reaching the ability to build a warp drive (or other FTL drive, though we never saw any evidence of such for certain), or in theory to at least be able to access subspace for communications, the Prime Directive no longer applied. This was because the Prime Directive was the result of experiences with aboriginal cultures being subsumed by (theoretically) more mature cultures. Cultures able to reach the stars were presumed mature enough to face the existence of other cultures like themselves without being culturally overwhelmed.
Comments from author:
*nods* I would definitely agree that the Prime Directive was limited to that scope in the original series.

Next Generation did move to a broader interpretation where even space-faring cultures were included in the 'non-interference' policy.

My intention with the commentary was to establish that the particular first contact situation fell apart because the Federation side had the hubris to approach a warrior culture in a manner that can best be described as 'cultural stupidity'. The implication being that Willow is not in a position to judge because her own history has moments equally as bad, if not worse.

Thanks for reviewing and I hope you continue to enjoy the story!
Review By [TaraLi] • Date [6 Feb 13] • Not Rated
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