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Review of chapter "Chapter Two." from Mcspender
Review:
So Lt Lewis is the one person responsible for Faith's staying in =)??. Cool, I like characters like her =).
And the watcher in the rye... I mean Forest, let guess, It's a Wendigo???.
Cool chapter, see ya!!.
Comments from author:
Have you been looking over my shoulder?

Cheers,
D.
Review By [Mcspender] • Date [16 Jan 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two." from PATM
Review:
A normal day at the office with shocking the CO strange vibe at the end with a hint creepy theme music.
Comments from author:
But of course.

Cheers,
D.
Review By [PATM] • Date [15 Jan 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two." from grd
Review:
Love this series. Thank you.
Comments from author:
Cheers,
D.
Review By [grd] • Date [15 Jan 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two." from SilverWave
Review:
Heh this looks like it could be fun :-)

Thanks!
Comments from author:
Thank-you.
D.
Review By [SilverWave] • Date [15 Jan 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two." from orangemike
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I'll join the chorus about the SAT test: it's NOT a pass/fail thing, really not even remotely analogous to leaving exams and the like. Unlike the GCSE, it is not mandatory; and indeed, for the poorer and less ambitious student, there may be no thought of taking it (especially since it's not free). There is a somewhat less prestigious counterpart, popular among students with less lofty ambitions, called the ACT. Somebody like your Judy character would have taken the SAT as a matter of course, although she might not have taken it seriously. (Overly-ambitious parents and students, on the other hand, are likely to be suicidally serious about it, to an extent approaching the Japanese 'juken' obsession.)

If one does poorly on the SAT or ACT, there are no automatic consequences; if one does well on them, there are no guarantees of admittance to any particular school, far less scholarships.

-- father of a 17-year-old high school senior
Comments from author:
Interesting, never heard of of 'Act' before, or most of the other information here. Basically I only know what was on Buffy (I've never watched any other US school 'drama').

However someone who'd been in the US military did tell me that a poor SAT score might prevent you from enlisting.

Whatever, I shall keep a note of this for further use.

Cheers,
D.
Review By [orangemike] • Date [15 Jan 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two." from AllenPitt
Review:
wow, the nice officer is going to help Faith along. Why do I feel that that won't work out well? Anyway, here we are seeing the living legend at her start. Or something.
At least she isn't at the army base right next to Sunnydale.
Comments from author:
One know not that place (was it given a name in the show?) I always felt that was some sort of depot or something.

Cheers,
D.
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [15 Jan 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two." from MarcusRowland
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I hope that Faith has a good memory, she's sure to be asked about all those details at some point.
Comments from author:
From my own experience, she'll probably never have to say anything else about it, unless something comes up as 'odd'.

Cheers,
D.
Review By [MarcusRowland] • Date [15 Jan 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Inoeth
Review:
Very nice. Finally, the prequel as it were. I like the juxtiposition of Faith the girl who knows most of how dirty this world can be, and this new girl who seems to be a true innocent... I look forward to seeing where this goes. I truly hope you write about Faith in boot camp. Her personality clashing with DIs....
Comments from author:
Thank-you, more to be posted tonight.
D.
Review By [Inoeth] • Date [14 Jan 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from AllenPitt
Review:
If only she'd sung for Lorne. What a shock he'd have gotten. At least Faith is now in the army where it's safe.
Comments from author:
Do I detect irony here?

Cheers,
D.
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [14 Jan 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Cutiepie
Review:
Good start. I'm sure I will enjoy this story. I'm feeling unusually "obsess-y" (my husband's word) tonight, so I'm going through the entire chapter and pointing out things I noticed.

There's a small typo in the first paragraph: "back pact" ought to be "back pack".

As others noted, "carer" is not in common usage in the US. I'd go with "caretakers" or possibly "families" (with quote marks included - although possibly over-using quote marks is a weakness of mine) over "carers", as that would sound much more "American". Incidentally, my mind kept trying to make "carers" into "careers," and that made absolutely no sense. =]

On the line about the SAT, I would have her score noted as "an acceptable" score, since the SAT (and similar ACT) is more like an IQ test than a final examination. You can't "fail" it, since it just measures where you fall in your average understanding of certain subjects as compared to your peers.

Later, when her bus arrives, you have "snapped Faith out of the doze she’d fallen into." Perhaps you mean "daze" since I don't think you meant she had fallen asleep.

My last little comment comes from you using "ya" in Faith's speech patterns. It is fine when she means "you" but it is rather jarring when she means "your". Perhaps you could use "yer" instead? It would still reflect her accent, but would differentiate the two words. Maybe it is just a personal preference on my part, but I thought I'd mention it.

Thanks again for a new FitA story!
Comments from author:
Two peoples divided by a common language!

Be as 'Obsess-y' as you like.

Back-pact; Typo, I notice sometimes I look at these things and and think, 'that needs changing' and then not do it!

Sat's; I've answered this a couple of reviews ago, as I have the 'carer' thing.

Doze; I actually did mean 'doze', its about 04:00hrs and Faith's been up since early the previous morning...I think she's entitled to a cat-nap!

Yep; 'Ya', I'm glad you've mentioned that as its sorta settled an internal argument. In the later stories where Faith is older I've tried to cut back on the use of 'Ya' as her speech patterns change I will watch this in future chapters.

Cheers,
D.
Review By [Cutiepie] • Date [14 Jan 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from EasterCat
Review:
This looks like an interesting start. I've never watched Private Benjamin, so I'll be learning about it from Faith's POV.
I'm not sure what a "carer" is, but I'm guessing it's like a foster parent?
FYI, there is no passing score for SAT. You're not even required to take them to graduate from high school--assuming that's what you were implying. I don't know of a college, however, that'll let you in without that or the ACT.
Comments from author:
'Passing score/grade' I'm sure I've heard that phrase on US TV shows. I used it to show that Faith isn't stupid. Also I've been reliably informed that the US Army isn't a dumping ground for people who 'failed' their SAT's.

The entire pass/fail thing is probably an arbitrary score under which the US Army won't accept a recruit

Carer; I direct my honourable friend to the answer given to PATM below.

These details are always going to be a problem when you have non-US authors writing about the US. That's why I found my Grim up North series so refreshing to write, it was set in England and it was Buffy and Co who didn't know what people were talking about!

Cheers,
D.
Review By [EasterCat] • Date [14 Jan 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from PATM
Review:
It is nice to see that Faiths life just got uncomplicated. Carers is not as good a description USA-wise as foster parents. Just so you know. Those SD cops had some mad hacking skills.
Comments from author:
They probably used magic.

Here 'carers' is a sort of generalised term for someone who 'cares' for a child. It could mean a real parent, a foster parent or some social worker. However, all information on this type of detail is always helpful.

Cheers,
D.
Review By [PATM] • Date [13 Jan 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Current Donor)MaxGSandeman
Review:
Faith acting like the adult. She hasn't tweaked, that she calls Judy, kid.

No stomach cramp!!
Comments from author:
Yep, age is catching up on our girl...sob! They grow up so quickly!

Cheers,
D.
Review By [(Current Donor)MaxGSandeman] • Date [13 Jan 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Mcspender
Review:
The background for Judy is kinda different, if I remember correctly(or it's an alternate universe Judy?), but yeah, she's the naive and veeery funny character.
I really wanna see Faithy and Judy adventures in the camp!.
Cool chapter, see ya!!.
Comments from author:
Thank-you.

The Judy character is only loosely based on the film as are a lot of the other characters.

Cheers,
D.
Review By [Mcspender] • Date [13 Jan 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from eriktheviking
Review:
A well written look at Faith's reason for joining the army. And I look forward to what 'joining the army' films you come up with.
Comments from author:
Thank-you.

Some of this is from my own memories of Basic Military Training but I'm not a young woman and I joined a completely different army to the one Faith joined.

D.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [13 Jan 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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