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These are the Voyages... a Ship of the Line tale

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Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from (Recent Donor)nerfherder
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Well, I liked the "nu" prefix! Keep up the good work! It should be hillarious to see the spill-over from the mix!
Review By [(Recent Donor)nerfherder] • Date [13 Mar 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from Bill
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Good one!
Review By [Bill] • Date [12 Mar 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from SimulatedSoul
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i clever start to what appears to be an interesting story. I look forward to reading more.
Review By [SimulatedSoul] • Date [11 Mar 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One - Where quite a few have gone before" from redboy
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At the climax of the “Star Trek” reboot movie, young-Spock manually piloted ‘the Jellyfish’ onto a collision course with the Narada. I was thinking about how Spock is a science officer driven by the pursuit of knowledge and that it’d be in-character for him to spare a second to instruct the ship computer to send data back to the Enterprise. The Jellyfish had a voice recognition system, so Spock could’ve given a vocal command while his hands were preoccupied piloting the vessel.

.(1)the Jellyfish’s sensor logs from when it traveled through a black hole could give insights on better protection against spatial/temporal distortions, transwarp conduits, controlled time-travel, artificial wormholes, etc.

.(2)Historical records, such as accounts of how the Maquis were crushed by the Cardassian-Dominion Alliance. All Federation ships carry massive databases on history and culture completely unrelated to exploration, diplomacy, or military operations.

.(3)info on the Jellyfish’s blue prints and schematics [trans-metaphasic shielding, a hull designed to withstand unstable atmospheres, a safe means to transport Red Matter, etc.].

.(4)detailed scans of the Narada’s interior as the Jellyship was held it’s shuttle bay.

The Jellyship was built in 2387. U.S.S.Voyager returned to Earth in 2378, meaning discoveries from the Delta Quadrant could have been incorporated into the Jellyship or indirectly influenced its design as Voyager’s information gets disseminated between the Federation and the Vulcan Science Council over the course of nine years (2387 minus 2378 equals 9).
Review By [redboy] • Date [8 Mar 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from Netchka
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Oh Yeah! More please! Can't wait.
Review By [Netchka] • Date [3 Mar 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from kitsuneofdarkfire
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interesting fact, the actress that plays Ishta is the same actress that plays T-pol on Enterprise. The lovely Jolene Blalock.
Review By [kitsuneofdarkfire] • Date [28 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from redboy
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Xander’s and Cortana’s biggest advantage isn’t technology but their knowledge of 20th century American pop-culture that they can draw upon for ideas and inspiration, not to mention the fact that you as a fanfic author don’t have to worry about copywrites or trademarks. If you decide that Xander wants to build R2 astromech droids to help B’Elanna in engineering, you have the freedom to do so if you want.

“In your face, George Lucas! Mwahahah!!!”

Most of the characters in Star Trek seem to suffer from ‘creative sterility,’ although this is probably the result of finite money for props and sets rather than the writers being unimaginative With the exception of the Borg and Nero’s Narada the Federation rarely learn from their encounters with more advanced alien civilizations.

A webcomic called “Quentyn Quinn Space Ranger” did a satire out several flaws in the “Star Trek”: *over-dependence on structural integrity fields, *ships having a single computer system that runs everything yet has minimal compartmentalization or cyber-security, *the inherently volatile nature of anti-matter reactions in comparison to safer fuel like zero point energy so the ship doesn’t risk detonation every time there’s engine problems, *security limited to voice recognition and internal force fields, etc.

See strips #13-44

http://www.rhjunior.com/QQSR/00023.html
Review By [redboy] • Date [28 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One - Where quite a few have gone before" from johnjr
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How many shuttles does the Enterprise have? Stranded in hostile territory far from home much like the U.S.S.Voyager, it may become necessary for them to build a multiple-purpose shuttle/Runabout like the Delta Flyer, albeit with UNSC, Gou’ald, and Ancient tech instead of Borg Collective tech. One of the Enterprise’s larger cargo bays could be converted into a hangar or secondary shuttlebay for the construction, repair, and maintenance of auxiliary spacecraft.

The Federation signed the Treat of Algeron which made it illegal to develop or use cloaking devices, but there’s nothing to stop Xander, Cortana, and the surviving Val Jean crew from trying to build a cloaking device. Otherwise, the Enterprise will be a sitting duck as it travels through Gou’ald-controlled space fiefdoms.

Assuming that the Enterprise will eventually return to Earth, will the ship’s sensors be able to detect the Ancient outpost in Antarctica? If the Enterprise discovers the outpost before Stargate Command does, they could take tricorder scans of the Control Chair and teleport a few Drone Weapons back to the Enterprise before the American military tries to take control of the outpost. The Enterprise has a limited number of photon torpedoes, so taking a few Drone Weapons would be practical. Also, a neural interface head-set derived from tricorder scans of the Control Chair could be added to the Enterprise’s bridge; this would reduce Cortana’s burden and allow her to devote more processing power to other tasks.
Review By [johnjr] • Date [28 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One - Where quite a few have gone before" from polychan
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One should never ignore a potential source of information, so it’d be smart if Xander used tractor beams to gather debris from Moloc’s Ha’tak and the Val Jean for study and reserve-engineering, as Ishta’s shuttlecraft lacks many systems a Ha’tak possesses. If all else fails, the collected debris can be recycled for raw materials like Naquadah and other exotic components.

In DS9 and Voyage, there were many instances of certain technologies not being fully compatible with each other, a problem that could plague Xander and Cortana as they try to improve the Enterprise. Chief O’Brian was run ragged trying to keep DS9’s mish-mash of Cardassian and Federation tech working right, and Voyager couldn’t use the Sikarian trajectory matrix (“Prime Factors”).

Could Stargate’s Quantum Mirror give Chakotay, B’Elanna, and Tuvok a clue on how to return to their home reality? The Quantum Mirror was introduced in season1 (“There But for the Grace of God”) and destroyed in season3 (“Point of View”). One version of the Daedalus had an Alternate Reality Drive based off of the Quantum Mirror (“the Daedalus Variations”).

The Enterprise has its own scans of Nero's Narada, which B'Elanna would enjoy studying and use as a source of inspiration for upgrading her new home-away-from-home.

Semi-OT: One design Stargate Command could give to NASA is the Bajoran lightship (“Explorers”), which had solar sails to capture ions for non-FTL propulsion. This would lower NASA’s operating costs and boost the development of civilian spaceflight by a decade.
Review By [polychan] • Date [27 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from SeniorFleetCaptain
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well it is a good start but I am waiting to see how you bring in SG-1 and the rest of the SGC
Review By [SeniorFleetCaptain] • Date [27 Feb 13] • Rating [6 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from LFW
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B'Elanna is an excellent addition to the cast you are building.
I find the mixing very interesting.
Too bad Seska is probably going to betray everyone to the snakes because they are cousins
Hoping for more soon
Thanks
Review By [LFW] • Date [26 Feb 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One - Where quite a few have gone before" from Macfeste
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I like this, more than I thought I would. I hope you don't abandon it. I almost didn't read it, because of the "Nu" thing. Glad I did. Spelling and Grammar is spot on as well. Good job, looking forward to seeing where you take it.

I think Cortana has the right idea, BTW. One of the things I hate about some YAHF's is the "Buffy tries to change Xander back" trope, and it looks like you'll be avoiding that. Keep up the good work.
Review By [Macfeste] • Date [26 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from johnjr
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Are Janus and Q the same entity?

Can Cortana remotely tap into the internet and send an e-mail message to the Scooby Gang, or Jenny's cyber-coven, or Clan Kalderash? It'd let them know Xander is alive, and magic could help cure Cortana's future rampancy.

It’d be reasonable for Vulcan and Bajoran biology to respond differently to Goa’uld possession; an allergic reaction to Naquadah, or causing Seska’s latent Cardassian DNA to activate, or premature Pon'far mating instincts, etc.

Aside from technology, StarTrek-based medical knowledge could give Stargate Command a means to safely remove Goa’uld implanted into hosts, as well as possibly (1)duplicate Samantha Carter’s ability to detect Goa’uld presences and (2)invent a neural implant or hypospray inoculation to help someone fight off parasitic possession so they retain some degree of control over their bodies.

Can non-humans be given the ATA gene? The Atlantis crew came up with a gene therapy treatment to increase the number of ATA individuals.

The Tok’ra lack a Queen and suffer from zero to negative population growth, but Federation medical knowledge could convert a willing Tok’ra (like Anise) into a Queen via gene therapy, surgical modification, and hypospray treatments. There a few trans-species individuals: Seska converted herself into a Bajoran, and Arne Darvin from “The Trouble with Tribbles” was a Klingon who became human.
Review By [johnjr] • Date [26 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from polychan
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Can replicators made synthetic Naquadah? The Star Trek series never delved into the full ramifications of being able to manipulate matter and energy on an industrial level. Studying how the Stargate converts and transports matter over galactic distances could refine replicator abilities.

Xander or Cortana should specify how many people are needed to staff a skeleton crew: the original Enterprise had a crew complement of 430 while Picard’s ship had +1000. This new starship from the reboot “Star Trek” movie is closer to Picard’s size in terms of size and bulk. On the plus side, having the whole ship to themselves without Federation oversight means Xander, Chakotay, B’Elanna, Seska, and Tuvok have far more flexibility to modify rooms to suit their personal tastes, such as tearing down the wall between two senior officer quarters to create a five-room apartment suite, or building a Holodeck, or Chakotay turning the arboretum into his own private meditation room, etc. Don't be afraid to let Xander have some fun with the resources at his disposal; all work and not play makes Jack a dull boy.

How often does the Enterprise need to refuel its anti-matter supply, electro-plasma, or what-have-you? I was thinking that to converse finite resources, Xander may consider installing a secondary FTL propulsion system on the Enterprise.

The universal translator is partially based off of artificial telepathy as it identifies mental concepts by scanning brainwave activity and then analyze what words someone says when thinking about a specific idea or concept. The underlying mechanisms for the universal translator could be used to create a lie-detector or artificial empathic senses similar to Deanna Troy the half-Betazoid counselor of the Enterprise-D. Even if such a machine is large and not portable, it’d let Cortana sense the emotions of her crew which would help her retain the humanity she absorbed from Miss Jenny Calendar the Techno-Pagan Gypsy.

In real-life, studies into what is known as brain-reading or brain fingerprinting attempt to scan what a person is thinking, beginning in the mid-90s but not taking off until the early 2000s. They’ve had limited success where subjects try to get speakers or monitors to display the words or images they’re thinking of, and have been used in a few criminal investigations with mixed results.
Review By [polychan] • Date [25 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from Robby
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Great chapter!

Really looking forward to seeing how Xander handles things.

Will they ever end going to a Star Trek uni for a time?
Review By [Robby] • Date [25 Feb 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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