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Ship of the Line: Leviathan Jr.

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Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from JediKnight
Review:
Very nice job on the update, I'm hoping to read more.

-Also, you may want to try and rewrite the summery abit to get rid of the term 'one-shot'.
Review By [JediKnight] • Date [7 Mar 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Aille
Review:
Looks to be interesting, but you may want to change your discription since this is no longer a one shot.
Review By [Aille] • Date [7 Mar 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from LordCorwin
Review:
snicker*chortle*laughing out loud
Review By [LordCorwin] • Date [7 Mar 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from BlueEyedJedi
Review:
I'm glad to see this continue. It's good that Xander is resisting Dawn's advances, for reason beyond the obvious. Consider that in a moment of excitement, Dawn fired on the Mir Station, what would have happened if Xander gave in to her advances, and rocked her world, she could have destroyed Australia.

I look forward to Dawn's reunion with her mom.

TTFN
Review By [BlueEyedJedi] • Date [7 Mar 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Bobboky
Review:
I think Xander should claim that the ship is lost as it is still very young... ie not old/big enough to leave home without supervision.
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [6 Mar 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Bobboky
Review:
very good work
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [6 Mar 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Genuka
Review:
It would be hilarious if the only message they sent off to the SGC at the moment was "Sorrysorry! It was an accident!" *laughs histarically!*
Review By [Genuka] • Date [6 Mar 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Gideon
Review:
Hah! I had to laugh at the thought of a spaceship jumping and jiving trying to see if she had girl bits or boy bits! And now they owe an apology to the SGC and the poor guys on Mir!
Comments from author:
Imagine she had done it in Earth orbit, where the SGC could have seen it...

Can a spaceship blush?
Review By [Gideon] • Date [6 Mar 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from (Past Donor)ScottWanderer
Review:
I think liadefan forgot to read the challenge... On another note Talyn formed a symbiotic bond with Crais. The only way for Joyce to really take command woiuld be to kill Xander and hope Dawn lived through the psychic backlash. Unless whe went as a female version of Stark the only being known to have bonded with a Leviathan other than Pilot's race and even that was short term. Really the best she could hope for is to appoint herself XO and keep tabs on them.
Review By [(Past Donor)ScottWanderer] • Date [6 Mar 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from AlecMcDowell
Review:
Oh, Dawn. This is why you don't let 12 year olds pilots ships, let alone BECOME one. Interesting to see that she has weapons though; I haven't watched enough of Farscape to see if that's usual, I just know that Moya did not possess any.

I really loved the line 'and why are they talking as if the represent the Earth'. It kinda made me go hey yeah! Why does this *American* facility think they can represent everybody? It makes me kind of want Giles to get in contact with the Brits and force a confrontation through them.
Comments from author:
Moya's son, Talyn, was a Leviathan/Peacekeeper hybrid. He was generally more aggressive looking, and metalic red/black. And he had one mean cannon.
http://farscape.wikia.com/wiki/Talyn
Review By [AlecMcDowell] • Date [6 Mar 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from liadenfan
Review:
I think that there has to be a change of command and additions to the crew in the very near future. Once Joyce is informed about the changes to her younger daughter, she will immediately demand to be taken to her. And, while she may believe that 'Xander is a “nice young man”, she will not allow him to remain in command of her 12 year old daughter. So, a near immediate CoC followed by appointing 'Xander her XO and OIC of the embarked Marine Detachment. Of which there are presently only two members, with a third to be inducted in the near future.

After discussions with Giles, she may offer him the position of CO's Advisor on HSTs. She may also ask Jenny and Willow to be her Science Officer and Assistant Science Officer. After Kendra is added to the MARDET, Joyce may ask her watcher to join the crew. As far as additional crew, who is to say that ‘Xander didn’t win a bet with various classmates. Also, after helping Dawn with her costume, maybe Joyce (being a fan of the show) went down to Ethan’s and picked up a generic Captain’s or Flag Officer’s uniform from the same show.

After assuming command, she would probably respond to General Hammond’s messages by informing him that the damage to the ISS was due to an accident by an inexperienced crew member. The crew member would be given additional training and she would offer to make reparations for the accidental damage to the Space Station.
Review By [liadenfan] • Date [6 Mar 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from HMaxMarius
Review:
OopsImreallyreallyreallysorryIonlyjustbecamealivingshipandIkindasneezedand
pleasedon'tshootatmeitwasanaccidentandmypilot'snotevenhererightnowandI
don'twanttodieandIreallyreallymeanI'mSOOOooooooorrrrrrryyyyy!


;P
Review By [HMaxMarius] • Date [6 Mar 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from banditdoz
Review:
Hahahahaha
Review By [banditdoz] • Date [6 Mar 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Lithie
Review:
OH GODS!! It's so hilarious!!!

And the SGC harassing them on radio doesn't help them freaking out in peace. lol
Review By [Lithie] • Date [6 Mar 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from (Past Donor)ScottWanderer
Review:
This is great.

Somehow i don't think "We had a weapons malfunction. But we're okay here. How are you?" Is gonna cover it, but i can so see Xander trying.
Comments from author:
I might have to steal that idea for the next chapter :P
Review By [(Past Donor)ScottWanderer] • Date [6 Mar 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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